Praised comments by Cindy

Dreams (9)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-09-13

Nitin
This is so sad. Yet your words ring so true.

There are dreams we all travel
Some bring smiles and some fear
Been walking on a long road
With thoughts that are never clear

How many places life takes us that we never dream we will go. One never knows what tomorrow will bring our way.

Drowning in my own eyes
Laughing on my own cries
Seeking truth in my own lies
Rising when my soul dies

Great imagery within this stanza. I feel the daily struggles in your mind. How hard it is to hold up to the pressures of life.

There are dreams we all travel
Some make us rise and some fall
Been riding this tide alone
Struggling while life takes its toll

It is hard when we feel like we have to walk through life alone without anyone understanding what we really feel inside.

Left alone within my mind
Searching for serenity
If only I could see the truth
What really lives inside me

I think if you look hard enough you will see what I see a man full of kindness and compassion.
Excellent job yaar!
Love you
Cindy

Our Love (8)
by Sourav

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-08-08

Sourav
What a beautiful passion filled piece you have penned.

Beyond any utmost expectation
More than my moony wishful dream
You love me;
The whispering sensation-
Inside the heart, spirit of love beams
They can't see;

the secrets of our hearts that others can't see where we hold our most tender feelins. This stanz says so many things. mostly I feel the special love that is always meant to be.

Deepness of your eyes
And the sweetness of your rosy lips -
Pure delight;
I can see love, where it lies
Feel the presence in my soul and its grip
In sleepless night;

Love so deep .sometimes thinking of it keeps us from sleep. The purest form.

Your voice most tender
Touches deep core of my heartstring
Like a song;
I'm lost in this splendour
Life flourishes like boundless sea, grows as spring
All along;

Everything is so much brighter when we have someone to share our lives with...your words are shining.

We love, in delight and beauty
Do not fear- denying life's every sly trick
In fun;
As two hearts hold a mystery
Whilst love's unveiling a spell of magic
To make them one.

So absolutly beautiful
Excellent job!
~Clapping~
Cindy

Fallen (9)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-06-07

Nitin
What a dark intense write. The imagery is great and so are your word choices.

Lush garden behind the church
Moonlight ensures every move made
Echoing thoughts of consequences
Once again the voice within fades

The setting here is spine chilling. The darkness and the moonlight shining down bringing a eerie glow on things.

Memories wrapped in needles
Like my golden wedding ring
Box with collection of tears
Safely in hands of suffering

This is such a sad stanza. Like the vows you said mean nothing anynore. Just pain and heartache now closed in a little box.

Surrendering religion with shame
Digging deep as if for treasure
Hiding my thoughts down below
Falling in the name of pleasure

You have really painted a picture with your words for the readers mind.

Serpents won't starve tonight
As its time to wait for rain
Nightmares don't come to dead
Finally church consumes my pain

What a sad and painful end.

Excellent!
Love Cindy

Heart Of Stone (8)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-06-01

Let me be the first one to say Congrats for winning the image contest in the club yaar :)

~Clapping~Clapping~Clapping~


If things changed by closing our eyes
And only true love could silence screams
What difference would have been left
Between reality and beautiful dreams

Sometimes it is hard to tell the difference between reality and dreams. Love this stanza.

Am I like any other common man
Who wants more than they need
Considering satisfaction as just a level
Which comes after their greed

I think most of us are guilty of wanting more then we really need to try to ,ake life easier....the times we live in it is getting harder everyday just to survive.

Will we look inside to find peace
And not judge life which we can't change
Bitter words bleed the heart we love
Yet in the end we are all the same

Inside we are all the same Nitin.....we all bleed, we all feel, we all hurt, and we all love.

We humans would never understand
Reflections on the other side of fence
While smiles say a thousand words
Color won't make a tiny difference

If there were more people who looked inside at the person instead of the shell that houses our hearts and souls....it would be a much better world for us to live in.

There you stand Lord embracing this world
Consuming every human's pain
Hearing thoughts before they reach lips
And forgiving sins again and again

How may hours are spent praying...I wonder sometimes If I pray for the wrong things.

The sun will rise again tomorrow
Will the world have changed at all
Beauty reflecting through the trees
How many more lives will have to fall

Everyday ends and a new one comes and has anything really changed at all? We can change things a little at a time.....even if we are just one.

Despite your arms around my shoulder
Still feel I'm standing naked all alone
Though I'm not the only one feeling this
It's as if my heart has turned to stone

What a fantastic ending yaar. Your talent is really shining in this poem.....very deservong win :)

Love you
Cindy

Shadows of Towering Trees (9)
by Courageous Dreamer

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-04-08

What a great piece you have penned.

Sunshine beams downward,
casting shadows of towering trees
(nearly exact replicas of each other)

Really nice imagery allpwing the reader to see these trees in the sunshine.

Lovely grasses painted in patches
of various tints of brown and green,
close their eyes, hiding behind shade.

I feel as if I'm watching this scene of spring. The beauty it brings to the eartrh.

American flag sways with the breeze,
trees shiver as they are touched
by nature's chilly spring breath.

I see here tender new leaves just coming to life. Not use to the cold. Early spring not yet warmed enough by the spring sun.

Great Job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Subjective Morality (Collab with TJ BECKER Arizona Eagle) (9)
by Italian Stallion

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-03-23

You guys did a great job on your collab.


Oh my virtuous friend how can you be so blind
not seeing the serpent that lives inside your mind?
He lurks in the corners where no thoughts dare to go
waiting for the moment his venom starts to flow.
Fangs dripping chaos, hate and discontent
paralyze it's victims with the syrup of heinous torment.


This really paints a chilling picture for the mind of the reader. Great word choices.


Blackened souls arising, blood flowing free...
lingering thoughts running through sharp debris.
Re-occurring reverberations echo in the night,
vivid white gleams of light adding unpleasant fright.
Coldness accompanies the bleak and passionless atmosphere
while the morbid demonic images continue to persevere.


Reading this poem gave me chills up my spine. The verses just pull you right into the depths of the piece. The imagery is awesome.


Absorbing all the discord that is faced each day,
decomposing merit, smell the malodor of decay.
Diabolical walking corpse wriggling with worms of doubt,
larva filled with iniquity is nurtured soon to sprout.
Light did not understand the dark that took control
death of morality, birth of Mephistophelean is now whole.


you guys really created a very vivid piece. This verse made me feel sick. The images that your words have brought to mind are like watching a horror movie. Just the thought of a walking corpse wriggling with worms made me cringe.

Once again reverberations getting closer than before
almost like it's at the door - ready to explore.
Whispers of death, sounds of laughter roam deep within,
intensified gloomy images appear with dark evil grins.
Is this echo in the night a true imagination -
or is it indeed a real manifestation?


I should have never read this before trying to go to sleep....LOL....awesome job TJ and Joe!
Take Care
Cindy

Landscape of the Lonely (9)
by ben thompson

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-03-19

What a unique way to write for the image contest. I would have nevere thought to write from the view of the fence post. Congrats for winning 2nd place with this poem :)

Across and open field far beyond the shady trees.
Underneath a changeable sky, stirs a gentle breeze.

Your imagery and word choices for this piece are awesome. Your words really brought the picture to life.

Built sturdy and strong my owner long since passed.
Back in the good old days, things were built to last.

You make the reader conect with this piece of wood as they read your words. It is almost like it comes to life.

Standing proud and rugged many years of service I've done.
Solitude in my secluded home, service below a beating sun.

I love the way the wood relates to the reader telling it's life story. Making you feel his pain and loneliness.

A prisoner to this ground confinement sealed long ago.
Only companion blades of grass swaying slightly to and fro.

The slolitude of only blades of grass as compainions. Your only entertainment watching them move in the wind.

Seemed like another life when I was tall with emerald leaves.
Axe man's blade fell swiftly, brought me violently to my knees.

Wow these lines really hit the heart...the pain of being felled by the axe. Violent just like the tree is a victim of a crime and then sentenced to spend a life sentence as a post.

Now only but a shadow, though my grain still firm and strong.
Never believed my sad existence would ever last this long.

You can feel the post wishing he would perish from termites or dry rot :( How sad.

Doomed to the landscape of the lonely my story I do tell.
Damned, empty and all alone in the beauty of my hell.

Awesome ending...the beauty of the landscape is punishing to the fence post who is stuck umable to move.
Excellent job!
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Death lurking near (11)
by Dixiedaisy

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-03-16

Kay what a heart gripping piece.

Tap tap tap upon the door
Who could it be at this hour?
Sleep is imminent
but at what cost?

Sometimes we pray for the end to come to those we love so much. Their pain more then we can bare to see. They hold on for reasons known only to them.

Watching the clock knowing not the hour
Stillness of combined breaths
yet from the living
trying to breathe for him when it's not possible
His breaths becoming

Ragged
Weak
Raspy
Failing

This pains such a vivid picture at the dath bed of someone who is so tired but keeps trying to live. It is so hard to read this without crying.

Like it would do any good we are

Stirring
Staring
Pacing
Praying

Praying...for what we are not sure

For the end?
End to the pain
for his suffering
or ours?

I have asked myself that question so many times through the years. I don't think we will ever have the answer.

Movement evolves from a frail body,
Is it a restoration of strength
Or just death moving in closer?

Tap Tap Tap upon the door
Who could it be at this hour
Sleep is imminent
But at what cost?

Maybe just hoping the family will not fall apart when they are gone. People don't realize that when someone is dying and they think they can't hear...They can. Things are said that should not be. That is who will pay in the end. Just the thought of material things meaning more then the person is so heart wrenching.
Excellent!
Love Cindy

Awake Again (7)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-03-14

Debbie
I love the way you wrote as the tree. This turned out really great.


Icy winter slumber
Sap still in my veins
Waiting for a Springtime kiss
To wake me up again

so much imagery..waiting for the kiss of spring.to wake the sleeping leaves. I loved these lines.

Warmth from sun, gentle rain
Soft lit starry nights
Sweet birds in the morning
Basking in the light

Very vivid picture for the readers mind.

Reaching up to heaven
Brushed by gentle breeze
Bowing to a thunderstorm
Brought down to my knees

Part of this stanza reminds me of a poem Johnny wrote. I love the way you have the branches reaching to Heaven.

Welcome Spring! I live again!
Arms are open wide
Warmed by sun, I've just become
Awake again inside

Great end Deb. Your talent shines once again.
Love you
Cindy

Poet of Misfortune #1 (9)
by Illuminati RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-03-14

Alfred
How much sadness can one endure...Your words cry for a love that is not returned. Great imagery and word choices.

Still I etch these whispering soul-tears
Into the empty pages of my life
For your existence has lit up my darkness
And I have become a bleeding pen
In Love's hand
Writing, night after night,
When you are a sleep
So when dawn welcomes your beauty
I can lay these verses at your feet
To let your eyes read about The One
You keep turning away from

This verse brings tears to my eyes. Maybe one day she will see the wonderful man we all see.
Just beautiful!
Cindy

Sweet Child of Gaza (23)
by Illuminati RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-09

Alferd
What a heart wrenching piece. The emotions scream from your words.

But you must leave
The crimson echoes of your past behind
Take a step onward,
Move out
From the forgotten corner of
Humanity's stage,
Forget the days of nevermore
Be your vacant existence
Filled with love again...

The images you have painted for the readers eyes are some of the saddest I have invisioned :(

Breathe!

Hope!

Weep!

Let your tears stream,
Onto the ground they must descend
To make moist with the dust of time
And from the nourishing clay of tomorrow
Life's primrose will grow
And bloom on the distant hills of evermore
Where unborn children play
Filling the air with sweet songs
As they wait for their forthcoming mother's
Loving embrace...

The beauty of hope that tomorrow will come. Life will go on....so sad we as humans must destroy so much and take so many innocent lives. For WHat!
~Bravo~Bravo~
My dear friend you are shinning with this one.
Love Cindy

Hi (11)
by ben thompson

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-06

This is really a beautiful poem. I love the imagery.

Thanking my good fortune, holding you close to my heart.
Praying to the Lord above, our lives paths will never part.

Just when things are at their darkest.....it seems we always find a light to bring us hope. That someone who brings smiles back to our life.

Lying entranced, your head on my shoulder under a velvet sky.
Two lovers found each other, it all started with a simple, "hi".

I love the simpleness of the ending. We find things in the least expected places. Sometime they have been right in front of us the entire time.
Great job!
Love Cindy

The Old Man (10)
by Sylvia A

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-03

This poem is heart wrenching.

The old man sits by the window each and every day.
At times a smile erupts on his face.
His lips move slowly and silently,
as if he is talking to someone, unseen by prying eyes.

It is so hard to sit alone talking to our love that has left before us.

Memories of a time long ago, flooding his mind.
A time when he shared life with his beloved wife.
A perfect match for him, one made in heaven.
How he misses the days they spent together.

No matter how many years go by the pain is still there. Nothing can fill those days that were spent with your love.

He remembers the walks, hand in hand, they took.
The talks of dreams they both shared.
A lifetime filled with an everlasting love,
no regrets or sorrows, now no tomorrows.

The tomorrows are the hardest to face. Being alone.

Patiently, he waits for the time when they are reunited,
their life to continue as husband and wife.
Once more his life will be complete, when they meet again,
and he will no longer have to sit by that window, waiting.

The wait for your time is the hardest.

Excellent job!
Take care Cindy

Erase my lonely heart (9)
by ben thompson

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-29

This piece is really beautiful yet heart breaking. Great imagery and word choices.

Perfect ponds tranquility now ripples on a breeze.
Green emerald leaves rustling through the trees.

what a beautiful picture this stanza paints. I can almost hear the rustling leaves.

Even natures splendor can't quell this broken heart.
Every minute an eternity since we've been apart.

When we are apart from someone we love so much if through death or breakup....time seems to almost stop.


Imagining your hazel eyes, with their sparkling glow.
Lasting memories of your caress, passionate and slow.

Isn't it funny when we are apart from our love how thoughts of them seem to occupy our minds. Remembering every little thing about them.

Recollection of our laughter I recall and fondly smile.
Wretched drinking helps a little, if only for a while.

Then our hearts break so much you just want to forget everything.

Shedding sorrows tears in paradise warm sands.
Why you left me all alone, I'll never understand.

It is always painful when you find out someone you love with all that you are doesn't feel the same way.


Our true love crushed forever shattered all apart.
Nothing of this world can erase my lonely heart.

I love your ending.....this poem brought tears to my eyes when I read it......very heart touching poem.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Last Lonely Night (5)
by AngelDust

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-11-09

Dani
What a sad poem. So much truth has been captured in your words.

Torn from reality,
Detached from the dream,
And for the first time,
They'll actually hear me scream.

How many times do we sit in the darkness silently screaming hoping someone will hear. Maybe one day they will.

Clinging to the emptiness,
All I've come to know,
Accustomed to the loneliness,
I only want to go.

This is so sad. That one can get accustmed to loneliness. Yet we are looking for something more.

Lying in the darkness,
Lost from the light,
Finally I'll make this,
My last lonely night.

