Comments : Skeletons rattle

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brilliant Hazel - seems like ages since I've read a new one from you, even though it's only been a few days! The last stanza is superb! nominated

    • 8 years ago

      by Dancing Rivers

      Thanks bud, it has bee too long since I last wrote hey. yeah this one was inspired by a lucid dream I had

  • 8 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    Very well written Hazel. And actually quite chilling

    'The skeletons are not in my closet,
    they're inside of me.
    Now they haunt my lucid dreams.'

    This last stanza actually gave me the shivers. :)

    • 8 years ago

      by Dancing Rivers

      Hehe thanks Cass :) sorry, can I give you a warm hug (hugs you)

  • 8 years ago

    by Sunshine

    The strongest part of this complete poem is its closing stanza. It was a brilliant way to end the poem, leaving the reader in one way or another speechless. It was not easy to forget these words and thus, came my vote to this poem.

    The flow and word choice are in harmony although its a dark poem. There is so much emotion in this piece. There is SOUL and a shape of fear in this poem.

    The Lucid Dream inspiration can be perfectly senses when reading carefully into the skeleton/soul lines.

    Well done!