Comments : Turtle

  • 9 years ago

    by Ziad Assaad

    Bear with the length...I think the cadence of my writing makes it read faster than it appears long. Enjoy, and help me end it properly, please. I kind of just left it...

  • 9 years ago

    by Everlasting

    "Besides, these flowers have pollen, the pedals have fallen

    ^ I think I just spotted a typo on that line... Pedals or petals?

    Other than that... I am not sure what to suggest for finishing the story. I like it as it is. It was fun to read it. It wasn't that long. It was creative.

    • 9 years ago

      by Ziad Assaad

      Thank you so much for reading it through to the end. Good eye! Despite the multiple times reading through this, I never noticed I had spelled pedals, rather than petals!