Perfect ending to this sad piece.
Excellent job!
Take care
Love Cindy

Sunset Sonata (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-11-03

XD
This is so passionate. I love the metaphors :)

Sunset sonata, from misty eyes
Within your gaze my fantasies lie
Sorrows quelled upon deep cherry lips
Beyond the stars, as sensation rips

The vision this creates makes you want to just get lost in your words of love.

Evanesced be the nigh of night
As this ecstatic soul makes its flight
In memories young our twilight song
Deep in your heart, I'll always belong

The best kind of love. The one that stays deep within ones heart. Breathtaking piece.
Awesome job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Despairity (Triquatrain ) (13)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-11-03

Rachel
You did a fantastic job on this form.

Sands of time, a world sublime
This unforgiving life
Try you may, and though you pray
The pain cuts like a knife

You know as I read your words I felt your pain and every tear you cried.


Easier each day, or so they say
Time will heal the saying goes
Tightening rope, loosing hope
Despair that no one knows

I have felt this despair. Time doesn't heal the pain. You just become comfortable with it because there is no other way to survive.


Thinking negative, no more to give
Live each day as it's your last
If you were gone, they would go on
Left with memories of the past

Yes they do go on. Tomorrow is never promised. Try to find the good you have. Even in the smallest things.

Gone but not forgotten, begotten
A shame things turned out this way
When in need, a friend indeed
Came to save the day

You know no matter how dark things get for you. My hand is there for you to hold. Just like I held yours when you were little.
Excellent job on this write.
I love you
Aunt Cindy

Footprints in the Sand (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-26

XD
this piece is filled with sadness. Great imagery and word choices.

Rivulets merge as an ocean
Cadence of tears unshed
Wavelets of grief in motion
Through minds of hearts long dead

The thought of dead hearts brings tears to the eye. This stanza is really heart breaking.

Lonesome walk down lane of past
As dancing ripples sigh it all
While out the turmoil casts
On sands a new trail is scrawled

It is such a lonely walk alone searching your memories with no one to share them with you.

Imprints to sweet oblivion
As sunset dips its gaze
Endlessly on yond horizon
The last of love's dying rays

Funny how we think of love and sun as one and broken hearts with darkness.
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Thread of Love (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-26

XD
This is such a beautiful breath taking poem. Awesome use of metaphors.

Guide thee on with a smile
Through dark and lonely dreams
Embroidering skies of love
Where wishing stars may gleam

What a vision you have painted for the minds eye. So uplifting :)

Soothing away thy fears
Softly my fingers caress
Found thy eternal respite
As lay thou upon my chest

Reading this brings such a peaceful feeling. The warmth of being loved.

With adroit fingers of love
Our patchwork entwines at last
Tenderly through thy sleep
Saccharine escapades have cast

Lovely ending to a wonderful piece.
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))

From Dawn to Dusk (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-26

XD
So much sadness captured in this piece.

Hours ticking as days
Merging to long empty nights
Memories cradled abreast
As a lonely heart takes flight

I pray for the day that a lonely heart can take flight.

Promises of foregone days
Echo in the restless mind
Broken dreams linger
As peace I try to find

I think peace from losing your true love will not be found untill you are reunited in death.

Soft tears caress the sleep
The heart a hollow vessel
From dawn to silent dusk
Bereft; a grieving angel

Perfect ending for this piece. So many times we wake to a wet pillow from tears that are cried in our dreams.
Excellent!
((((hugs))))
Cindy

Rainy Day (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-23

XD
Your poems always seem to echo my feelings. You did a great job on this.


Been left in the rain for years
A forsaken heart is crying
Though Heaven shares my lonely tears
Deep within lost soul is sighing

It seems when we lose the one we love we are left with nothing but rain and darkness. No matter how the sun is shining.

Rainy days bring back memories
Of sweet, happy times we shared
Now drifting leaves are all I see
Silence has become too much to bear

The silence is the hardest part especially as the night time comes. I would give anything to just hear his voice once more.

Foregone moments ticking by
Ever slow to the yearning mind
Gazing to grey stormy sky
No more the joy could I find

It is hard to find joy when you feel so lost. So you start to pretend for the sake of others.

Rain thins to a drizzling stop
Rainbow shines amidst blue once more
Though hope shimmers o'er mountaintop
How I wish again for the skies to pour

I love this ending. When the skies are gray and raining it feels more like someone is feeling your pain.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Dances of Love (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-12

XD
This a bit different then what you usually write. The imagery and word choices are great. So much pain and sadness held within your words.

Echoing plea to wilderness
Resonating deep in heart
Amidst grief's vast distant dunes
Rest two dreamers apart

The love is so full of pain that he is shouting his hurt to the wildnerness hearing only an echo as his reply. This makes the pain that much worse for there is no one to find comfort from.

Once azure sky in gaze
Amidst fluffy clouds of love
Jealousy's tainted grey
Stormy years of tears above

Jealousy is the worst enemy to lovers. It can damage love more then anything else. Usually not to be repaired.
Great job!
(((hugs)))

Forever and Always (4)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-09

XD
What a beautiful poem of love you have penned.

Forever and always
My love for you will stay
Melting frozen hearts
Wiping autumn's tears away

A Always and forever love is one that never dies. This love always fills our hearts. Memories giving us comfort.

Through lonely silent nights
Beckon to a distant star
The moon my smile for you
Serenading the gem you are

How everything you see reminds you of the feelings you have in your heart for that forever love.

My song will sing for years
Beneath the rain and shine
Lingering eternally
In our souls entwined

I love this stanza the two souls entwined together forever.

This flame will burn with no end
A beacon guiding you on
Through the greyest darkest mist
Warming you as you roam

The warm feeling thoughts of this love bring to the heart.

Forever and always
Wings of our love will fly
Deep in our hearts
Towards eternity's sky

Once again together taking that eternal flight.
Just beautiful xD
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Thunder of Love (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-09

XD
What a unique poem. I love the way you used the storm to reflect love.

Heaven emits a shotgun blast
Rattling turbulent skies of grey
Blue speck of hope in heart blooms
Into a shimmering azure day

The strength of the storm echos the strength of this love. Great imagery.

Winds howl a melancholic tune
Carrying my sighs of love to you
Upon thunderclouds my passion rules
Resounding adoration deep and true

What a strong wind these storms carry. With a love so strong that it can withstand the winds of any storm.

Thunder of love paints misty skies
Shakes not the perfect blue within
Your enchanting whisper a peal away
Magically caressing my skin

What a endearing stanza. The calm after the storm. The gentleness of a perfect love is felt in your words.

Tears of happiness the heavens pour
God's testament of truth to you
Mother's torrents a welcoming shroud
To embrace the forever of two

A true love that is blessed from the Heavens.
Wonderful job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Worthy Gold (4)
by Mr Darcy

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-07

Michael
A beautiful poem. Feeling the morning coming after a long night. The imagery and word choices are awesome.

Moon beams dancing
behind my eyes.
The swirl of dawn
whispers sunrise.

After a long night the coming of morning such a welcoming sight :)

Silent magic
raises her face,
crimson flowing,
sky draped with lace.

The vision you have painted with your words is magical. It made me feel as if I was right there watching this beautiful sunrise.

Smiling over
young and old,
freedom is a
worthy gold.

I can feel the warmth of the sun smiling on me Micheal. The freedom of being a part of this awesome morning is fantastic :)
~Bravo~
((hugs))
Cindy

Soul of Winter (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-05

XD
This is such a heart touching piece with wonderful imagery.

Chills within a frozen heart
Quietly preserved by time
Hush of the lonely years
Where only silence chimed

This stanza really tugs at the heart. Chilled by the silence of being without the one you love.

Fragments of his shattered heart
Rest still in her icy hands
Bereaved chills relentless
Across empty ivory lands

I know this feeling so well. Losing your love shatters the heart.

Sun of solace shining
Melts not the glacial soul
Without her love to be
How may he remain whole

Living without your love is like losing half of yourself. Making it hard to keep going.
Great job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Silent Night (edited) (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-04

XD
What a beautiful passion filled piece. The imagery is great.

Silent night, all feels right
Come dance with me tonight
Pristine moon, play your tune
Serenade vast distant dunes

I love this stanza reminds me of dancing through a dream.

Nightingale, don your veil
Lead us on a starlit trail
Shooting star, fly afar
Fill our desires' wishing jar

Having all your wishes come true. I can see the night sky filled with shooting stars.
Great job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Lovers' Concerto (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-04

XD
You seem to be filled with a never ending stream of words.

How gentle is the rain
That falls softly on the meadow
Sun peeking from her gentle shroud
Behind a shimmering rainbow

This stanza paints such an image of the beauty one sees when they are in love.

Birds high upon the trees
Serenade with their melody
Winds sighing through the hills
Whispering come and follow me

You can almost hear the birds singing their song. Such a peaceful feeling.


You hold me in your arms
And say once again you love me
A perfect day made just for two
To dance their passion eternally

A perfect ending.
Great job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Silent Portrait (2)
by Beautiful Chaos

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-01

What a sad piece. Very heart touching.

Time erased the love we held
Lonely came to grace
Forever never was enough
To hold us in this place

How often do we rush into things we aren't ready for. Great imagery.

Empty home, frozen windows
Abandoned, lonesome dreams
Shattered by the selfishness
That filled our fighting screams

Loved the word choices in this stanza. Paints such a sad picture for the minds eye.

Now there's nothing here to find
Except what's in my head
Soundless pictures of the love
We killed and left for dead

Great ending. How many times do we think our love will last forever. Love is so blind to the things we don't want to see.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy

Memories Come Alive (In Verses) (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-30

XD
What a sad yet beautiful piece you have penned. Thius is such a heart touching poem. Excellent imagery and word choices.

Ink to paper I honor thee
Thou who gave me the memories
In tears' deluge my words take shape
Sodden verses, nay, a sweet escape

I love this stanza. How a poet can captyre the emotions of love within their words.

Come alive oh, the lonely nights
Thou who bestowed me no respite
Within my breast a dying swan's song
'Twas in thine heart, mine soul belonged

How well so many know this feeling a love so deep and true..without the heart of your love your soul dies.

Speak to me oh, our sunset years
Twilight that glints my oceans' tears
Love hath waned as dusk of thee
Resigned to grief, nay, my destiny

How hard it is to grow old and have time move forward for the one left waiting alone.

Wing if thou may, to sorrows' lay
Here I weep for our younger days
A nimble hand may relive our dawn
Of memories yet, they cannot respawn

How many tears are shed for years to return to the times whe we were happy.

Excellent job on this!
~Clapping~
Cindy

Colors of Love (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-23

XD
What a sad yet beautiful piece you have penned. Awesome imagery and word choices.

Pearly fingers of winter
Touch upon the bitter ground
Ivory tears of heaven
Descend without a sound

This is such a vivid stanza. Your word choices here just cause the image to open up this wonderful picture for the minds eye.

Starkness weeps for the green
Iciness had taken away
Opaque winds still sighing
In my yearning heart of gray

I can feel the sadness from your words your entire being wanting to be loved again.

Proud purple mountains tall
Cloaked in pristine sheens of white
Joy faded from gaze of blue
When sunset waned to night

The night brings on the sadness of being alone and without the joy of happier times.

Rainbow of spring tarries still
As grayness calls your name
Once azure skies of you
Obscured by hues of pain

The never ending pain of losing your true love. Causes your life to lose the color and to only see thinks through hues of black and greys. Very heart wrenching poem.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Without (14)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-23

Luanne
What a heart wrenching piece. I needed my box of tissues when I finished thisd poem.

Now feels like never
and close seems so far away
Moments tick as hours
foregone memories stay

How those memoreis stay with us. Making us ponder our future. Sometimes the memoreies that have caused us pain over shadow the happier ones.

Love a constant battle
fought between heart and mind
Painted smiles and eager kisses
passion and hate entwined

Love and hate are sometimes so closely related. Hopefully you will be able to let go of the pain. Look forward to a future of love.

Sun rises on darkened days
but rain continues to slither
Weeks and months hurry on
soul proceeds to wither

I hope the rain disappears for you and brings you sunshine and smiles. This is my wish for you. You deserve nothing less.

Time stands so very still
within this heart turned to stone
Without a promise of undying love
I'd rather go on my way alone

You make sure you have that promise of undying love. So you can move on to a lifetime of love and happiness.
Excellent job!
Love you
Cindy

Oath Breaker (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-23

XD
This really shows the emotion of a lost relashionship. When promises are broken.

Lonely winds blowing
Across empty greyish hues
Carrying one's sighs of regret
For a journey without clues

When things don't work out between two people there are many regrets.

Words of past lingering
An impregnable opaque mist
Silence sings within one's soul
That wanders still without a gist

Always wondering where things went wrong. What could have been done differently.


Song of lust long faded
Memories yet croon their woes
Divided by passion's crossroads
Unto grief the eternal foe

The memories will always linger.

'Twas but one promise gone sour
That invoked timeless flame of hate
Love's crusade ended; cold war begun
Paying the price for one's mistake

How quickly love can turn to hate. This is such a sad write.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Lost In The Past (2)
by AngelDust

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-20

Dani
This is such a heart breaking poem. So much pain crys from your words.

The memories are haunting,
The ones of my past,
Something I'm supposed to let go of,
Something that isn't supposed to last.

I don't think we can ever let go of those painful memories. Only learn to live with them. Because they have become a part of who we are.

And everywhere I turn,
There's something to remind me,
What happened to the happiness?
That I was supposed to see.

Hopefully Dani you will still be able to find happiness in your life.

And I could try to get life,
But I know I'll never understand,
All I want is someone,
Who won't let go of my hand.

I know that feeling so well. The need to have someone to make you feel safe and protected. Someone strong to lean on when life becomes to much to bare.

Because I'm screaming inside myself,
And I'm struggling to breathe,
And I need someone to hold me,
When I try to leave.

Your ending just rips at the heart. I hope you find that someone to hold you soon.
Great job on this piece Dani.
Take Care
Love Cindy

Lazy August Afternoon (Song) (4)
by Corinne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-20

Corinne
I loved this the first time I read it.

It's a Lazy August Afternoon
Hope it doesn't end too soon
I'm floating like a toy balloon
This Lazy August Afternoon

Such a feeling of peace and contentment...Just lazing back enjoying the day :)

Close my eyes and slip away
To Dreamland, Mars and Mandelay
So long world, I'?m on my way
Here I go, but here I stay

Love this stanza.....daydreaming taking a journey in your mind but never going anywhere.

Lolling and barefootin'
City sootin' on my patio
I say hello and wave one toe
To my neighbor way down below

This stanza made me smile....I can just picture you waving that toe saying hi to the neighbor below :)

Really enjoyed the read :)
Take Care
Cindy

Ocean of Tears (insomnia writing) (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-20

XD
You have painted a beautiful yet sad piece with your words.

Dreamy stare o'er ocean
Dusk ignites longing deep
Crimson waves roll in motion
Onto greying shores that weep

Wonderful imagery and word choices bring the reader right into your vision. I can see the rolling waves meeting the shore.

Silent years of agony
Spent without her tender love
Twilight nudges memories
Of two happy, carefree doves

So many things pull those memories to the surface. The days when there were happy times to share.

