Hmmm let me criticize in the best of my ability...(if you don't mind) There's a lot of errors in a simple and small poem if I can call it that, the "I"s need to be capitalized and you could've made the sentence into an average poem and congratulations for joining P&Q that being said I'll show you how you could've made the poem better (in my eyes)

"If I really sat down
And let the world destroy me mentally,
I would explode physically
And turn the world to what its meant to be..
empty
-Chocolate"

-Mori