Comments : Bad Boys, Good Girls

  • 12 years ago

    by Kelwin lost in thought

    Love it

  • 12 years ago

    by Sherry Washburn

    Hello, I just joined the site this morning, I read your poem it all seemed to flow along until I got to the line
    bad boys good girls,
    wanna have fun
    with each one ?
    I'm not sure if your working in a certain type of format but my suggestion for the line with each one would be to maybe change it to
    with everyone
    or with each and everyone
    like this

    bad boys good girls,
    wanna have fun
    with each and everyone.
    that would flow smoother and make more sense, hope my suggestion dosen't offend you.

    ty for sharing your work with me your poet friend SpoiledWrott10 =)