Letting sands trickle through hands
A passion that waned with time
Staying strong yet as a man
For sake of two hearts entwined

Beautiful stanza xD I love the entwined hearts,


Wanting not to see the shores
Yet something still draws me near
A sigh to the seas and more
For loneliness I still fear

We are always drawn back to the places where our fondest memories lay.

Gulls crying to emptiness
Sharing my yearning for you
Turning home before darkness
Still glancing back at view

The loneliness overtakes us. Yet we can always look back and remember those happier times.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Please Remember Me (edited) (8)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-20

XD
What a painfully sad piece. Heart wrenching.

Pain ebbs to a gentle sigh
Lingering on winds of time
Faded prints of yesteryears
Endless through sands rewind

Sometimes we can get lost in pain because it is all we remember. Trying to find the way our is almost impossible.

Knowing not the way to take
Silence has become too long
Hues of azure no comfort
When loneliness still sings it's song

Sitting night after night waiting, hoping for something to take away the pain and lonliness. Yet it is there engufing you in it's darkness.


How do I close grief's door
When love still haunts a mind
Turn away from days of you
Darkness is all I find

Grief's door never closes it just gets easier to hide the pain. It is like going through life in the dark.

Broken dreams echo
Thoughts of you still stay
Crying through lonely nights
Wishing you didn't go away

Always wishing that you will wake and everything was just a bad dream you are caught in. The reality hits you once again.
Loved the ending.
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Days Of The Oak (15)
by Genuine Lavender

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-14

This is a very powerful piece you have penned. Keeps the reader captivated till the end.

Gazing up toward the proudly flowering branches
beams of light flooded his eyes.
A glow of relief seeped through his flesh.
It seemed seeds of faith found
the way to grow in that weary heart.


Ths stanza speaks volumes. Finally feeling a sense of reason for being.


Perhaps those days of inspiration
can be recalled.
Perhaps that inner beauty can be revealed.
Because when he thought
he became remnant of a walking phantom,
the Oak was there, singing the chant of life
and ready to empower every impulse of him.

I love your ending. The Oak can withstand so much and still survive. The tree overcomes obsticles and continues to grow. A great message.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

Twilight Longing (Rispetto) (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-13

XD
You did an awesome job on this poetry form.

Twilight sings an empty tune
Sunset ignites dreams of you
Soon to call the lonely moon
Silence of night would ensue

How hauntingly sad this stanza is. Silence and loneliness consume our thoughts when we are left alone with just memories.

Summer's longing cleaving deep
Tears' ocean in stillness seeps
Turquoise fantasies ceased to be
Whispers of love, a memory

The time moves on for everyone except the lost souls who wait to be reunited with their lost love. Is the memory a real one or was it all just a dream. That we will soon wake from.

Very moving poem. This piece really touched me deeply.
Excellent job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Winter's Reverie (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-11

XD
You have created another beauty with your pen.

Dusk of summer wanes to night
In arms of sadness one lays
Dreams of turquoise fade to white
Lost in long dreary winter days

This staza brings back so many times from long ago. Brings a feeling of yearning for someone lost.

No soft embrace to soothe thy sleep
Loneliness knocks on hollow doors
Hearts of sunshine in darkness weep
Flown to distant unknown shores

How many of us spend our nights crying to have back that love that once made us happy but now leaves us alone and cold.


Ivory flakes paint grieving wake
Trees stand barren to all
Hopes frozen in sorrows' lake
Pain's ephemerons slowly crawl

After you have lost the one you loved. The pain seems to have no end. The days do slowly creep. Just waiting for your time to join your love.

Thunder of spring tarries still
For love's behest from muted lips
Memories dying on tattered sill
Nay a ray since flare's eclipse

What sad piece. Brought tears to my eyes.
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Scars of Dark (9)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-03

LuanneVery sad and haunting piece you have penned.

Ancient moments fuse the mind
shadows hold upon waters deep
heart recalls haunted times
when memories betrayed sleep

Those old memories just seem to keep haunting us no matter how much we think we have moved past them. Giving the feeling of drowning. Keeping us from much needed sleep.

Sands shifted , silence screamed
smothering once promised dreams
illusions of happiness portrayed
nothing is, to what it seems

Putting on the face of happiness when inside you are still screaming. Where did the promises made go? The ones that always made you feel safe and secure. Will they ever be found again.

Naked in the arms of misery
love engraved paper nor stone
lies revealing a putrid stench
as trust led to paths unknown

The pain is unbarable when you feel like all you have believed in is no longer there. All the lies coming from the one you trusted most. Taken to a place you never wanted to be.

Desolate soul grips reality
courage ignited from a spark
closing doors of foregone days
unleashing shackled scars of dark

The final realization that you have to pull things together to be able to move forward. Finding that one little spark still left to build on. You have to shut the door on those times if you want to build up this love again. Leaving them chained in the dark.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Live and Grow with Love (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-02

XD
This is a great piece.

Sometimes I wonder, what is love
Is it always that wonderland we dream of
Touch of a kiss, upon one's lips
Vows of a lifetime, despite hardships

Love is so many things to different people. The love you are wondering about are the feelings for a true love one that the vows do last a lifetime. Overcoming hardships.

Walking through unforseen pain and hurt
Whispers of sweet sorries no comfort
Slowly by and by, two loving hearts drift
Forsaken at last, God's greatest gift

When you love someone you walk through the pain with them. Feeling it as they do.

So live and grow with the wave of love
Though it may not be that wonderland we dream of
Learn to give; learn to take
Unto aging years; till eternity breaks

When you truely love another age is timeless. You weather bad times and cherish the good. You still see that twinkle in their eyes that you fell in love with. You know the pattern of the freckles on their cheeks. The way their chest rises when they sleep. The sound of their voice when they say your name. You still get butterflys when you see them. This love will last through eternity.
Great job
!Love Cindy

Memories of Fall (6)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-02

XD
What a beautiful piece this is. So hauntingly sad.

Still dwelling in memories
Yesteryears did keep
Overwhelmed by silence
Lonely nights weep

I really love the metophrs you have used. It brings such a image to the minds eye.

Dreams of midsummer
Fading into Fall
Seasons' tears replay
Griever's seen it all

Griever's do see it all. The sadness and painis everywhere they look and in everything they do.

Touch of lover's hand
Soft as eiderdown
Took away loneliness
Empty years had found

These are the memories that bring the most pain. It is easier to try notto remember then to have the anguish cut through your heart all over again.

Longing deep within
As grieving Fall returns
Unknowingly still
Erotic flame burns

The longing for the lost lover is still there, The flame now that burns is the burning of the lost heart.
Excellent job!
~Bravo~
Love Cindy

A Real Princess (26)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-30

Rob
You did wonderful with this free verse. Again your words draw the reader into your poem. Your writing reaches out and touches so many people.


She thinks she is real, you know
Wearing a white gown every day
Tattered, torn, smeared with dirt
Hair needing to be brushed

This is such a heart breaking piece. She is real to one little girl :(

But always waiting with a smile
For a prince that never comes
And this little girl, oh this little girl
Is happy when she is around

This brings the tears. A simple toy that a child loves...Holds all that chilld's hopes, dreams, and fears.
A someone for them they can confide in. Without worring they would ever tell those precious secrets.

She was there when it happened
Saw the little girl crying, asking why
Should have helped her, you know
After all, a real princess could have

She doesn't know how much she does help this little girl just with her presence. The one constant thing that is always there waiting for her. Belonging just to her.

She watched that bad man hurt her
Take her innocence away for fun
Not caring or listening to the cries
Of this little girl, oh this little girl

The silient unmoving wittness. The one the little girl knows understands all. Hopefully as the child grows she will remember the princess that always stood by her side.

But when they play this little girl laughs
While a princess smiles at her
Then at night, a princess just waits smiling
In a doll house, for a prince, and a little girl

What a great end Rob....you have really captured the pain in your verse.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Waning Tree of Love (for a contest) (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-28

XD
What a sad bittersweet poem. The imagery is great.

Lingering sighs of summer
Soon to wane away
Sitting by our tree of love
Memories fading to grey

I love the tree representing the love.

When was the last time
You took my hand in yours
When our tree was still thriving
With passions fruits and more

Remebering all the passion that once exsisted bewteen two loves.

Watching as colored leaves fall
With withered blooms of love
Once flourishing hopes and dreams
Now cascading from above

How sad...all the lost hopes and dreams fallen like the leaves.

Whispering a soft goodbye
Won't help the tears that fall
For our tree is waning
Without your sweet summer call

The tree will never be the same without the love of the other. it has lost it's meaning.

Memories leaf descending soft
Upon my quivering palm
Slowly tucking it away
My only sadness' balm

Tucking away the one lone leaf...to keep as a remembrence of what once was.

Great job!
Love Cindy

Forget Not (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-26

XD
Each time I read your verses I am touched in some way. This is sad yet it holds so much beauty.

Forget not the dying old ways
The beat of empty silent hearts
When spring of love has faded away
Leaving two dreamers far apart

What a sad image this invokes in the mind of the reader. Just the word apart gets my heart every time.

Forget not the myriad tears that fell
From two lonely wintry eyes
Still in sorrow a griever dwells
With memories of last goodbyes

The memories that sometimes keep us warm...yet other times leave us cold and broken.

Forget not the vows once spoken
From lips chaste as winter's moon
Enamored hearts now left broken
To the dance of snow's grieving tune

Such a sad stanza. Love the imagery and word choices here. Just thinking of standing alone in the snow. brings tears to the eyes.

Forget not two tender hands that held
A weeping angel in sweet embrace
Once in beginning, twice in farewell
Before she evanesced without a trace

Great end xD. Again you have penned a beauty.
Love Cindy

Spiral Bound: (3)
by Steven Beesley

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-26

Steve
What a wonderful piece you have penned.

My pen transcribes onto
my spiral bound and weaves
the stories of life which
I hope to share.

for years I have kept journals. hopefully someday my grandchildren will learn things from me when I'm no longer around to share my wisdom with them.

The lines may not be long,
the words need not be colorful,
but be concise for you to see
exactly what I feel, smell and hear.

Being disabled..I have many friends who have taken me on so many journies through their words. I can actually imagine being there and seeing what they see.


For words are able to show
emotions and feelings deep from
within the writer's mind and soul.

Words are so powerful and can do so many things. Bring out so many emotions.
Excellent job!
Love and hugs
Cindy

Will you? (13)
by Deana

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-25

Deana
I cried as I read your words. This is the everlasting love. So rare and hard to find. Yet it seems when it is found it is taken to soon :(

Will you try to change me
In the future down the road
Or walk beside me through it all
Stand tall and share the load

Just the imagery within your words brought back so many memories for me.


When life becomes a little rough
My hair has turned to gray
Will you still smile and look at me
In that special way

When we do change and that person you love still looks at you with that sparkle in their eyes. Tells you your still beautiful...yet when you look in the mirror it says different. This is a true love.

Will you take my hand in yours
If I become to weak to try
Still lay my head upon your chest
If I should need to cry

They are always there being strong for you when you are at your weakest. Giving you their strength and courage to go on.

As the years take their toll
Our time is almost through
Will you kiss my lips and say
Forever... I'll love you.

Wow......the tears are still flowing....this was absoultly beautiful. Made me miss someone so much more then I already do.
Wonderful job!
Love Cindy

Too Far Gone (12)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-25

Nitin
Another excellent piece you have penned. I love your choice of words and the imagery it brings to the mind.

There's a candle burning in the name of love
At this point where the dead end starts
Life is just one big circle of emotions
In the end only things bleeding are our hearts


It seems funny that the ones we love the most are the ones that leave us with our hearts bleeding.

Years of trust won't guarantee true love
Unconditional sacrifices could go invain
Time just an enjoyable game played by God
With two hands that love to embrace pain

It seems that it is always one that gives unconditionaly and the other always wants more. This leaves both embracing the pain.

Commitment a suicide note from innocent souls
Excuse to satisfy cause of life imprisonment
Compromising circumstances rule our destiny
Pushing fading fate further to its descent

How does life come to this. Feelings of punishment where happiness should be. This is a very heart breaking piece. It brings tears to my eyes.

Just kill me or make me filthy rich
Seems like my only prayer these days
I am someone who never used to care
For luxury over love in any of the ways

Money will not get what you are searching for a heart that is filled with love like yours. I hope one day she opens her heart to you again. You deserve every happiness this world has to give you.

Embraced tightly in these arms of misery
Empty road won't bring us together anymore
Though I breathe everyday like I used to
Yet this heart of mine is too far gone

Love your ending yaar. I hope the road is not empty for long.
Excellent job!
Love you
Cindy

A Burden Too Dear (15)
by Anna Stephens

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-24

Anna
I remember that long talk we were having when you shared tis story with me....It broke my heart......I could never imagine the loss of my only son.....It was such agony to lose my husband....but to lose your baby is just an unbearable thought.

Tears that flow will never cease
The heart will never mend
Of a Mother who sits by a tiny casket
Draped with lace and white rosebuds

The imagery of this stanza breaks my heart. The heart it never does mend. Just learns to move forward never to be the same.

No one but another of her kind
Can ever know the depth of her sadness
Nor the pain of her grief
She'll hear not the angels nor the voice of God

The love of a mother for her baby is a bond that will last for ever. Not to have that little finger curling around yours or the little arms hugging your neck. Is a pain that most could never imagine.


The darkness envelops on long nights like this
She sees the face of the babe at her breast
After thirty-six years I still miss you, my son
Sleep sweetly in Heaven. Soon Mother will come.

What a glourious day that will be when once again those arms wrap around your neck.
This is such a heat wrenching write .
Love you
Cindy

Memories' Rain (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-19

XD
This is such a hauntingly beautiful piece. Such sadness hangs to your words.

Darkness where the moon had shone
Then a distant ray of hope
Nothing but whispers left within
How can this broken heart cope

The light goes out in your world when the one you love is gone. Maybe a whisper of a memory. Then it is gone also.

Memories' rain falling soft
Filling the world with grief
Sunset of bliss, waned as you did
As if this wretched shower could relieve

The beauty of even a sunset is no longer there. Your eyes no longer see beauty when the love is gone away.

Shut my worn eyes upon the pain
Nobody's gonna care anymore
For after sweet dawn's unveiled its kiss
Lonely nights'll return like before...

The nights always seem to be filled with pain. The times when your alone that the sadness comes rushing back.

What a heart wrenching piece. Brought tears to my eyes.
Great job!
((hugs))
Cindy

An Evil Wind (2)
by Deana

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-16

Deana
What an eye opening piece you have penned. The end of things like we knew them. Society crumbling. Very deep emotions scream from your words.


The storm rages, on and on
Tree of life bowing to an evil wind
Lightnings brief exposure
Of a world drowning in sin


I love the way things have been compared to a raging storm.



Arrogant ramblings
Of anger ,hate and conceit
Depressing the heart
of the humble kind and meek



It does make you depressed to read and see the news. Or just to go out and see things in your own towns and cities. Sometime I believe not being able to leave my home is a blessing in disguise.



