silvershoes ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-16
WOW, this absorbed me completely. Great writing. Still, I can't believe they allow this type of thing on P&Q, it's sooooo erotic and intense! Like porn! On your profile it says you're a guy, how could you be so in tune with lesbianism?
Branwyn ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-17
This is really well written and I agree with above comment, it is sorta pornographic.
Almost unbelieveable this is written by a guy, you seem to know so much about how a woman's body works!
You have talent, no doubt about it whatsoever. If you wrote a whole book with stories like these I would buy it for sure.
Let me know if and when you have made a story like this one again, I would love to read it.
God bless and take care,
5/5 Ingrid
Leesa ( C )
at 2009-10-17
Yes this is soo graphic but in a intense captoring way! and your a guy?
WOW you are every womans dream...i cant believe you know how the female body works and wants...this was BEAUTIFUL!
I LOVED IT
5/5 hands down!
Corina de Haan ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-17
Great poem. Very detailed. You have done a great job writing from the perspective of a woman. Not many people can do that about the opposite sex but you have done it amazingly.
Corina
Stephanie Naylor ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-31
Some of the comments say it was a little pornographic, but it was absolutley amazing so who cares, the graphic the better. Your writing really seemed to draw me in. Once reading i didnt want to stop and when it stopped i wished it went on. So great job and a well deserved 5/5
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