Princess Fiona ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-11
You captured my attention from the first line. I felt transported to a different world. You know you're talented when you can open up new worlds to your readers.
Thanks for this one, I really loved every ..(not so much each word.).but the feeling of being transcended to another place.
T e m p s ( F P C D )
at 2009-10-11
Wow this was something totally different from anything Ive read before. It was as if you were listing different scenes off but it all flowed together very well. I found this poem to be really intriguing and something different. You do have talent, like Melody mentioned! Keep letting it shine. This is great.
Red Velvet
at 2009-10-14
Very nice. One line reminded me of the story of the little french woman who was 109, that rode a bike and smoked cigarettes. She told the newspapers (before she died) that she felt sorry that she lived so long because her tenants were waiting for her to pass away so they could buy her home. Lol. Your poem was beautifully simple, and a truthful representation of daily life from the 'cafe'.
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