Children cast away
Like worthless debris
Pedophiles and rapists
Roaming happy and free



This is the saddest part. Trying to protect the children in these times. You have to keep them by your side at all times. Then they don't have the freedom to explore their world like we had growing up.



Grandmothers tears
Unseen,forgotten,denied
Unborn babies,wiped away
Mothers too high to cry



What a sad picture this paints. Where a mother puts anything above her children. The I don't care attitude that exists in our society today. So emotionless :(



Humanity wallows in filth
From fictitious perceptions
Through unseeing eyes
Hiding from mirrored reflections



Seeing oneself in the mirror forces them to see what they have become. They want to stay blind to the fact that they are just like the ones the despise.



The love of each other
We no longer seek
Within the heart of the world
A once radiant lights growing weak



How much better this world would be if more people held out a loving caring hand to those who are lost.
Excellent job!
~clapping~

Awaiting In Snow (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-16

XD
Winter has always been my favorite season. It is so beautiful to behold. This verse seems so fimilar.

Swirling flakes of ivory
Freeze lonely tears of time
Icy chills slowly creep
Into grieving heart of mine

When the warmth of love leaves you on your own your warm heart grows cold.

Snowbird's song of sadness
Lingers in my frosted veins
Needing you by my side
To kiss away the pain

Only the love and warmth of a lovers embrace can take away the pain you have in your heart and soul.


In hail and sleet I will wait
With winter blooms for your hair
Knowing spring will never call
When you're not there

Knowing you are all alone in this world and your love has moved on beyond your grasp is to much to bare.This leaves you frozen in time. Unable to move forward, just waiting till it is time to once again fall into that loving warm embrace.

Good job!
Love Cindy

Sorrow Glistens in Darkened Eyes (Sonnet) ~contest~ (7)
by Mr Darcy

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-14

This is very dark. Yet I find more sadness in your words then anything. Great job on the imagery.


Swirling the blackness, provoking thought pools;
Contemplating how my life could have been;
If my precious childhood had been less cruel,

This really breaks my heart. JUst thinking of the things some children endure and how it haunts them into adulthood.


And mothers words - such evil spitefulness,
"You useless, bastard runt....you disgust me!"
Everyday of my life this filth has churned,
Shaping and twisting my reality,

Words can hurt us more then a slap. The slap's sting goes away quickly, but the pain of words stays in our minds forever reminding us how cruel someone who is suppose to love us can be.

Until the hatred inside boiled and burned.
Blood stained hands strangle her profanity;
Glistening eyes spew dark insanity!

Your ending sent chills up my spine. Not the usual sad love sonnet. You have done an excellent job on this write.
Take care
Cindy

Sweet Pastures (7)
by sluvious

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-14

Bob
This is a beautiful piece. The imagery is awesome.

rolling mountains echo thy tune
while lips whisper mythical names
powdered rainbows soften azure skies
as cherubs dance through the flames

I love this stanza. Your words have captured such a picture for the readers mind. The images I see are so beautiful.


shattered hearts mend on the fence
surrounding meadows of emotional bliss
what one wouldn't give for some sense
and a taste of your divine kiss.

Love the ending. It gives a sense of hope for the broken hearted. That there is still happiness to be found.

((hugs))
Cindy

Fly Away (upon a song) (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-08-13

XD
What a beautifuly sad piece you have penned. I just kept reading this one again and again. It draws the reader right into it's depth.


Fly away beyond lovers' blues
In sadness deep I still dream of you
Fade away to sorrows' lay
Where shattered hearts might decay

Dreams of sadness forever stay in the heart and mind when we lose the one we love.

No more the cries of haunted past
For broken hopes have ceased to cast
Fade away to dreams of grey
In dust and ash memories shall lay

sometimes it is to hard to bury those memories. The pain fades to a dull ache. Yet it remains.

So fly away to lands of gold
In fantasies our love shall hold
Beyond the lure of lonely nights
Forever on... our story will write

This is my favorite stanza. Just gives the feeling of hope beyond life.

~clapping~
((hugs))
Cindy

Beautiful Morn (24)
by Lonely Rider

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-31

RL
Your talent is shining in this one :)

Floating billows
Orange hue,
Swaying groves
Sprinkling dew,

I feel like I'm laying in the green grass looking up at this beautiful sky with the clouds floating by.

Yawing sunshine
Crowns horizon,
Bees humming
Delicate blossoms,

I can see the flowers opening to greet the buzzing bees :)

Smiling butterflies
fluttering by,
Chirping birds
Soaring high,

I love this stanza but again I love butterflys :)

Azure crystals
Shimmering display,
Beautiful morn
Promising day.

This just makes you want to jump up and greet the morning.
~clapping~
Love Cindy

Dream Lover (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-31

XD
You know I'm one of your biggest fans :) You again have captured so much beauty and sadness in your words.

Perchance tearful qualms still probe
Of snow dreamers' ravaged past
Quaint longing deep, hopes held chaste
For you my love will outlast

I think forever we can wait for our one true love. Great imagery.

Once in your arms, now in shadows
Forever in dreams I will weep
Your fabled smiles, guiding me on
Protecting me as I sleep

Sleep comes so easy when we feel we are safe in the arms of our love.

Great job!
Love Cindy

The Pen Still Flows (4)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-25

XD
What a huantingly sad poem. I can feel the tears flowing from the ink of your pen.

Immersed in lyrics of sadness
The pen begins to write
Stories of past come alive
Of waits through lonely nights

Sometimes writing is the only way to relieve the sadness that is locked in our hearts. To bring memories back to life for those few moments again.

Thought I had been relieved
Of our love's grievous load
Instead I find myself walking
Upon pain's endless road

How many times to we go over our pain and sadness in our minds. Deep grief and pain I think never leaves us it becomes part of who we are.


I know I cannot move on
As long as the pen still writes
I'd keep hearing your sweet voice
Calling in my dreams each night

I loved this stanza xD...Our pens allow us to keep these memories alive for ourselves and to share them with others.

Excellent piece!
((hugs))
Cindy

Longing of the Stars (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-23

XD
Wonderful piece. Very enchanting.

Starlit glade our beginning
In tendrils of past I lay
Thine smile my aphrodisiac
Thine touch enchantment fey

Great imagery and word choices. This catches the moment someone knows they need this person in their life.

Years of spring worn away
Apricots no longer bear
Iridescent blooms of lush
Withered without thine care

Very heart breaking stanza. How someone can wither away without the love of the one they have their heart set on.

Great jpb!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Glaciers of Twilight (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-19

XD
Another very sad and heart touching piece you have penned.


Tears fallen to dry again
Frozen hearts no longer feel
Hopes for 'morrow long faded
Numbness has become so real

Sometimes we become so numb with grief and sadness we forget what it is to feel.

Love's vestige upon the snow
Ebon rose our last memory
Winter sonata mourning soft
Forever grey our destiny


I love the imageryr and word choices you have used. The feelings of sadness just grip at the heart.


Petals dance in silent wake
Pervades loneliness of midnight
When will daylight shine again
And melt glaciers of twilight

This was my favorite stanza. When will the light shine again on those who are lost in heartache?
Excellent piece.
((hugs))
Cindy

Winter's Goodbye (18)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-19

XD
I love the snow....the imagery and word choices in this piece are beautiful.

Memories soft and sweet
Caught on autumn's breeze
Whispers of last goodbyes
Drifted amongst bare trees

This was something I could never do to say good bye :( It just seems so final.

Petals dancing, falling
Dusk faded soft to night
Swirling flakes of ivory
Painted loneliness white

This stanza is really beautiful. I have a suggestion for the last line. Just my thought. The word loneliness I think would sound better as lonsome.

Why am I still awaiting
My love pure as snow
Sleets blowing, howling
Cold nights passing slow

The nights are the hardest when your true love is not there with you anymore.

Winter song grieving, mourning
Longing turned into years
Still I'm holding, paining
Sighs a sea of tears

Seems like the tears never end. Just when you think they have stopped they start to flow once more.


Tree of love, thriving once
Now bare against bitter sleet
Tucked away, leaf of gold
Caught before it touched my feet


What a beautiful stanza. Just gave me chills as I read your words.


Still I'm crying, yearning
Trying to let you go
It's been a while, I guess
Since we last saw the snow...

How do you let someone that you have become part of go? Instead I wait to again see the snow together.

~Clapping~
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Snow Vestige (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-15

XD
A beautifully sad piece you have penned.

Love; perchance a winter rose
Frozen 'neath pristine lake
Silhouette of dances past
Impervious as spring awakes

This rememinds me of memories waking with the spring thaw.

Grief; tears imbued in river red
Chilled by snowy wrath of time
Cleaved a path unto bleeding hearts
Stains of agony left behind

Grief is something that never leaves our hearts. It raises it's head at different times as years go by. Still it is there waiting.

Hush, as the ivory flakes fall
Burying wretched land of midnight
Rosebud remnants sealed thy pain
Loneliness reigns in dappled light

I love the winter...I think because it buries everything in a blanket of white. Tucks away the sadness and lonely times for another day.

Lust; the sonnets to forever play
Nothingness left in thy stead
Carved thy vestige upon the snow
My blood the tears of river red

Great job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Weaving Threads Of Hope (38)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-08

Rob

This poem touched me so deeply.....your words just seem to be directed at whoever reads them.

Silence can be loud as thunder and keep one's sleep away.
It can make a soul lay praying to see the break of day.
It always seems to bring memories of cold, dark, lonely nights,
When their scent hung heavy of times you held them tight.



This stanza hit home in so many ways....how many nights are spent in this manner.

A fire still burns inside you, but made of different flames,
They singe and pain the heart filling it with blame.
Even as you ache, your mind weaves threads of hope,
Making tiny strings seem strong as corded rope.


This is one of your poems I just want t read over and over.


Grief of true love's passing does not always end with death,
Often it hurts worse than had they taken their last breath.
Dead lovers don't come back each day to tell you they are gone
And though their memory stays, you one day can move on.



As I read this stanza.....there is grief and also guilt....sometimes it is easier to live with the memories. What a awesome job you did on this .

~Clapping~

Love Cindy

Beloved He, Biased She (14)
by Lonely Rider

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-29

RL....another wonderful piece from you :)

He will become a Doctor
or an Engineer someday
She will be married to
a trader with no delay

It is so sad the way some countries still view the differences in the sexes. Here where I'm from we encourage our daugters, nieces, grand-daughters to presue their dreams...and become what ever they wish.

She echoes the story
Of million deprived girls
Buried by the biasing
Before their future unfurls.


This is so heartbreaking. Hopefully societies will soon change. You did a wonderful job bringing this to light.
Excellent!
((hugs))
Cindy

Lost (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-29

XD.....once again you have captivated this reader with this haunting sad poem....your imagery and word choices are great.


Love frozen as memories
Whispers of yesteryears
Heart shattered beyond repair
Eyes glazed in mirrored tears

What a picture your words paint for the minds eye. The sadness from this stamza crys from your words.

Walk of the living dead
Retracing sands of time
Prints surfacing, unbidden
Passion's unyielding chime

I feel as I've been walking this walk for many years.....reliving all the years past.

Still torn between the crossroads
Tethered at agony's end
To linger at time's cascades
Or move on as years transcend

Loved this stanza!
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

A Room With A View (16)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-24

Rachel
What a breathtaking beautiful poem.


From my room with a view I see
Sapphire waves of coming tide
Wispy clouds floating by
As day will soon subside

I can see the blue waves as the day begins to turn to night.

Grains of sand return
To an ocean vast
As the sun sinks east
Shadows now are cast

The imagery and word choices are wonderful.


Gazing out to the horizon
Anticipating night
Starry eyes awaiting
Moon to cast her light

The picture you have painted with your words is awesome.

Being one with nature
Soothing me with care
Never will she leave me
For mother's always there

I love the ending, The peacefulness of natures beauty. What a wonderful piece you penned for the contest.
Love Cindy

Keep on holding (24)
by Lonely Rider

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-24

RL
Great job on this piece.


The sun may be eclipsed
And the darkness blinding
The cliff may be steep
But dear,keep on holding

I love this stanza. The love and encouragment can be felt in your words.


Let your courage speak
Patiently solve the riddles
Light is awaiting
At the end of darkest tunnel

This speaks so much. You can rise above all obstacles. You have to put forth the effort.

Firmly stand on ground
With ur head held high
Rays of hope will reveal
That success is nearby.

Love the entire poem. The message is awesome. The ending great :)

Love Cindy

The Last Goodbye (7)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-24

XD
Again you have spun your words into beautiful sadness.

When summer light has bade goodbye
And colored leaves begun their fall
Beckoned a silent heart of longing
Love's memories a distant call

This stanza is brings a tear to my eye. How many times I find myself longing for days that have gone. Still hearing the voice of my love.


When turquoise dreams have faded
And dappled shades of grey remain
Loosened a lover's hidden tear
Unto his final mile of pain

Sitting and waiting to be united with your true love is a long and painful wait.

When swallows have parted their cries
And northern gusts begun their chill
Frozen the dying imprint of love
Uapon dreamers' tattered sill

The imagery in this piece are fantastic. Dreams sometimes help us carry through another day.

When emptiness of night has consumed
And frost of death taken its toll
It's time to say the last goodbye
And rest a deeply grievious soul

Love the ending....Finally at peace together again.
~Bravo~
((hugs))
Cindy

And Then You Die (10)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-23

Nitin
I love reading your work. It is so unique.


Drinking till it shakes my knees
Injecting just to feel deep in me
Dreams are not worth a penny
Here in this house of misery

The imagery you have put into this poece is awesome. This stanza gave me chills.


Living in walls behind skies end
Exhaling clouds as you burn below
Surrounded by broken mirrors
Reflecting my life's echoes

This paints such a picture fo the minds eye. I can feel myself beside you looking down below the clouds. Hearing the echo's of life's screams.

Will my shadow hold these tears
With elegance as I cry
Your picture ever return my kiss
Just before hope's dream dies

Love the end. It leaves a feeling that alll hope is lost.
Excellent job!
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Dreamers (7)
by Deana

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-22

What a beautiful piece you have penned. The imagery and word choices are awesome.

Eyes wide open, face the darkness
Insomnia rules the deep
Walk in fields of flowers
Where lovers chance to meet

This stanza says so much. Especially for those who suffer with insomnia.

Tears of life no longer fall
Or wash away the pain
Empty words from long ago
Still echo a sad refrain

Sometimes when pain has lasted for so many years, Teras no longer give relief. The pain just stays and becomes a part of who you are.

Close your eyes upon the world
Dreamers long for sleep
Hide no more the aching heart
Sadness longs to weep

If we could only stay in the dreams. Yet when we wake the reality is still there for us to face.


Will you wait by rivers edge
With flowers for my hair
Under a green cathedral
Dream heaven with me there

I love the ending and the vision it paints for the mind. If only we could stay in a dream this beautiful.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Fading Star of Dreams (6)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-22

XD
Your talent just keeps shining. This is such a sad poem. The emoyions are so strong with your word choices. The imagery is awesome.


Fading from your heart
A dying star of dreams
Lonely dusk departs
To night of silent screams

This stanza just reaches out and grabs you. How many times I have been awaken by silent screams.

