Broken Promise

by deeplydesturbed   Jul 6, 2016


I made a promise,
one I tried hard to keep
I appologise to you
but I need to get a full night's sleep.
Last night I broke it.
I cut myself deep.

It's hard to explain to people,
I don't do it just for fun!
I'm sorry I broke the promise.
I'm slowly coming undone.
I'd like to say this is the end,
but I'm afraid it may have just begun..

Weaker than I thought
Nightmares unravelling
Along a lonely path
Yet again I'm travelling
Slowly my pace goes
As I move; it's gravelling

The red flowed out,
as the pain grew intense
It made my other pain go away.
The feeling was immense!
There it goes out the window,
all my common sense.

It helps me feel in control,
when all seems lost.
What price will it be?
Was this at some huge cost?
I slept well after; great in fact
Then woke up to the winter morning's frost.

Please forgive me for failing
to keep a promise I made
Please don't be too mad at me!
I can't lose you; I'm afraid
Please hold me close; hug me
As my heavy heart is weighed

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Side note. I would like to note that Gravelling is in reference to the feeling of confusion. Not the road was being paved!

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  • 7 years ago

    by chickii007

    I can completely relate to the feelings you've expressed. Writing is a great outlet. I hope you continue!

  • 7 years ago

    by Maher

    I could never get the hang of reading poems that are very direct about things that happen in life, but every now and again I try, just in case things change. It flows well - no pun intended. I also liked that it rhymes.

    Well written and I'm sure you're not unforgiven :)

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you Maher. Im glad you read it and enjoyed it and got the hang of it.

  • 7 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Anyone who expects a human to be slip-up free is holding you to too high standards that I doubt they even hold him/herself to.

    Regardless, a poem filled with heartfelt imagery and emotions that are as raw as an open wound. I hope you find a way to patch it up and let it heal, and if the person on the other end does not want yours to... know their wound is the one that will not, not yours, and most definitely not by your doing.

    5/5
    Much Love,
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks Stephen. As always. I'm sure its just me holding myself to higher expectations :( and expecting to be unforgiven..

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    N, a personal, emotional and well written piece here. I really hope it's not literal but I guess that it is. Life can be so hard at times but remember you may not feel lucky because of past events (I've been there but in different circumstances) but you are.
    Massive hugs, Em

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thanks em. Its actually a promise I broke to someone on here :(
      I just hope they read it and forgive me..

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