Submission date : 2012-06-11
Last edit : 2012-11-16
Lost kelwin ( F P C D )
Awww :-( sad but very good
Purple Rose ( F C D )
Typos: in the first line the word "Fore" is used incorrectly - that word means before. So I would probably switch it to "for" or something like that - it would make a lot more sense that way. Also, "SPLENDED" should be "SPLENDID." I just noticed these mistakes, and thought it was worth mentioning :) It is your poem and I am just trying to help...
This is a very dark poem here. I really like it :) It seemed to me that you were trying to tell the kids who were watching that they should always stand up for themselves no matter what even if it kills you :) I don't know if that was what you were trying to say, but that is what I got out of it.
[ Praised by Burning Angel | Approved by Sherry Lynn ]
Rebecca Davies ( F P C D )