Hark as nightingale sings
Weaver and Cowherd's tale
Quiet as raven's wings
Love vanished without a trail

How sad it is to lose the one we love. Such a feeling of emptiness. Love the imagery in this stanza.


Whispering winds afloat
Shedding tears' final drop
Will the yearning rest within
When daylight breaks the swap

Your ending turned out great :) Excellent job on this piece.
((hugs))
Cindy

Don't Know How to Say Goodbye (9)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-21

XD
I am mesmorized when I read your words. You have grown so much with your writing since the first of your poems I had read. This is just a wonderful piece.



Yawning gap where you once dwelled
Sacred as heavenly rays
To see your smile after rain
Shimmering dewdrops that lay

How do we ever fill that spot that once held the one we loved and held so dear.


Love's seed once grew in my heart
Nourished by your tender care
Now choked by weeds overgrown
Its fruit we'll never share

The imagery and word choices in the stanza are awesome.


Song of passion still playing
Don't know how to say goodbye
When you've always been my ray
Comforting me when I cry

Just love the ending such sadness portrayed in your wiords bring a tear to this readers eyes.
Excellent!
((hugs))
Cindy

Twinkle Twinkle Little Star (19)
by Lonely Rider

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-21

RL
This is a wonderful piece. Very unique

Twinkle twinkle little star
Countless mysteries hidden so far
With dusky billows they dance
Smiling at our ignorance

The universe holds so many mysteries still waiting to be discovered.

Twinkle twinkle little star
Dwelling in a place afar
Shimmering,glittering in the sky
Queries arise seeking reply.

looking up to the sky at the endless stars. So many things go through our minds. There has to be something else out there. We have also been blessed with the beauty of the endless sky and all it holds.
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Whispers (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-12

XD
What a beautifully sad poem. Love the imagery of this piece.

Been living so long
In this chilling dark
Searching round for you
Love that's left its mark

What a very sad and lonely place the dark can be.

Asking myself why
Do I love you so
When our hearts are
Split by oceans flow

Then that spark lights up your life. No matter how far away. Feelings can touch our hearts.

Only a whisper
Lingers in my heart
Your ravishing smile
Estranged, worlds apart...

Love the ending. That little whisper that continues to keep those feelings alive.
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Running back to you (15)
by Lonely Rider

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-09

What a very sad piece that brought tears to this readers eyes.

Staring at the photos,
Memories flash by,
Crouched in a corner,
Silently - I cry.

How often we look at old pictures and cry for those no longer near.

A convoluted maze
of a life so blue,
Where to go now,
I have no clue.

Sometimes the path we must take in life is a hard one. Findiing your place in life is like a maze. Great Imagery.

'Friends' are so mean,
Wearing a smiling shroud,
Daddy's pampered girl,
Is lost in the crowd.

We are in such a hurry to grow up and make it on our own. Then when the time finally comes. We want those comforts of home.

Home is too far,
Visits are only few,
Mom,Dad I feel like,
Running back to you.

This stanza really touched me. No matter how old we get. There are times when we all want to run back to the safty of Mom and Dad.

Great job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

Softly the Rain Falls (Rondeau) (24)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-08

Rachel you have done such a great job on this challenge. The imagery and word choices are awesome.......I felt I could hear those rain drops softly falling.
Excellent!
Love Cindy

I Have Survived (12)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-08

Rob
This broke my heart to read. How hard a fight it must be. To think how many life's are lost and how many more destroyed.


I have felt the thrill of victory in some battles I have won,
but I know this war I fight never will be done.
They arrive to me in dreams so bright they shame the day
and the more I beg forgiveness the longer they all stay.

What a struggle this is to have everynight. I know how hard the nights can be. Nothing compares to this.

Some nights they come alone in tears to ask me why,
other nights their families ask why they had to die.
I find myself in battle with the fear I felt when there,
so real the smell of death hangs heavy in the air.

To have to relive this horror night after night I can't even begin to imagine. This just rips at my heart.

There are nights I scream to God, some I plead and pray
to send His sun to make these dark nights go away.
When I finally see dawn rising it tells me I am alive,
I know one more battle is won and I have survived.

I feel so honored to know the survivor and to call him my friend. A wise man once told me things always look better when the sun comes up. How true his wrds were.

God shows soldiers mercy for most things they do in war,
aware they have no idea it's not Him they are fighting for.
Most are sent to harms way by lies from heads of state
and prophets not of God filling His sheep with hate.


Perfect ending for this heartbreaking piece. You are a man among men Rob. Your always in my thoughts and prayers....Love Cindy

Shadow of the Night (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-21

XD
What a wonderful poem. You have grown so much as a writer just since I have met you. I knew there was something special in your words. This piece almost has a Old English feel to the word choices.


Echoing forth, thine song of sorrow
Forgotten promises of the morrow
Past time's abyss, a resonance deep
Of shadow weaver's forever weep

This has such a sad tone, Your imagery is awesome as are your word choices.

Thine fairy light, 'yond darkness' moor
Two entwined beats across distant shores
Shadowed truths, best left unsaid
Lest fallen warrior ceases his tread

This is my favorite stanza. I can feel the love of two souls oceans apart. The sadness of being away from each other.

Waning soft, grief's celestial light
Soon to be gone the dark of night
Shine a hope, if morrows may
Free mourning soul from sorrow's lay.

The hope that comes with the morning light. Beautiful xD Beautiful
~Clapping~
Cindy

Fade To Grey (11)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-20

Nitin
This is such an eye opening poem. When I first read it....I couldn't stop crying knowing this still goes on in parts of the world. You wrote this with so much emotion. I'm sure it will touch everyone who reads your words.


Sleeping below my mother's heart
Sucking drops of love coming my way
Imagining beauty of the world outside
Where I will be breathing one fine day

I love the word choices used in this stanza. It paints such a feeling of safty and warmth. The baby tucked safely in her mothers womb.

Friends will be there to grow with
God has blessed me with family
Nature will keep my soul safe
And all of them will pamper me

All the wonderful things in the world that await most children. Babies needing so little to be happy and content.

Could hear lullabies when I'm scared
Her soothing touch when feeling alone
Twisted around in this warm web of life
Waiting for the time when I'll be born

I love the picture this stanza paints for the mind. A mother gently stroking her pregnant belly softly singing to her unborn child.

But then a thought scares me mother
Will I be considered a liability
Just because I'm not what you wanted
Will you simply overlook my ability


Then the reality hits you right in the face. Heart breaking :(

Why do we label daughters a curse
Blaming mothers for not delivering sons
How cruel can a man be sometimes
Playing with love at the point of a gun

Just the thought of killing your unborn child because of the babies sex. It is mind boggling.

I was told by God we are all the same
Yet this fear of rejection is scaring me
Came with many colors in my eyes
Fading to grey in the name of sanity

Your ending is excellent..all the happy colorful thoughts have now faded away with the knowlege of knowing your future will not be.

Please don't let the machine decide my fate mother.

Your last line just adds to the sadness of the entire piece.
Excellent job! ~Bravo~
Love Cindy

Fallen Angel (Acrostic) (10)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-20

Rachel
This is such a heartfelt write. Congrats for placing in the challenge with this beautiful Acrostic :)


Floating on the breeze
Appearance is only an illusion
Lonely heart she hides so well
Lifeless she falls to her destiny
Eternity of sorrow her curse
Now and forever to be alone

This brought tears to my eys. The agony of being alone. Sometimes death seems more welcoming.

As she floats on uncertainty
Never an easy path to tread
Gone is the comfort of true love
Efforts are only in vain
Lost love of the fallen angel

Losing love is one of the wrost pains our hearts ever have to endur. You have captured this in your words. Great imagery and word choices.
Excellent Job!
Love Cindy

If Teardrops Never Fell (Monchielle) (18)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-20

Rachel
You have penned a wonderful Monchielle..I love the first line for each stanza that you picked. It has paved the way for your beautiful words.


If teardrops never fell
I'd take my place instead
In the arms of sorrow
To drown in my regret
Wishing for tomorrow

Tears can be the best release for pain and sorrow. Great imagery and flow.


If teardrops never fell
I'd never speak my peace
My heart could never mourn
Or say a sad goodbye
If tears were never born

I love the ending the best. The part where you say if tears were never born. All stanzs leading to your ending telling the what if's without tears. Very unique twist.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Summer's Longing (6)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-19

XD Bretahtaking beauty emits from this piece.

Summers longing a tender sigh
Upon kaleidoscopic winds of love
Shimmering lovers spectrum of tears
Embellishing arched gilded skies
Deep within broken heart sears

The imagery and word chices are awesome. Your words paint such a wonderful image for the mind.


Summers longing a tender sigh
Never once whispered thine goodbye
As colored leaves begin their fall
And autumn breeze chills waiting heart
Grieving fool bides for next summers call

Just love the ending. It captures the essence of the entire poem so well
Excellent piece.
((hugs))
Cindy

The Way It Seems (22)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-18

Rob
Only you can make one weep for a love of our dreams.

Gentle winds trail behind her to smell her sweet perfume
and the beauty on her face shames the rose's bloom.
Jealous clouds start weeping over a lady this soft and fair,
sad their moon sends it's rays to caress her raven hair.

How beautifully breathtaking this verese is. The imagery is awesome.

Stars all sit impatient to see the sparkle in her eyes
and if by chance she smiles, all dance in the sky.
The sun waits for the dawn to shine upon her soul
pulling from it's strength in order to feel whole.

The love you speak of here is a magical love. I love the way you use the stars and the dawn to describe the joy this love brings.


I pinch my arm in dreams for I fear this is not true,
loving simple men like me ladies do not do.
My eyes will open up, so afraid it was a dream,
so I pray this morning it is the way it seems.

Simple men are the best ones :) I just feel in love with this verse. It reallly spoke to my heart. Your writing has a way of reaching so many hearts. Excellent!
Love Cindy

Heaven's Rainbow [Double Lento] (9)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-18

Luanne
Did this one come in a dream...LOL...beautiful Lento....and you stepped up the challenge with a double.
~Clapping~

Blooms slumber till morning dawn
Perfume scent casts a spell
Womb frozen in time reborn
Tomb of darkness bids farewell

I love the good-bye to Winter in this Stanza. The metophors are awesome.

Pressing buds sprout, splendid color
Blessings sent from heaven's high
Caressing hands of the Creator
Dressing the Earth thus from painted sky

What a beautiful image this paints for the mind.
Wonderful job!
Love Cindy

Final Destination (11)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-16

Luanne
What a wonderful piece. your words just swept me right in.


It was but only one poisonous wave
that swept the heart to distant land
loneliness finding solace within a voice
that crossed miles, upon miles by hand

This stanza touched my heart. A voice from far away can bring so much peace to another lonely soul.

So sweet the voice that lingered,
soothing the mind, deep and true
intruding mid-summer night slumber
secret adoration began to brew

The feelings in this stanza the ones you share with no one. The ones that fill your dreams.


A deathly cocktail so enticing
taste of forbidden fruit so sweet
wondering if the poet realized
he revived a heart that lost it's beat

These lines are so great...feelings of getting lost within the words of another. Feeling things through what they have penned.

Another time, perhaps another life
their wings shall spread and soar
but until the whisper of the final breath
her heart belongs on the island shore

Love the imagery here.
Excellent!
Love Cidy

Metaphorical Sun (Lento) (7)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-15

Rachel
Great job on this form. Awesome imagery and word choices :)

Grace us with your charm
Place us in your keep
Space is vast and endless
Face your slumber deep

I love the feelings reading this stanza left me with. Peaceful and warm :)

A star won't last forever
Pray and wish you might
Day will come once again
May he be chased by night

Loved your ending I picture the moon chasing the sun :)
Excellent!
Love
Cindy

As Quiet River Runs (Licentia Rhyme) revised (22)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-15

Debbie
This is one of my favorites of all your poems. It is such a heartfelt write and the imagery is fantastic.


Soft feathers of wind tickling sleep, you are there
As you always were, hint of gold in your hair
On the bank embracing , kissing through the tears
As if forever held no place in our fears
Lazy slumber lingered with our warm embrace
On fragrant bed of Violets and Queen Anne's lace
You were laughing, we sent wishes to the sky
Never knew those seedlings carried our goodbye

Thes lines always make me cry..they take me back to happier times in my life. You never know when that last good-bye will come. So treasure and hold close to your heart the ones you love.


Skeletal branches plead for another start
Quiet river swells, her melancholy song
Remainders of a feeling, now love has gone
Wild flower remnants lie dry beneath bruised feet
"Please return"- repeats in every anguished beat
Clouds aloft bring home what I cannot deny
Change has come as snowflakes dance in Winter sky

The anguish of the heart that has lost it's true love. so sad.


Willing you back where I've been lonesome so long
Lying safe in my arms on new velvet grass
Feeling at home when you are with me at last
Love's quiet river flowing on as before
On to forever to be lonely no more
And we'll be laughing, watching storm clouds float by
Holding dreams and wishes we've cast to the sky

I love the ending. The promise of forever together. Gives one something to hang on to when all seems lost.

~Bravo~Bravo~
Love Cindy

Chasm of Stifled Fears (9)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-06

XD
Once again your words have drawn me into this beautiful poem. Great imagery and word choices. Leaving the reader seeing through your eyes.


Why must veiled flame rekindle
When passion was held so meek
Now caught within yearning
A silent lover speaks

This I think so many can relate to. Those memories of the past come to your mind when you think you have safely tucked them away.


To smother love's raging fires
Bring back once-prevailing calm
Yet icy tears the raindrops
Keep spilling on outstretched palm

These lnes bring a tear to my eye. When you have deeply loved someone....you will always have that place for them in your heart. The pain never leaves.


Trying to utter the word
Got tongue-tied once more
Shrugging off into silence
A smile masking the sore

How many times do we hide our feeling away. Putting on the happy face for those around us. Suffering in silence.



The pain still echoes on...

Great ending to this beautiful poem. The pain does go on.
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Wishing You Were Here (15)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-05

Rob
I get so easily lost in your verses. This one really grabbed me and wouldn't let me go. This is like what I live. Beautiful!


It seemed to me the mountain swayed
beneath the windblown trees,
sending my mind a sweet memory
of when you were here with me.

This is really a heart breaking stanza. Memories are so hard to live with when the on you love has gone.

For a moment I could smell your scent,
like your head was on my chest.
If only God would give back one day
I would let Him have the rest.

I would trade anything to have that one last day and at times I can feel him near and do still remember his scent. *wipes tears

The windblown rain finally eased
and my eyes began to clear.
I stood watching the sun peek out,
still wishing you were here.

This is a wish made everyday and I know this will strike a chord in so many readers.

You will always live inside me,
but how I miss you so.
I know the mountain you wait on,
I will be there before you go.

I loved this ending. You have again moved me to tears. I stand in awe at the power you have to draw in the readers.

~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Fly Me To The Moon (19)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-04

Nitin
This poem is one of my Favorites that you have penned so far. The imagery and word choices are great. I was so drawn to your words.

