Comments : One... Two... THREE...........

  • 9 years ago

    by Mayday

    Oh!!
    I just didn't expect this poem to end like that!!
    The damage is self-inflicted the, the ending really packs a punch

  • 8 years ago

    by Liss

    Very visual, great work.

  • 5 years ago

    by Lost One

    Reminds me of the definition of insanity. Doing the same thing over and over expecting a different result...

    You know why I jump off the roof friend? Because it feels so damn good when I stop.

    On a technical note... be cognisant of your syllable count as you write. It will help the flow of one rhyme to the next. Well done.