My True Love

Such a powerful and dark write which really packs a punch with it's vivid imagery. It's like a verbal trip around one of those dungeon museums. Creepy!

Slice and dicing is to much fun

- "slicing and dicing" would be better.
- and it should be "so" much fun.

I'll slice your face off before im done

- I'm

but first your toes and finger tips
to hear the squeel beneath your lips

-squeal

and once you gasp and scream from pain
your tongue will be the next victim in my game

tracing my blade across your skin
blood pouring out as you give in
i start to contemplate my next move

- I

the next cut will have something to prove
it will start below your pretty face
as your heartbeat starts to lose pace.

as i pack up and leave town

-I

my face is overcome by a dissatisfied frown
with urges to attack again
the question isnt who but when

-isn't

so while you sleep alone at night
please think of me as you turn out your light.

Few errors in grammar and punctuation which will help tidy the poem up if you fix them... please :)

But this is a creepy dark write!! Lol

WOW! There should be an ultra dark section for this one, lol! Saying that, this does the job and hits you square between the eyes. Excellent.