Submission date : 2005-05-29
Was good until not being able to see through the bars and the bars are FOR the depressed instead of the metaphor OF depression... kind of lame there. But liked it a lot up until the last three paragraphs.
J Nair ( F P C D )
I loved it
Em ( F P C D )
Wow. This poem captured my heart from start to finish. It pulled me in and I was there all the way. I have suffered depression for years and it's everything i have felt and more. I have never read something so honest and pure since being on this site and I am so glad i have now.
It shows not that it affects the person depressed but also people that love them.
You wrote all the emotions well.
DarkNDangerous ( F C )
Absolutely loved this. The flawless continuation had the appearance of the poem being seemingly effortless, yet filled with emotion.