Darkened Scars (Title Toss Entry #1)

by Kakera   Jul 4, 2014


2014-06-XX - This is entry #1 to the title toss contest that just ended.

I invaded the open truth
of light never bouncing off
my scarred skin,
to prove the power
of our illusions -
the mirage of life itself

Because I've always
been an outsider,
a beaten, broken,
self-loathing child
in a society that taught me
how falling like dominoes
is the only way to survive;

I met the huntress on a dinner date,
and I asked her if it's worth it,
to hunt down us, the lost ones:
We, who ride on shadows, outcasts,
despite train wrecks being
the only result possible
when clashing against our souls:

She told me to meet her later instead,
not having an answer ready by hand,
and while I was gone she prepared
to make me force
between light and life come sundown

I told her that we, the shadows,
always live prepared for
never being able to see
the edges of tomorrow:
we wake up in the morning assuming
that any day now we could perish

And as a rider of the darkest shadows,
hunted by those who can't see in the dark,
I already knew this was my last debate.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I wasn't at all surprised at this winning the contest, it was very well put together and it flowed well, which is very hard to master sometimes when you try and combine so many different prompts.

    I thought the tone of the poem was kept well throughout and I did not find myself losing interest or finding errors or stumbles along the way.

    I like the story type narration, it made it interesting and made me want to follow right on to find out where the story was going and where it ended.

    You used some really good wording outwith the prompts, especially in your opening verse, you used such powerful wording here which really grabbed my attention and gave the poem lots more detail.

    I think the title you picked was very well chosen, it fitted the poem well and you done a great job merging all the prompts within.

    Well done.

    • 9 years ago

      by Kakera

      I definitely thought I had a fair chance with this one, but I my jaw dropped to the floor completely when I saw the results.

      It was extremely fun to write, and the fact that I managed to use all fifteen prompts is satisfying in and of itself.

      Thanks for the wonderful comment, and for hosting a very fun contest. Looking forward to more of them! And thank you for the nomination as well!

      -Jean