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PorVida at 2009-11-04

This is by far the greatest poem i have ever read...thank you so much!!!!!!

Amaranthine ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-05

I thought this was amazing. You told me straight up , HEY, you cant break me!. lol

" walk proudly by faith, and never by my sight
I'm a free spirited bird, now let me take flight
Let me soar in the sky, leave my problems aside
and watch them from afar, as my problems divide"

I really like this stanza because it shows to me that maybe faith controls the problems if you let it. Or as someone would say God.
How happy and free you are when your not worrying abotu them all the time.


Also I like " .. and only I can hear it"
We are our own person so truly, we would be the only one to really know.

I'd write more but I have to switch classes xD
So thankyou for the write. :P

-Angela

Rainbow Dreaming ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-05

I'm strong, I am Courage! I just cant back down
Cause I'm free from misery, with God in my background
so problems come at me, i will stay being invincible
you cant make me or break me, I have my principle


I loved the tone, the theme, rhyme and flow. But mostly what it speaks...words of optimism, hope, courage and Invincibility.. dynamic :] Exceelent

Ingrid ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-05

Ha ha, this was really cool:)

It reads like something a boxer or artist says to himself in the mirror before he goes out there and knocks them dead..

A well written poem, I enjoyed it very much.

God bless,

5/5 Ingrid

Courageous Dreamer ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-05

Omg was this ever amazing. Long time since I read something from you TPC but this one was wonderful; awesome work. Very optimistic and well done. Nice to see such a positive write :]

Em ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-06

Optimism is the way forward lol. Well written. I liked this poem, everything about it was amazing. Flow, rhyme and the words you used. 5/5, Em

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