Comments : A Cobweb?

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh I love what you have done here, using the spiders web to portray the dangers of the internet, I love how you can take this poem as an addiction, because once you go online you become trapped in that web, and trapped to the unknown world of who you really know, especially vulnerable children.

    (Though we could not complained,
    we had each other's company.)

    - complained should be complain here.

    Good write, and I like how you have put a question mark in the title too, like we can make up our own mind as a reader, as to what we think about the risks and safety of being online.

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging comment:

    This is a poem that takes the state of the world today and not only puts it in perspective but allows it to be taken and viewed as literally anything else that is able to rule so much of your life so easily before just sorta fading away. There is a unique feel and a creative use of voice in this piece that really sets it apart from others. Very well penned, and well deserving of some spotlight.