Submission date : 2007-05-13
Robert ( F P C D )
I think you had one meaning going on then you bratched out abit you held it together ar the end but I think it messed up the flow in the peice oh well good read take care Plot121
Taylor Lyn ( F C )
Excellent poem, I'm working on a similar format poem...not same topic, but same format idea. I like the language and imagery you invoke in your words, but hopefully you don't feel this way in reality. Nonetheless, great work!
ImNotPerfect20 ( F C D )
This is great.. i always loved Acrostic. i have always wanted to write one to..
i dont see any fault with this. great flow..
great vocab and good images it created.
keep it up.. 5/5
Marian ( F P C D )
"Maliciously and silently, I plan it all"
Heh. The opening line made me smirk for drawing my attention into it immediately. It reminded me of a little villain that I dearly adored in my dark-ish fictional reads. The idea was fine, although I slightly agree with Mr. Robert. You've created a momentum at the start, but it suddenly died out for...unknown reasons...Hmm Anyway, I loved how this poem was finely written with a rather fluidlike flow. (You have my props for that.) My pleasure to read. I love it! Keep them coming, Hippo! Love, Tiger
PoeticJustice ( F P C D )