Maya RIP Neda Salehi Agha Soltan ( F P C D )
at 2009-06-27
LOL, that was fun, heh!
I read it a few times and tried to imagine you doing it and it was hilarious:)
I briskly bolted, blinded by black holes in the
broken cement; tripped backwards on my butt.
^^
I already knew we are very much alike, but didn't know you are clumsy like me as well, ha ha.
Very, very nice Temps. Thanks for the laughs!
*hugs*
5/5 Ingrid
Ray Smallshaw ( F P C D )
at 2009-06-27
There are plenty of sites on the net that hold a database of tongue twisters, one tell us that the tongue twister was original brought about to aid the vocally impaired, how I haven't a clue?
I did enjoy yours a lot, though I wasn't at first sure what a brownie battered blizzard was. Being English our tastes are a bit staid, living in Thailand though you can buy a various blizzard ice-cream concoctions at Dairy Maid, though I must admit I have not seen the BBB on the menu.
I must also admit like Maya I to had to read it two or three times so the Tongue Twister side works okay.
For its sheer fun I gave it a 5/5 Ray S
Trust In The Lord ( F P C D )
at 2009-06-27
This was such a cute story and was a fun tongue twister, very long! Loved the imagery portrayed, this made me smile, thanks for that! 5/5 from me, take care and keep writing, always and forever.
~MaryAnne
Sylvia ( F P C D )
at 2009-06-29
Thanks for the smiles and laughs this morning. Nice tongue twister.
Italian Stallion ( F P C D )
at 2009-07-02
Very original write, I enjoyed it. The flow was good as was the structure. I felt it could've perhaps been a little more twisting for one to read hence the name tounge twister; however, I thought you did a good job for your first one. Keep up the good work.
Peace, Joe
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