Comments

Sylvia A ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-24

A downpour of daydreams, dancing, twirling among them, so vivid. The last verse to me is full of hope and promise. Well done.

Rainbow Dreaming ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-24

Aw this was just a beautiful poem. I loved the vivid images and the tone was one of hope.

I have made that my word of the month...HOPE

Spirit of the Forest ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-24

A well written hope-filled poem that uniquely displayed inspiration and the message you wanted to get across to your readers. Very uplifting, thanks for that smile Temps!

Good luck with all you are busy with, I am sorry for commenting so late on your new poems!

5/5 from me, a promising piece that is needed int today's world.

God bless you!

~MaryAnne

Meena Krish ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-25

A downpour of daydreams
bursted from broken seams

I like this image of daydreams raining. This is a very good opening that draws the
reader into your poem.

of a courageous idealist,
drizzling memories;
compressing them
against my skin

Another part that I like. It feels like a passionate bond between dreams & the person...very good!

Ingrid ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-25

This went from sad to cheeerful in the most amazing way....indeed we should never give up hope..it is the one thing that keep us strong.

Lovely poem, Temps:)

God bless,

5/5 Ingrid

DreamOfOlwin ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-26

A beautiful write :) Our daydreams do indeed twist, twirl, dance and light up our mind/days! Loved this! Well done :)

Lonely Rider ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-27

A downpour of daydreams
bursted from broken seams
of a courageous idealist,

^^ the starting captured me... the analogy with rain is superb... so beautifully penned...

to forget this vacancy
in my heart, carved
by acidic goodbyes-

^^ that was touching... goodbyes are never happy but some can leave a scar in our heart... the last line is brilliant...

spectrum of colors; blooming
rainbows and smiling stars
sewn by threads of promise.

^^ another verse with splendid imagery... hopeful and beautiful... lovely lines...

brilliant poem :)

Tom Swart ( F P C ) at 2009-10-27

Very nicely done and well penned with perfect words to display your emotion. keep up the nice writes. peace

damont ( F P C ) at 2009-10-28

The title is unique your actually very good writer i like your poetry. lovely i mean where do you come up with this stuff lolz. keep writing 5/5

Nobodys Hero ( F C D ) at 2009-10-28

A very enjoyable and beautiful piece youv'e wriiten here =]

The tittle of the piece attracted me immediatly to this poem and I wasnt dissapointed, excellent job!

Lady Nik ( F P C D ) at 2009-10-30

You've done it again. I feel another winner here Temps. Very lovely word choice, the imagery is great as well. I love your title too. It's pefect. Another flawless piece from that brillant mind of yours :) Nik

Genuine Lavender ( F C D ) at 2009-11-01

This's a pretty nice poem, Temps...The internal music of alliterations gave real echo for the whole fluctuating emotions.

Enjoyable piece from you.

Ingrid ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-02

Well deserved win Temps, congrats!

Ingrid

Lady Nik ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-02

Congrats hun :) I told you this was a winner.

Quiet Insanity ( F C D ) at 2009-11-02

Congrats cookie dough :-)

Hounds of Winter ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-02

Wow, Temps congratulations! You are going so far with your poetry and it just is so nice to see that blossom. Good job, I hope you are enjoying your week.

~MaryAnne

Genuine Lavender ( F C D ) at 2009-11-02

Congratulations, Temps.

billy rob ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-03

"Confidence streams across
my wandered mind in a
spectrum of colors; blooming
rainbows and smiling stars
sewn by threads of promise.

"sewn by threads of promise"..what a beautiful verse in such an excellent write. I loved the way you wove this piece. Well worth the wing. A very well done from me. Billy Rob