Comments : Don't you feel.....

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    ...yes mothers are that and much more! They are taken for granted and it doesn't hit us until we sit, think about those times and feel.

    Short write with a sentimental message...liked it.

  • 9 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I like the content. Though I feel that this poem could beneft with some editing just to become better.

    For instance, in the first line

    You are referring to Mothers in plural, but in the second one, there's a she implying singular.

    I think it would either be best to separate the first line from the other three. Or to change the other three with "they" instead of she.

    Otherwise, I like it.

  • 9 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Thank you Lucero for your kind suggestion.
    Will do likewise.

  • 9 years ago

    by John Doe

    It's great how you can fit in a lot in words so few.Absolutely love it.

  • 9 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Alka Ji
    it well nice poem as well as correct.

  • 9 years ago

    by Mayday

    :( Well this makes me sad. I think yes, a lot of mothers are taken for granted! Especially in the years that their children are growing up but HOPEFULLY those same children grow wise and start to understand what all their mom's have done and still do for them. I know I have. <3
    Anyways, I like this - More should read it

  • 9 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    The rhyming is very decent. Wow!!! Very well crafted this write is. In this Four lines only you have described the great role of Mothers. Well Done!! 5/5.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Very good and with a wider message.

    We can all take our mothers for granted and shouldn't.
    Take care, Em