With my wings of faith
This heart will learn to fly
Keep your windows open
Let this love come inside
With your hands in mine
This life will pass me by
Eternity to sleep in peace
Yet no time for goodbyes

Unreachable love can find us in our dreams and our minds. Feeling one from thousands of miles away. Bringing feelings of comfort to a broken heart. These lines are so beautiful.

Fly me to the moon
Sing for me your lullaby
Mirror would lie your beauty
Simply look in my eye
With my will to dream
These nightmares would cry
Hear voices my love
Its time for me to die

We see beauty in those we love that sometimes they are blind to. If only they could see themselves from the eyes of those who love them. Just the feelings of hearing your love singing as you fall to a peacefull end.

Great job!
Love Cindy

Sleeping Child (7)
by Paralyzed

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-01

What a beautiful heartfelt write this is.

The sweetest breath I've ever felt,
Whispers on my cheek,
The faint perfume of life in bloom,
Begs me not to speak.

Sitting and holding our babies when they are sleeping breathing with their every breath. The bond between a mother and child. There is nothing more beautiful.

Little child of the sun,
I love to watch you sleep,
My tiny star, it's so bizarre,
So happy, yet I weep.

Tears of joy fall for the wonderous creation we have been blessed with. A love we have never felt for any other. A love bestowed on us by God. Sitting for hours on end taking in every single inch of the baby we love so much. The awe of this.


A single tear, so full of hope,
I'll do my very best,
To keep you warm, through sun or storm,
No matter what the quest.

I love this stanza. A mother would do anything for her child. Beautiful poem really beautiful.

Sleeping child, melting heart,
My angel here on earth,
I'll always show and hope you know,
To me, how much you're worth.

Love the ending. To each mother her child is her world.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy

Numbers**Disturbing (13)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-01

Rob
This is such a scary and disturbing piece. Your imagery in this piecs is fantastic. You have such a way with your writing it pulls the reader right into your work. They are an observer seeing this through your eyes.


He held a knife against her throat while he pulled her to the ground,
then told her to do whatever he said and not to make a sound.
When she began to cry and plead he looked at her and smiled,
he would kill the woman slow to pleasure himself awhile.

This is such a sick and twisted scene. Spine chilling. You have placed yourself into to what the mind of such a person like this must think like. Wow!


When she was dead he leaned down to look into her eyes,
savoring what he did, remembering her desperate cries.
He would take the lock of hair he cut to save it with the rest,
this was number thirty and the kill was one of his best.

They say killers like this usually take some kind of trophy from their victim to save so they can savor the crime over and over.


Demons live inside his soul and trained their slave with care,
they talk with him at night as he shows the women's hair.
They laugh with glee about each one, recalling how they died,
urging him to kill some more to be worthy of satan's pride.

This stanza really grabs you. Someone would have to be insane to do the things these serial killers do.


He was caught at number forty three and now he sits in jail,
thinking satan has betrayed him, sits alone in a tiny cell.
His lawyers are working every day to have him found insane,
a monster that only gave numbers to women dying in pain.

Now he is a number. It is sad they can't get the death peanilty more often in these cases.

Very different write for you Rob. You did an excellent job putting this story to verse.
Love Cindy

A Mother's Longing (27)
by Sher

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-30

Sherry
this is heart breaking for me to read. I have seen my own mother suffer the pain you are feeling.

Why must these feelings continue
Unable to do anything; helpless
Loving you more than life
Yet, unable to cure your illness

We as mothers always try to mke the lives of our children beter, Yet there are things we can't fix. The pain of this is terrible. Only someon who has seen this first hand could understand the helplessness you feel.


My life would be freely given
Merely for you to find happiness
Delirium visions with mirage demons
No longer would haunt your innocence

How many times do we wish we could take the pain and suffering of those we love upon ourselves. Just so they could know the joy of living without haunting demons. or pain.
Excellent write. You and your family are in my thoguhts and prayers.
God Bless
Take Care Cindy

I Am Rose (Prose) (27)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Luanne
This is such a powerful and moving piece. awesome imagery.


Each step more atrocious than the last.
Slight slopes then a small dip.
It is then when I pause, though only
momentarily to catch my breath.
Steeper and steeper it becomes
small rocks below me, even bigger
boulders ahead.

Sometimes I wonder how much we can carry on our shoulders before we fall. Why there are some who are given more to hold. You are an insperation to me.


Darkness thrusts at a golden sky.
It begins to rain, oh! how I cried.
Stabbing penetration!
But the tears wipe away, they always do.

The tears others see do wipe away. But the ones we have inside do they ever leave?


A little further on, a bend in the trail
causes me to stumble.
Falling over the edge, my fingertips grasp
for anything to hold on to.

And hold on you do my dear friend. The will to go on is so strong. This I admire in you so much.


I can see the top now, oh! so beautiful.
Reaching out, can almost touch the sky.
Engraving my name into soft sand that
once use to be cold, solid rock.
Bend to smell the sweet wild roses,
survivors of the cold harsh days of past.
I am survivor, I am rose


This stanza says so much about you and your character. Regardless of the thngs placed in your path you find a way around them and to move forward.


Things get worse before they get better.
There ain't no mountain high enough,
that I can't climb.
Even if someday it is alone!
I will survive.
I am rose ...

The ending is wonderful Luanne.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Promise Me This (12)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Debbie
You have painted a breathtaking scene with your words. Congrats on the win for the title challenge. Very well deserved.


Promise me this as ocean tide erases printed sand
You'll recall two lovers combing beaches hand in hand
Gathering shells and feathers left buried 'neath the dunes
Nature's splendor serenading phases of the moon

I have just got lost in this stanza and don't want to return. So many times I have been here. A different beach, a different time, so many memories of happier days. Beautiful, just beautiful.

Promise me this as Winter's icy clutches beckon death
You'll remember fireside kisses, puffs of frosty breath
Fluffy hillside angels, lit snowflakes on the tongue
Smiling faces lined by age, two hearts forever young

With me being a lover of winter the imagery in this stanza is so awesome. When you are with your true love you always see each other the way you did when you first fell in love.

Remember then the moments, remember still a kiss
If naught but love belies the deep, Oh promise! Promise this!


The memories live forever in the heart.
~Bravo~~Bravo~
Love Cindy

This night of loves final journey (17)
by Tom Swart

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Tom
A very beautiful yet hauntingly sad piece. I really like the repition of the ending lines incorperated into the beginings of the next.


This love, where your name rests lightly upon its tongue.
A tongue long parched by your absence.
An absence that desire can barely withstand alone,
Alone though it is and alone for too long.

This stanza really gripped my heart. The agony of being without your love is a terrible pain to live with.


This love gathers you unto itself and collects its memories.
Memories whose tears wash away the dust of time.
Time that begs for the dawn as it searches for a witness,
A witness as love dies this night.

Living with your memories is so hard to do. You have painted such a sad picture for the minds eye.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy

The Long Wait (8)
by Anna Stephens

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Anna
The pain you are feeling goes right to the readers heart. We cry with you my friend. Life is so unfair sometimes.


Trying not to reveal to each other how terrified they really are
That this might be their final time together.
Before her eyes he grows weaker and weaker each day
Racked with a hideous cough that even the oxygen he wears is unable to sooth.
She thought she had faced every terror before
Not so, not so. Not even close.

These lines are so heartbreaking. I can feel everyone of your words Anna. I can feel everyone of your fears. He knows but dosen't want to see you hurt. Dosen't want to see the pain in your eyes. What a terrible palcefor 2 people that have the bond of love to be in. Both having so much to say but each being silient to save the other pain. You and your brother are in my thoughts and paryers.
Love Cindy

The Ruins (9)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Debbie
What a great piece you have written for the title challenge. The imagery is so wonderful I can see the stones from Stonehenge in my mind.

Alignments marking passage
Seasons through the mist
Bluestones rift with magic
From Merlin's dark abyss

Your word choices help to paint the picture for the readers. Letting the reader see this mystical place through your eyes.

Awesome !
Love Cindy

Fond Memories. (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-28

XD
This is so sad. Letting go of things that have meant so much to us through the years. Your sadness is felt in your words.

Battles of the brave and bold
Challengers with spirits of steel
Now all lingering within a page
Soon to be yellowed and peeled

When times we loved have to change they become a distant memory.

Fallen warrior without his sword
How will the crusades be won
Once reigned the name of glory
Is it to be forgotten and shunned

Oh I remember the days of football with my son...he lived and breathed the sport. As the years passed he replaced the back yard football and posters with a wife and children. He still talks of those happy times when his buddies come by and they watch the old videos of themselves playing from high school. You won the crusades and left your mark :)

For the time has come at last
To close the chapter of youth
To linger his fame in memories
And accept he's grown...the truth.

Letting go of things from our youth are so hard to do. Each year passes and we grow and learn. All a part of the cycle of life. Years from now you will be telling your children what a player their dad was and smiling with the memories.

Great piece xD
((hugs))
Cindy

Burn After Reading (18)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-28

Nitin
You did an awesome job on this. Your poem went so well with the title you picked for the challenge.
As I read this I got chills. Very dark, disturbing and just plain spine chilling. You really succeeded in pulling off the creepy feeling you were going for. You talent shines in this dark piece yaar.


Black cloud rising from my ashes
Blending with the scent of your skin
Stabbed again on my death bed
With memories of my lover's sin

The imagery and word choices in this poem left a very vivid picture in my mind. Jilted and betrayed by a lover and now seeking revenge.

What we called love is now war
Your putrid heart so full of lies
Time to rise again from my scars
In the end, my enemy has to die

The way you have written this it is like I can see each scene from each stanza as it takes place...almost like watching a movie.

Sleep my love on the edge of a knife
Be scared when I enter your dreams
Tonight I will end your seven lives
Dancing with your melodious screams

Here I see a lover so insane from the pain of what has happened. Just the thought of someone dancing with joy while the other is tourtured is just mind boggling.

Hell awaits you my dear angel
Pay for the blood spilled when I cry
Trust my hatred for you this time
Run to burn after reading this lullaby

Never the Same (7)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-27

Luanne
What a very sad and heart breaking poem. The agony cries from your words.

Waves crashed upon our lives
and swept your love away
broken were all the promises
you vowed to me each day

Promises made by two loves. Thought to last forever. How sad when the trust is broken.


Wasn't long before you realized
can't pour raindrops back into a cloud
gone were the days of love and trust
and the family you held so proud

This stanza really tugged the heart strings. NO you can never take back what you broke in the first place. There is no magic fix.

Time may mend this broken heart
but our love will never be the same
a man who once walked so proud
now holds his head in shame

This I think is the saddest of all the stanzas. Realizing that what you wanted all along was right under your nose. That you threw it away for what??


The heart has now finally spoken ...

Great ending Luanne...the heart does have the final say.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

I Know Now (12)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-27

Luanne Wow! Wonderful piece. the imagery and thought put into this are great.


Into dreams they cast their spell
shadows follow the walking shell
sorrow hides in this pretender's grin
shackled thoughts confined within
[I know now] how to conceal tears

We learn to do this pretty well. Make others believe all is Ok. Hiding from our pain and sorrow. Painting on the fake grin.


A frozen heart sings no tune
shattered pieces forever strewn
sunlight wakes upon the eyes
never to be blinded again by lies
[I know now] a liar has many faces

What a sad lesson to have to learn. When the inocent way we look on life is shattered. The trust we have is broken. Heart breaking stanza.


Endless questions weaken the mind
searching for answers we never find
who, when, where, why and how
the torture continues only if I allow
[I know now] some questions we don't
want ... answered

These lines are so true Luanne there are somethnigs better not to know.

Excellent piece.
Love Cindy

A House Not Far Away (26)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-27

Rob
You see and feel things so very deeply. When I read your work it is like I am seeing it through your eyes.


In the neighborhood your home is in, on a street not far away,
there lives a precious girl who goes through hell each day.
The mother lets neighbors watch her when she works at night,
then the son abuses her when they are out of sight.

This is so heart breaking. In these times we have to keep our children close to us to keep bad things away from them. You just never know even those you think you can trust end up being the most evil of all.

On a street just blocks away from her there lives this little boy,
his favorite game was soccer til coach took away it's joy.
He goes to practice often, so he won't disappoint his dad,
then coach does the things that make him really sad.

It is such a tragedy that we have to worry about letting our children play sports. What a cruel place our world has become.

In a house down the street from him lives a mother and a wife,
her husband drinks and beats her, so she lives a tortured life.
Each night after they all eat she sends the kids upstairs,
she knows if they stay quiet, they will be safe up there.

I wish more women in this postion would see their self worth. So very sad :(

This world where we all live are filled with neighborhoods
and houses full of people, both evil and those good.
A house is like our body, the outside can look swell,
but if evil lives inside, the soul can be from hell.

How true your words ring here Rob...what a very powerful end.

Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Memories. (4)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-26

XD
What a beauty you have written. Your writing just draws me in to the piece you have penned. Getting lost in the sadness.

Dwelling still in yesterdays
A love enchanting as snow
Your charming smile, my snow angel
Unable to let you go


This stanza really touched me.. It is hard to let go of the times when we were in a happy place. Memeories are sometimes all we have.

Why am I still retracing
Our footsteps over the years
Love's endless road, agony's path
Splattered with blood and tears

This is such a heartbreaking stanza. To go back and look at where things went wrong and the agony and heart break. So sad.

Great job on this.
((hugs))
Cindy

My Offer (3)
by Bill Turner

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-24

Bill
I have missed reading your work. What a very touching poem you have penned.

You are the only one to ever reach me
Touching my soul in ways never dreamed
Your loving touch forever taking care of me

These lines toched my heart. What a wonderful feeling when you find your soulmate. Just seeing them or feeling their touch gives you the comfort you can't get from anyother.

When the darkness creeps into my head
You are always there keeping the demons away
Even the night I feared I would end up dead

This is such heartfelt lines. How scary to think you are dying. Having the one you love by your side can sometomes make you stronger and fight harder.

Great job!
((Hugs))
Cindy

Between Mother Earth And Father Sky (6)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-24

Debbie
Once again you have penned a brilliant piece. I would expect nothing less from you. The imagery is awesome as are your word choices.

Dear Mother, your bounties we disdain
Decapitated mountains, clouds of acid rain
Beauty at our fingertips, scars upon thy womb
River veins polluted, concrete urban tombs

This paints such a vivid and sad picture for the mind. Of what is being done to our beautiful Earth.

Dear Father, your heavens we despise
Crystal blue horizon, smoke filled putrid sky
Clear winds aloft breathe life to us all
Niagra tear torrents, we rush to the falls

Wow. Excellent job Deb and a perfect piece for Earth Day :)
Love Cindy

Not Being What They Seem (15)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-21

Rob
This is such a intense piece. Very thought provoking.

Then the voice spoke softly
Of all the ones in need.
Asking why we refuse to share
Our bounty with them to feed.

This is such a sad stanza knowing there are so many people in this world starving,

The voice then talked of leaders
Who send young men to war.
Sent to fight in His Holy name,
It is lies they're dying for.

How sad to see so many of our young men dying. This is so heart breaking.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Question (21)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-20

Luanne
Once again you have written an excellent poem. The imagery and flow are awesome.

