This was an interesting poem. I loved the second stanza. The words were powerful and the emotion was real. The flow was kinda rocky though.

"and then I loose everything
sadly I loose you too"
^ I think you mean "lose" not "loose"

Overall a *4/5*

Yet another great read it flowed nicely, something to edit tho in the 3rd stanza you said loose you too should that be lose you too??

overall a piece worthy of a 5/5

excellent work

Gary.

Well to tell you the honest truth.It's kind of confusing.I don't know,maybe it's just me but I read it twice and if you didn't tell me what it was about,I wouldn't have known.I'm sorry but it's definitly not one of your best.I'd give it maybe a 3/5 but I wont rate it.
Keep writing,
Rado

I liked it.
the first and last stanza are awesome.
keep it up
5/5

please dont forget to RRC my pems
poem1:reason
poem2:deaf dumb blind

REGARDS
MILESTONE

The beginning was so good, and then it kind of twindled down from there. This isn't the best of the three I've read, but as you said you wrote it quickly. The emotion is clear, which is a plus, and your vocab is still good. I enjoyed this, but with the differing rhyme in each stanza, it threw me off. Other than that it was good. :]
Overall, 4/5

Tammie

This was a good poem, I felt every emotion coming out of it. But there's something wrong with it, that I can't get my eye on it. Good job though. 4/5

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

Each come with a knife
all leave a jagged slice
my soul is battered
my heart soon to be broken?

my favorite part 5/5

I don't think the flow was to bad, if the reader actually takes there time with the poem and pauses at the correct times it's fine. Once again your imagery and word choice were outstanding and the last line of this poem was breathtaking 5/5 GG23