Comments : Man Food

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    I loved this before reading it, when I came across the title, I said to myself, this sounds really good. Man Food, life genre; I got excited!

    I really love both the message and your way of conveying it. I was set off just a little bit by the flow, it would be much better with some punctuation tricks, but that's only me! Also I humbly believe that it would be better to break this line:

    With orange bows surrounding delicate cheeses.

    into

    With orange bows
    surrounding delicate cheeses.

    ^ or anything.

    Nevertheless, I found this to be very powerful, and thought-provoking. One of those poems that make you sit back for a short while and wander in thoughts about reality.

    Simple terminology with a strong impact! nothing can be better.

    Thanks for sharing.