Is there a magic button to press
for memories I wish to delete
or an injection for happiness
to once again feel complete

I love this stanza. It would be great if there was a cure for a broken heart. The feelings you have portrayed in the first part of your poem of bing a teen are great.


Closure came through time and tears
realizing we were never meant to be
I loved and lost, yet will love again
And perhaps this loss was meant to be

Now looking back as a woman now. Seeing things in a different light. After being through the pain of life. We try to make sense of things we have been through... But do we ever forget the first love that found their way into our hearts?

Excellent!
Love Cindy

Twisted Dreams (8)
by Poetess

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-20

Liz
What a very disturbing piece you have penned. You have brought to light a subject we as a society need to deal with allot more. Excellent imagery.

He could feel her tiny body
under his white and sweaty sheets.
To the scent of her Barbie perfume
he held his pillow sound asleep.

These lines made my skin crawl. To think there are so many of these sick creeps roaming our streets.

The child cried; shouted for help,
but only darkness heard his cries.
Yelling he asked if someone was there,
and silence gave its cruel reply.

Once they have their hands on someones kids it is usually to late.....Makes parents and grandparents not want to let those little ones out of their sight.

Great job on this piece.
Love Cindy

Can Forever Really Hold (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-20

XD
Another beauty you have penned. Your talent shines in your work. Great imagery in this piece.

Thought my life was changed
From that very first kiss
The way we floated on clouds
Enchanted moments of bliss


All the magic of love when it is new. We ride so high on those clouds. Thinking we will never come back down to earth.


Now my dreams are darkness
Nothing else left to hold
Though memories still linger
These mazes are icy cold

The pain in this stanza is really felt by your readers. ....When we find out the one we loved so much was being decietful. The pain of the lost love brings tears to the eyes

Great job!
((Hugs))
Cindy

Black Ink (13)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-15

Luanne what a awesome piece you have penned here. Wow!!! The imagery is fantastic. The emotions just creeped under my skin and found there way to my heart.


Words held captive, begging for release
as a naked canvas pleads for color.
Perhaps grassy hill and sunny skies,
will purge the ache in my heart.
Though ...
nothing brings relief, not even vibrant colors.
Slashes of sarcastic black, laugh at me now

This stana ahs so much meaning to it. How many times we want to write of beauty. Yet the heart breakiing memories of our lifes we store in the dark corners of heart and mind find there way to slowly make themselves heard.


Perhaps the darkness that looms upon my canvas
will suddenly transform into something, beautiful.

The wirter sets and waits and it dosen't flow from the mind to the pen. Seems the mind and pen have diffrent plans.

Or ...
Perhaps I will remain a poet caught in a web of
darkness, tears and solitude.

^^^^^^
These lines are so heartbreaking.

And ...
Perhaps the rain will never allow me to create
imagery of beautiful sunsets within a lover's arms.

And I will remain a caged poet,
peering out through the bars of my mind.
Scrawling on the walls with black ink ...

You have touched on the very essence of the caged poet.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Only Two Would Know (18)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-13

Let me start by saying perfect title.

The old man held her hand with love, as he watched her fade away
and my eyes filled with tears from the things I heard him say.
He remembered she wore a printed dress the day when they first met
and told her since that very day he had known not one regret.

I told myself when I saw this I wasn't going to cry..I should have known by the title. You reach right in to the readers hearts and put them in the moment. I know you see your self as a simple story teller. I have to say if thats what you think it's Ok. I know that's not what I see. You my dearest friend are much more. I wish you could see yourself through my eyes.

Your first stanza really touched me so very deeply. I know she went on to a better place smiling just having her love beside her talking and holding her hand. I wish I would have had that chance. God had different plans for me.

He described to her a dress she wore the night of their first date
and when he came to get her how long she made him wait.
He asked her about a vee cut dress that was red and laced in white
and if she remembered blushing when he stole a kiss that night.

The memories you have of the one you truely love stay with you forever no matter how old we get. You can close your eyes sometimes and still feel them beside you.


He smiled when mentioning their wedding night, whispering very low,
I could see the memories coming back only the two would know.
As the old man continued whispering to her, I swear I saw her smile
and though she had passed an hour ago, it fooled me for awhile.

You were not fooled. She was smiling as she went on to wait for her love. his love and comfort let her go on with the beauty of love that only two would know.

~Bravo~Bravo~Bravo~
Love Cindy

Gone with the Wind (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-13

XD
I love to read your poetry. This was no exception. It is so touching and heartfelt.
It draws the reader in and they feel the pain captured by your words.

That fateful night, a tear-soaked pen
Scribbled this entry with trembling hand
Gone with the wind, that ray of hope
Now left with shattered heart to cope

These lines bring tears to the eyes. How painful to see the person you love with someone else. You have done a fantastic job with the title.

Reopening these cold pages today
Watching that scene of agony play
Wondering, what wrong was ever done
So he would become her chosen one...

Wow what an ending.
~Clapping~
((Hugs))
Cindy

Soul of the Night (6)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-08

XD
What a sad yet beautiful piece.

Yearning, its become part of me
As I struggle on with life's journey
Deep in my heart, where you once dwelled
Now a gaping void, where tears are held

This stanza really touched my heart. Life is a struggle without the one you love by your side.

Whispering on, voice of the breeze
Of a grief yet to be appeased
Where can I find, my heart's forgone piece
Fill the void, let the hurt cease

Can the void ever be filled? The hearts pieces ever be put back together? I really loved these lines. Great job!
Hugs
Cindy

Bound (3)
by Beautiful Chaos

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-07

What a very sad write full of so much pain and anguish. Imagery and word choices are awesome.

Wandering hands,
Hungry lips,
A love that cannot,
Come to grips

These lines say so much.

Family hate,
For generations,
Passed down with,
No explanations

Thes lines are so heartbreaking. Things like this are passed on from generation to generation.

Sweet angels wish,
To taste the sky,
Though held here by,
The bitter lie.

How painful the thoughts of wanting to break free but being held captive. Sometimes by things we know and memories that won't let go.


They'll live with love,
Inside these chains,
Wrapped up in,
This life's remains

I really like the ending stanza.
Excellent job and a very moving piece.
Take Care Cindy

Rise Against The Roadside (27)
by Normal is the Watchword

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-07

Kaylee
This is so very sad. The heartache can be felt by the reader. The imagery and word choices are awesome.

'Til the tint of silver faded light
I clasp a thin melody only known
Embedded upon night's gravel road
In midnight sight, I hide the veracity
And discern the false smile of white teeth
Mirrored in moonlight's fallen shadow

This is so heartfelt. Trying to hold on to something we think is lost to us.

Disturbed, I quivered, virtually choking
In quaking hand, a frail melody lay in slumber
Engraved upon the damned night road
And damn I, the melody quietly voiced
For passion tricked, tricked those of whom
Embraced, then discard in frozen arms

These lines really grip and squeeze the readers heart. The feelings that you have loved and been decieved. Just tossed aside like nothing ever mattered.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Whispered Prayer for the Dying (9)
by Illuminati RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-06

Illum
The love that pours from your words is the strongest kind of love.


I have felt your fading heartbeats
your pain, your hurt.
I know
you have fallen twice
and emerged from Oblivion twice.
You don't see me but
I am beside you
day and night
Holding your hands
talking to you with sweet rhymes
and praying
for I Love You...

When you love someone so deeply that you can feel them from afar. They to can feel your love. You also have many friends praying with you and standing beside you.
Beautiful poem.
Love Cindy

A World Where No One Goes (27)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-06

Rob
You have written another great piece here. Touching the hearts of your readers with your pen. The effects of autisim are very sad and painful. especially to the famlies.

The doctors have all told me she is just an autistic child,
but then tell me how lucky I am her condition is mild.
I want to scream in anger to let them see this hurts me so,
my princess stays on another world where I can never go.

I think no matter how mild it still breaks the heart of a parent to have anything wrong with their child. Then knowinig the child dosen't see you or hesr you at times is even more painful. What a heartbreaking write.
Very well done Rob.
Love Cindy

The Carousel (13)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-06

Luanne
This is so sad and gutwrenching to read. Yet you have hit so many of the feelings head on.

Burnt youth, death penetrates the heart
bud broken before the flower could start
life stands still, zestfulness gone
tears tumble, as the carousel prances on ....

And it does go on and on and on.........
When some sicko staels the innocence of childhood it can never be brought back. They will carry it with them through their life. It effects everything they do. Always there in the back of their mind hiding. Picking the worse times to rear it's ugly head. It touches the lives of everyone who is in the victims life especially those the victim loves.
This is such a deep and intense write Launne. Ssorry for going on so long about this but it just really touched close to home.
Thank you.
Excellent job!
Cindy

Like the Changing Skies (3)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-05

XD
What a very sad and heartfelt piece you have penned.

Longing for warmth of yesterday
Where smiling sun still shone a ray

How wonderful it would be to bring back the happiness of our yesterdays.

Gazing at stormy hues of grey
A bleak silence over thy rays
Grieving, why must joy go away
And leave a broken soul in dismay

This question I have asked myself allot of times. Still I have not found the answer. It seems like when the one we love leaves the color leaves our world.
The emotion in your words is very strong. This poem leaves you thinking.
Excellent job!
((Hugs))
Cindy

Concrete (19)
by EoB

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-04

EOB
I really enjoyed reading thia piece you have penned. Very deep and intense thoughts.

What else am I left with, but knowledge,
and memories ridden with pain?
The streetlights, a shadow, a number,
what else, in the bitter rain?

This stanza holds so much sadness within. Love the metaphors you have used here.

The concrete and I have in common
a grayness we cannot destroy.
To think we would ever be colored;
vain dreams of a blinded boy.

This stanza is awesome. I love the way you have compared the concrete with the absense of color in your world. You did an excellent job ob this one.
~Bravo~
Take care Cindy

Teenage Depression (The Reality) (8)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-03

Luanne
What a sad heartbreaking piece.

Tears trickle upon a cheek
until the soul is beaten numb
no mercy found in loneliness
as dignity begins to succumb

It is funny how even if you have a roomful of people around you can still feel so alone.


Succumbing to anxieties
riping sunshine from the skies
sinking lower with passing moments
spirit flickers and slowly dies

How sad it is to see our teenagers lose their spirit. This stanza brought tears to my eyes Luanne.

Finding your life is now in shambles
dangling at the end of a burning rope
darkness creeps into the heart and soul
extinguishing the flames of hope

All the things happening in our world today. It would be so hard to have to grow up in these times. You have done a awesome job showing the struggles with teenage depression. I also like that you have included the links so the readers can learn more about the struggles and signs of teenage depression.
Love Cindy

Baby Smiling Bright (16)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-02

Rob
This grips the heart of the reader as soon as they start to read your words.

It is almost early evening and still she lays in bed,
not covered by silk linens, but by misery instead.
Some days she just lays there waiting on the night,
hoping it brings dreams of baby smiling bright.

Iknow this is something that causes horrible pain. For a woman to lose a child.

Her husband stays beside her trying to ease the pain,
praying she can find the path back to being sane.
Clouds of grief hang heavy down in her very core,
as heartaches come not having baby anymore.

No matter how much someone else loves you it dosen't take this pain away. Then it also hurts the ones that want to help so bad. Feekings of helplessness...not being able to fix things for your loved one.


She hears her husband coming to sit quietly in her chair
and wishes he could know how much she really cares.
Even with him beside her the future still seems bleak,
but she will give her all tonight not to be so weak.

She loves her husband but can not pull herself out of that dark hole that has her captured within it's grip.


Tomorrow she will be stronger and rise at early morn,
throwing back these covers of misery she has worn.
Go walking with her husband to feel the warm sunlight,
then be home in time to dream of baby smiling bright.



She will go on pretending everything is ok. Yet she will still morn for her lost child forever. The pain never ends.
Excellent piece Rob
Love Cindy

Threshold to Happiness (6)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-02

Luanne
This poem is wonderful and so heartfelt.

Forgiving mistakes, as we are human
within our hearts, hurt once tried to reign
leaving our souls lost and hollow
depth of our love, has overcome the pain

This stanza says so much about your character. So many times when people are in a relationship and something goes wrong they run. Instead of staying and working things out. Life is to short to throw away a love.


I promise to alway comfort you in sadness
cherish the beautiful memories we create
and if I should go before you my love
wait for you at the garden of Heaven's gate

This just touched me the most. I know it is because of things that have happened in my life. It just paints such a picture of peace and serinity for me.

God has given us a second chance
and from this day forward, I swear
for wherever the wind may carry us
it's a journey we both will share

Today I walked down this isle alone
but I will leave, forever by your side ...

This is a perfect ending. Just like things should be. Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Shine After Rain (1)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-30

XD
Your writing just keeps getting better and better. What a poem full of beauty.

The clouds have parted
Letting sunshine through
No more stormy days
Though still missing you

I love this stanza. I love the way it shows the letting go of the pain yet still holding on to memories.

To take to the skies
Just like the joyful birds
Singing memories' songs
Passion's parting words

This is really fantastic.
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Rising From the Ashes (4)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-26

Luanne
This is such a heartfelt piece. Brings tears to my eyes.

No longer dreaming, the impossible dream
flutters flow through veins, in harmony
No longer the usual I love you said more out of habit
but now with truth, sincerity and meaning
Something we almost lost ... forever

There are so many ways to say I love you....when you are with the one you love the most you can tell the difference......I'm so glad you have found this once again.



Happiness fits me well
[frown] dangling on the edge of extinct
aspirant dreams do come true
feeling and believing that today
love is a "combined" feeling not just "I" ... anymore

This puts things in perspective so well....Iy is a feeling for two. ...Sometimes we don't think and you turn around and find yourself alone....and it is a very bad place to be.

Excellent piece.
Love Cindy

Sitting Scared (25)
by Alvaro

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-24

Alvaro
Very deep and intense piece you have penned. The pain can be felt in everyword you have written.

You, a monster of feeding pain,
You abuse such a lonely girl.
From confusion to illusions
Forever lost in our given world.

Love the ending.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

Yearning (2)
by SnoWryTeR xiaoDan

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-22

XD
What a sad but beautiful poem you have penned. The sadness cries from each word.

Like stormy gusts bringing icy rains
These heartaches could never go away
To have loved and lost in vain
When will dawn's light kiss darkened days

This stanza just reached out and gripped my heart. To lose love I think is the most painful thing to endure. The heartache stays with you always.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

The souls revenge (31)
by Dixiedaisy

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-19

Kay
This piece is full of deep and intense thoughts.

Only evident thing is Death
Born to die we face the test
Facing truths in final breath

These lines are so true. How many times do people wait till they are dieing to try to fix things they have messed up.


Helping hands slap mouths they feed
Mocking those in time of need
God forbid they live and breed

These lines make me so sad. Some people don't deserve to be parents. This is a excellent piece and really makes you stop and think.
Great job!
Love Cindy

In My Life (7)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-16

Debbie
This is very sad. Broken dreams and promises. The pain that comes to the heart.
But yet the hope shines through.


