Break Its Chains

This world is a evil place at times youre right, but there is some beauty if we look hard for it. I loved the hope at the end. It was a nice ending to a dark poem.

You did a good job with showing how evil looms but still there is beauty and it can all be overcome and done away with. Excellent job.

Overall a good write with some good metaphors.
The message is very clear, and the feelings conveyed well.

Just a couple of minor critiques; evilness reads a bit awkwardly in that sentence, though I figure you wanted it to rhyme with goodness in the following stanza, and reins should be reigns. The line; 'For an insurrection is sure to arrive so soon' also reads a little awkwardly and disrupts the flow a little bit.

Just an example of one way to write that particular sentence another way that might flow easier; 'The inevitability of an insurrection looms'

I enjoyed your poem nonetheless and it'll be fine if you decide to keep it just the way it is :)

Dark but with hope at the end, that goodness will endure above all. Well done.