Earth is Sanity ( or at least it should be ) - Story

by Everlasting   Oct 16, 2014


Ha! Boy, you see!

it's a reflection. It's a contemplation.
It's more like meditation. Rather, it's a product of your imagination.
I call it the night, the moon, and the stars all combined to create
an incandescent light in the darkest corners of your mind.

This light triggers a sensor in your brain
that runs through each nerve in your body
until its voltages are too high
that your neurons go insane.
Hallucinations take over your senses.
You start seeing and hearing voices.
Everything in your room turns into a black hole
that absorbs your attention,
that vacuums your thoughts into a spacecraft
that accelerates your heartbeats.
Your lungs become fastened with a seatbelt
that doesn't let you breathe. Your mind is shuttled
into a state-planet with precipitation ranging
from 100% forecast of rain to target your eyes.

You start crying. Your hands aim higher
and higher for an inhaler that is in your back pocket,
but your knees react to a strange force
that makes you target your stomach for no reason
till the chair you are sitting upon

falls onto the carpet ( Clash! )

Suddenly, the gravity of the situation changes,
you feel like you are floating in mid air
while you lie on a carpet breathless, agonizing - and at the same time
calling for help, but no body listens
because everyone in the living room watches Tv
with a surround system that overpowers those from the movie theaters.

You know this, so you try to relax.
You try to unfasten the seat-bell that tightens your lungs, yet your hands
continue to battle alien thoughts that arrive at your brain every second,
that take over your sanity.
But they can't hit the right mind with reason - yours!
Instead they punch almost skeletal bodies
that try to get you out of the seatbelt your lungs fasten yourself with,
and from the spacecraft your mind got yourself into
as your conscience tries to shuttle your senses back into reality

by saying:

"Just because you're paranoid doesn't mean they aren't out to get you..."

Written by: L.L.

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  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    I enjoyed reading this poem! I really do think this was about a mental disorder? Or did I understand it wrong? The fact that the person is bascically on their own is a sad thing almost makes me think of scizophrenia since no matter where they are they are alone. The very fact that there was no one to help them shows you how the person is treated: poorly, like they (the other people) don't seem to care one whit if that person dies and if they die alone I bet they wouldn't call 911 if they did find them. Watching a t.v. that loud would make me want to smack them since I would keep the volume down and just in case if I hear something I would go and find out unlike the people in this poem. Also this is my last sentence, loved the imagery it was stellar regardless that you triggered my inner mom in me (which sucks), loved the way it flowed and I though it was nice the "ation" part in the first stanza maybe you did it before or after the whole what does .... have in common (yes I forgot what were the words I know it just had in common the logy part). Anyways great read 5/5

    -Mori

    • 9 years ago

      by Everlasting

      This piece was about asthma, I was trying to capture the moment of frustration when asthma attacks. Thank you for your comment Mori!

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I see science and poetry coming along here hand in hand.
    Its a story with simple explanations coupled with vivid
    imagery making it interesting as well as entertaining for
    your readers. You always seem to cook up interesting
    thoughts in your poetry making it unique.

    Excellent!

  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem took me on a trip upon a magic swirling ship . I am speachless

  • 9 years ago

    by Jad

    Your poems are such a joy to read. The complexity and the story like telling of the poem is incredible and very enjoyable. This poem was even more enjoyable due to the fact that you used quite a bit of medical information in the middle and also by your ending. I like the ending because it leaves a question to the reader to answer. Is it true or not true, referring to the paranoid and out to get me line. You leave it open and let the reader decide for themselves, which I think is nice. I always like to either have a very strong ending or a ending that makes the reader stop and think. Both are great ways to end a poem.

    The imagery is really incredible in this poem. I feel as if I could be this person, alone in his room, trying to get help but unable to. There's also a lot of emotions of helplessness in the poem as well, which makes sense because of the situation. There is also a simplistic side that I really like. For instance, when the main person is screaming for help, but no one can hear him because the tv system is too loud. Subtle things like that make the poem a lot more natural and easily gives the reader a way to relate and understand.

    There's honestly a lot I could pull from the poem and dissect, but for sake of not writing a five page paper, I will leave my comment as thus. I must note that you did a wonderful job with your metaphors in this poem. You kept to them from start to finish and tied everything together really well. Very mature writing.

    In all, I was not disappointed in the least. Your writing is always profound and fun to read. I especially like this one because it is telling a story, and since I know a few people who suffer from this kind of condition, I felt like I could understand what the person was going through. I hope you continue to write and learn and grow. Great job and keep writing!

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