In my life a garden grows
Gnarled hands sowing seeds
Another Spring of promises
Flowers through the weeds

The happiness of a new love. The ending is great. Awesome word choices and imagery throughout the piece.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Yesterday (15)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-16

Nitin
What a sad piece yet there is also hope. The imagery and word choices are great.

This story will fade in coming days
Mornings will get bright once again
Time doesn't stand still for anyone
And nights would bring back my pain

Sometimes life gives us nothing but pain and sadness. The pain can be felt from the words you have penned. This stanza there is a small ray of hope for something better to come.

Deep inside this shell there's hope
For days of love that lay ahead
Pain can't be all that life brings me
From my yesterdays I have fled

Here you turn your back on the pain from yesterday. I love the entire piece. My wish for you is that all your yesterdays and tomorrows always be bright and full of love and happiness.
Love Cindy

Doesn't Matter (34)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-15

Rachel
This is very sad but so very true. I have lived through it. It is so sad when someone we know is struck down in their prime.

"Tomorrow is never promised
Take each day to love and share
Even if you do your best
Doesn't matter, life's unfair "

Life is very unfair. But we have to make the best of the situation we have. It is very hard sometimes. Just always try and help someone...even if just a little compassion or a kind word.
Great job!
Love you
Aunt Cindy

Enough is Enough (6)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-12

Luanne
What a thought provoking piece. Memories and thoughts can consume us. Somedays we live only in our thoughts. Things that have happened. Things we want to happen. The wounded heart.

enough ... Enough ... ENOUGH
wipes tears
I am better than this
better than you
invisible hands hold me
wipes away suffering pain
whispering ...
do not let this consume you child
live for today, live in the moment
kisses beads
thank you
smiles ...


Yet there are invisible hands holding us and wiping our tears. This is an awesome write.
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

Your pathway to heaven.. (5)
by paulsingh2005

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-11

Paul
Reading your poems of faith always make me feel so good.

Love unconditionally, is what he give to you.
So guard your heart and tongue, in all you say
and do.
Reach out to him, as your heart you surrender,
for on judgment day he will be your defender.

This stanza says so much. If everyone would prqactice this. What a wonderful world it would be.
Great job!
Your in my thoughts and prayers.
Love Cindy

Raven's Lullaby (6)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-11

Debbie
You rose to this challenge so well. This is an amazing piece. I love your interpretation. The great agony Poe must have felt losing his love.

Dark one! Evil incarnate! Recant thee, Liar! Reprobate!
An angel is my sweet Lenore, again his answer "Nevermore"
Oh Death! thy scabbard find a mark, on final journey I embark
Love bleeds upon this gilded brand, I pray thee angel take my hand
He chortles! "Nevermore" with glee, Not even death can set me free
Into emptiness go I, lulled by Raven's lullaby

This stanza was a wonderful end to a awesome poem.
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

From Me To You (18)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-11

Rachel
What a beautiful poem of love. The imagery is wonderful. It paints a picture of that once in a lifetime love you feel for someone.

A gift that's so unique
No one could out do
My heart, my love, a promise......
Forever, from me to you

I love this stanza. I just relate to the words so much.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

The Move (11)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-03

Debbie
This is a great piece. Life moves so fast and our babies grow up and leave us with our memories of times they were small.

Laughter sounds from days gone by
Silent tears from longing eyes
Grip the handle, turn once more
Echoes from the slamming door

This brought tears to my eyes. We always wish we could go back to when they were still so small. Written from the loving heart of a mother.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Lifeline (35)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-01

Deb
You did such a fantastic job on this challenge. Your imagery and word choices are amazing.

Shooting stars embroider dreams
Cloud collage not what it seems
Ocean waves wash printed sand
Lifeline breaks on wrinkled hand

I love this stanza. The feelings that go through the mind while reading your words take me away to a different place.
~Bravo~
Love Cindy

Once I Held Forever (4)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-25

Debbie
Such a sad heartbreaking piece. This brought tears to my eyes as I read your words.

Once I held forever
Held it tight within my grasp
Too bad I didn't realize
Forever seldom lasts

This stanza really wraps things up. When ever I read your writing it always touches me in some way. You have amazing talent.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Where Once A Beauty (Trijan Refrain) (12)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-23

Debbie
This is so beautiful. I love this form and you mastered it. You bring so much into each piece you write. Excellent imagery, flow and word choices make this into a fantastic piece.

Where once a beauty did reside
Wind carries lonely cries
In darkness I am forced to hide
Turn everything inside
I long for you to rescue me
Embrace this heart and set me free
I long for you
I long for you
Restore the love that used to be

This stanza just found it's way right into my heart. My wish for so long. Still I wait, Still I wait......
~Bravo~~Bravo~
Love Cindy

In My Heart (10)
by Luanne

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-23

Luanne
What a painfully sad piece. It fits perfect with the picture. The word choices and imagery are awesome. I love the repetition you used.

Let me sleep, the peaceful sleep
Take the very breath I breathe
If love was meant to hurt this way
I shall never love nor hold another
...... In My Heart ......


OH this stanza did take my breath.....Love is one of the most painful yet beautiful emotions that we feel. When we lose that love and feel like we can no longer go on. Luanne you have captured these feelings perfectly.
~Bravo~
Love Cindy

As Quiet River Runs (Licentia Rhyme) (12)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-23

Deb
This reads like a sad fairytale. Excellent imagery, rhyme, word choices and flow. This piece just left me breathless.

On fragrant bed of Violets and Queen Anne's lace
You were laughing, we sent wishes to the sky
We never knew those seedlings carried our goodbye

They joy and happiness of love come from these lines.

Remainders of a feeling, now love has gone
Wild flower remnants lie dry beneath my feet
Please return- repeats in every anguished beat
Clouds aloft bring home what I cannot deny
Change has come as snowflakes dance in Winter sky

The agony of losing the one we loved. Such heartbreaking lines.



Willing you to this bank, back where you belong
To lie in my arms and feel the soft new grass
While feeling at home with you back here at last
Our quiet river will flow soft as before
On to forever to be lonely no more
And we'll be laughing, watching clouds floating by
To see dreams and wishes we've cast to the sky


The lonliness of waiting for our love to return. Always wishing. Longing to be back.
~Clapping~
Awesome Debbie a very difficuly form. You have done such a amazing job!
Love Cindy

If wishes could come true (28)
by Ingrid de K

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-18

Ingrid
What a beautiful poem of love you have penned. The imagery is fantastic.

Gazing into the depth of your eyes
In awe of the beauty and sheer
captivating serenity of the face
of this man I hold so dear

This stanza really tugs the heart strings. To have ths feeling once again. Can feel the longing coming from your words.


Hazel colored eyes that haunt
my every dream both day and night
Always in my thoughts, my love
Images of holding you so tight

These feelings of love where the other person occupies all your thoughts night and day.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Love Is All We Are Looking For (12)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-18

Nitin
Although short this piece is perfect. It holds so much in it's two stanzas.

Same tears from different eyes
Same destiny at different shore
Same fears from different lies
Love is all that we are looking for

Though people live in different places and different cultures. The pain we feel and the tears we cry are all the same. Very thought provoking write. Love the play on the opposites. Imagery and word choices are awesome.
Excellent job yaar!
Love Cindy

Long Road Out Of Eden (3)
by Beautiful Chaos

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-16

I really loved this piece. The imagery and word choices are awesome.

The serpent is sliding,
Slithering near,
To feed on your doubt,
And feast on your fear.

This is a great stanza. It has so much truth to it. How many times do we let our doubts and fears take hold and control us.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

It's Your World Now (4)
by Beautiful Chaos

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-16

You have done an excellent job on this piece. It is hauntingly sad yet a pleasure to read. Imagery and word choices great.

I do not know this place,
Where we have come to be,
It's all so strange and distant,
Like a haunting melody.

I love the opening stanza it sets the meaning and flow for the entire piece.

I hope you find your way,
Before it's much too late,
My love is sitting in the wings,
But time will never wait.

The ending is perfect. Reminds me of the old saying. Time waits for no man.
Great job!
Take Care Cindy

Of Unicorns And Dragonflies (17)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-16

Debbie
This poem is really beautiful. The imagery and word choices are awesome.


Then I gave a hummingbird
With finest fairy wings
His gift to me a dragonfly
The ugliest of things

How many times we don't stop to see things as they really are.
This really makes you stop and think.


You haven't seen my gifts my love
Was his sad reply
For all things have a purpose
From weeds to dragonflies

To measure true love's value
With gold to gauge it's worth
You overlook the beauty
Held by everything at birth

I loved these last two stanzas. Because the smallest of things in life sometimes are the best. The beauty from within is where you will find your happiness. What a wonderful lesson to leave for your children.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Dreamed There Was No War (9)
by Poetess

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-16

Liz
You have done a wonderful job on this piece. Wonderful use of the title for the contest. All the emotions that this portrays to the reader are heartbreaking.

This is for the fallen soldier,
who cried on the cold, hard floor.
Tonight he was a child again,
and he dreamed there was no war.

This ending stanza really brought the tears to my eyes. When ever things in this world cause us so much pain I think we all wish to be a child again. Things could be fixed with a hug and a kiss.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

Pencil Me In (9)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-15

Debbie
This piece you have written about your dreams and fantisies with your love is wonderful.

Ish and Don
Strum and hum love songs
Fill the potted palm jungle
Over the rainbow

When we can't go to paradise we bring paradise to ourselves.
I know your dreams will come true.
Love Cindy

Winter Wishes (12)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-14

Debbie this piece is so sad yet the way it is penned makes it such a pleasure to read. The imagery and word choices are awesome. The flow is flawless.

Stains of past to mar the ground
Emptiness devoid of sound
Frozen heart no longer feels
Numbness has become so real

This stanza moved me so much how many times I have felt this way.


Pristine lake cast so serene
Snowfall covers all obscene
Breaths of love, a final plea
Awake my love and follow me

This last verse....is the one that I like the best. It makes me feel that two lost loves come together after death.
~Clapping~
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

The Page (3)
by Bill Turner

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-13

Bill
This piece of yours makes one look into ones self.

So, where do you fall upon the stage?
Are you a mover of props and gear?
Do you go through the motions, being hip?
When life is done will writing be your rage?
Reach down and simply turn the page

If I had the chance to be a mover. To once again walk in this world with all I know and have learned there are so many things I would try to change. Funny how you don't realalize how things really are till it is to late to do anything about it. How much of life passes us by before we know what is really important.
Excellent job my friend.
Take Care Cindy

Abide in him and obey.. (7)
by paulsingh2005

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-13

Paul
I was so happy to see you poast. This is a wonderful piece with a very inspiring message.

He is a god of of mercy, of love, and of all
that shall endure,
and, an everlasting life in heaven with him
we've been all assured.

This stanza had so much meaning to me. Gives me a reason to hope.
Excellent piece my friend.
Love Cindy

Blue. (11)
by BlueDreams

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-13

Bert
This piece really is heartbreakiing.

Knowing where I should be, That is in bed
Still I sit here, ceiling fan rotating over head
Illness is imminent, body in a weakened state
Some relief I must find, If not create

This stanza really touched me deeply. These feelings are so sad. Feeling lost and alone is a very painful thing.

Yawning, mental and physical reserves are spent
Now I should be relaxing, be content
I don't know what is left, or what else I can do
I do know the sky and I have one thing in common, we both are blue.

There is always a reason to hope.
Great job!
Love Cindy

Only If I Could Rewind (17)
by End Of Eternity

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-12

Nitin
What a sad and yet beautiful poem.

Feeling roses for the first time
Like a child lying on sand
Feeling love for the first time
With the touch of your hand

Feelings of the wonderment and joy of the first feelings of love. what a fantastic stanza.

If i could rise from my grave
Scream my hidden feelings
Only if i could ever rewind
And taste my own healing

Just the thought of being able to go back and fix things that are wrong. This piece made me smile and made me cry. Excellent word choices and Imagery were put into this piece. Your writing is always so unique.
~Bravo~
Love Cindy

Shadows Of Lost Memories (10)
by billy rob

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-12

Rob
You have the talent to make your readers feel so many things through your words.

Crawling from the box, he takes his first drink
and gets ready for another hard day.
Tonight if he's warm, the shadows will come
and just maybe will take him away.

When I read your poems I actually feel I can see things through your eyes. The sadness crys from this piece. The imagery is fantastic. Word choices and flow are excellent. I love the way you weave your stories into verse. What a awesome job you have done on this piece.
Love Cindy

Unforgettable Serendib (3)
by Lithium

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-11

Sam
What a wonderful dedication. ~Serendib~ Meant so much to so many poets on the site..

Your words will never be forgotten,
They will remain forever in my heart,
I will never forget the happiness you gave,
And the memories which shall never depart.

I know he touched my life in so many ways. A wonderful poet and friend. Always took the time to check on me. I wish I knew where he went.
Excellent job Sam!
I hope you find a way of getting this to him.
Love Cindy

Faith (5)
by ben thompson

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-11

What a beautiful and heart touching piece.

It's the scent of a flower
On a light summer breeze
Promises of a rainbow's beauty
Putting all fear at ease

This stanza shows the beauty in the world that so many take forgranted.


It's enduring with grace
Loss of loved ones so dear
As they whisper last I love yous
Softly in your ear

The most painful thing to endure the loss of those we love. Thnk God for Faith for it carries us through till we can once again reunite with our loved ones.
Exceelnt job!
Love Cindy

Brian's Fight (26)
by Dave

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-11

Dave
What a sad piece. I'm so very sorry about your friend. Losing someone you love is such a painful thing. My heart goes out to you and Brian's family. For it is those left behind that suffer.

Every breath draws me closer to my ultimate fate
Death has come knocking and I fear it won't wait."

You have brought so much emotion to this piece Dave. Makes us see we should be thankful for each day we have. Treasure the people we love. My thoughts and prayers are with you.
Excellent job!
Take care Cindy

It Would Be So Simple (Monchielle) (17)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-07

Debbie
I love the way this flows and the word choices you used. It is such a beautiful and touching piece.

It would be so simple
To lay thee down beside
Or cleave unto the deep
While patient solace waits
To soothe thy troubled sleep


This stanza really spoke to me.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Now You're Gone (Lento) (14)
by debbylyn

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-06

Debbie
What a wonderful job you did on this poetry form. I know the sadness that comes from your heart in this piece you have penned. I share this with you.

Snow upon thy tender bloom
Go quietly to thy rest
Know sweet lullabies unsung
Grow still within my breast

This broke my heart. So many memories. Sleep tight Little One May the Angels watch over you.
Aunt Cindy Loves you :(

No More Cries (20)
by Rachel RTVW

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-04

Rachel
How nice to see a poem from you again. What a beautiful yet sad piece.

Warmth of hand
Tender touch
Memories, fantasies
Miss you much

This stanza really tugged at my heart. How hard it is to miss someone we love. So much pain and so many tears.
Excellent job!
Love you Cindy

Now And Then (Collab) (34)
by Italian Stallion

commented by Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-04

Well this is a beautifuly done collaboration.
As minutes turn into hours
And hours turn to days
My heart keeps on beating
For the one I truely love
This stanza is my favorite part. I think because it strikes a chord in me. You did a excellent job on this write. The emotion is great.

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