Comments - Life is Not a FairyTale

Innocent Fairy ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-15

But now I grew
Dreams faded away
Living in a tough life

Where monsters are hiding
Ready to attack
In happy times
Turnig white to black
Happiness to sadness
Smile to a sigh
Laugh to a cry

There is no prince charming
Who will be by my side,
when I need him
Who will prptect me,
from danger
Who I'll live with,
happily ever after
~these are my favorite stanzas and the poem was great and a great read very fantastic and wonderful i loved it 5/5

Bird of paradise ( F C D ) at 2011-10-15

Flow is gud..once agn loved ur piece of work..u hv improved a lot..5/5

Born As a Sin ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-15

This poem is just Amazing... great piece of work.. I loved each word of it.. It shows so much desire which still needs to be fulfilled.. Great piece.. You are getting better day by day....

Do you know when..
Snow white had her first kiss
Cinderella danced with the prince
Bella lived with the Beast

These are all fairytales
EndedÃ�à happily ever after
Where we wish to live in

"I wish I could be
The most beautoful princess
in the world
And live happily"
This was a wish
that grown with me,
when I was a kid

But now I grew
Dreams faded away
Living in a tough life

Where monsters are hiding
Ready to attack
In happy times
Turnig white to black
Happiness to sadness
Smile to a sigh
Laugh to a cry

There is no prince charming
Who will be by my side,
when I need him
Who will prptect me,
from danger
Who I'll live with,
happily ever after

This is the Fairytale which we have been listining from ages ... and i too don't think these things really do exist in this cruel world.. You have combined those words in such a perfect way.. everything in it is just awsome..... :) great work 5/5

[ Praised by Ms Happiness | Approved by Larry Chamberlin the Godfather ]

A Dreamer ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-15

Wow. This is a magnificent piece. I absolutely love it! You have done a wonderful job, and anyone can relate to this! Fantastic. 5/5 for sure!

Jenni ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-15

You've got a few spelling error, but you could easily change it with the spell check. I like the content though because it shows maturity and it's really realistic yet it is contains a sadness too. Well done!

Paul Gondwe ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-16

Brilliant work..splendid

The Poet Behind The Poems ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-17

I loved this i agree with jen ... but also keep ya chin up prince charming is out there i promise x

Lebanese Phoenix ( F C D ) at 2011-10-17

OMG, the opening stanza is amazing.

The way you combined all the characters in one stanza.. FLAWLESS!

And you poured it brilliantly on paper.

savior of broken dreams ( F P C D ) at 2011-10-19

Do you know when..
Snow white had her first kiss
Cinderella danced with the prince
Bella lived with the Beast

** this stanza i would take out the repeditive periods and add a comma and instead of "do you know when" i would put "do you remember"

These are all fairytales
Ended happily ever after
Where we wish to live in

** change it to "ended with happliy ever after
Where wishes do come true"
this way makes it sound more like the fairytale

"I wish I could be
The most beautiful princess
in the world
And live happily"
This was a wish
that grown with me,
when I was a kid

** "my wish would be"

But now I grew
Dreams faded away
Living in a tough life

**"but now as I grow
my dreams fade away"

Where monsters are hiding
Ready to attack
In happy times
Turnig white to black
Happiness to sadness
Smile to a sigh
Laugh to a cry

** you spelled turning wrong

There is no prince charming
Who will be by my side,
when I need him
Who will protect me,
from danger
Who I'll live with,
happily ever after


good write but it does need some cleaning up. you dont have to take my advise, but you could put it in your own words. the way i fixed it was easier for me to read. otherwise a very inspiring write. keep it up! (:

[ Praised by Ms Happiness | Approved by Sherry Lynn ]

marilyn cabajes at 2011-12-12

The best of all... this is what in my mine... that life is not a fairytale... whooo..... i couldn't imagine that i fund a poem which fits my believen.... :)

Wandering Shade ( F P D ) at 2011-12-28

It made me want to write a response 5/5

Marvellous ( F P C ) at 2012-01-21

Nothing comes true, outside Belief.. Answers found, come from WHAT you seek! But truely, it takes some time.. Nothing good, comes speedily.. And Yes!, Life's a Reality NOT fairy tale.. Good deal!

James Pike ( F C ) at 2012-01-23

Very well done! I loved the opening. To remember childhood, when we dreamed of our own "happy ever after". Then we become adults, and learn that fairy tales never come true. A grim reminder of true life, but very nicely worded. Thank you for sharing.

Ole Carsten ( F P C D ) at 2012-01-23

Hi Love you poem, rich colorful and with a good flow. Even the heros in a fairytale get pregnant, have kids, horrible hair and wants some time off to refind the magic, and I look forward to the next poen in the tale of love

br
Ole

Love and Peace ( C D ) at 2012-01-29

Well honestly this poem is truly practical loved it i loved the flow u describe, n the reality 5/5 awesome
let me describe it, well the whole poem is divided into 3 to 4 phases....

@Do you remember when,
Snow white had her first kiss
Cinderella danced with the prince
Bella lived with the Beast

These are all fairytales
Ended happily ever after
Where wishes do come true
.............
in these 2 stanzas u're telling like a narrator.. its a good start it creates the image in our mind
.........
"I wish I could be
The most beautiful princess
in the world
And live happily"
This was a wish
that grown with me,
when I was a kid
.....
in this u're dreaming n want urself to be that princess which is in fairytale, thinking like a kid who is wishing for this kind of world
....

Where monsters are hiding
Ready to attack
In happy times
Turnig white to black
Happiness to sadness
Smile to a sigh
Laugh to a cry

There is no prince charming
Who will be by my side,
when I need him
Who will protect me,
from danger
Who I'll live with,
happily ever after
...................
and in the end of this poem u're telling the truth n showing us the real face of this world by the helf of these two stanzas
.......................
5/5

Timothy ( F P C D ) at 2012-02-11

Nostalgically shivering! The dark twist is beuatiful and solemn. I felt cold inside - this is a master technique.

kamote07 at 2012-03-03

Yeah... there's a lot of monster ready to attack in this cruel world..

Shanix ( F P C D ) at 2012-03-26

Dreams fade away..n wishes never come true..i agree..i hd dreams n thot they wil b wit me bt am jst a star on a sunny day to thos dreams

Baby Monroe92 at 2012-05-26

I think every girl can relate to this great poem. you really did capture the whole story behind fairy tales and reality.. love it!!


Write your comment

If you'd like to comment/rate this poem or you want to publish your own poetry at "Poems & Quotes", sign-up here!