Comments : A Mate for Life (Sonnet)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,
    As you know, I love a rhyme and love a sonnet which for obvious reasons lends itself to "old school" poetry.....which, again, you know I love. "But, if the world delivered only doom, my love would shine a light on ev'ry step...." - beautiful work, Michael
    All the very best,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi Michael,

    This is a beautiful declaration of love. It speaks volumes of the steadfast and loyal character you posses.
    As it happens, I want the same thing, lol! A simple and pure life, no fuss, no drama and a mate for life. Why do people always want "more'?
    Well done, a beautiful Sonnet:)
    5/5 Ingrid
    ((hugs))

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Michael,

    Your words echo the feelings of love you have for this person.

    "Your eyes mirror my hearts only desire,
    To find a mate to live a life of ease;
    And know that kindness burns just like a fire,
    With love for nature and a world of peace"

    These lines give the feeling of finding a perfect soul mate for the writer.

    "But, if the world delivered only doom,
    My love would shine a light on ev'ry step'-
    To keep you safe and have you home real soon,"

    The desire we have to keep the ones we love safe. Reach out and grab the readers attention. I think everyone wants to feel this kind of love and so few find it.

    "Come to my arms a place for you to rest.
    Whilst birds in trees have breath enough to sing,
    my love will serve your life and all that brings."

    What a beautiful ending for your sonnet. The feeling of being safe in your loves arms. Then also a feeling of sadness.

    "Whilst birds in trees have breath enough to sing,"

    This line made me feel like that soon there would be no birds singing from the trees :(

    Excellent sonnet
    Take care
    *hugs
    Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like Sonnets and it will be really nice to read when its done with a smooth flow and uninterrupted rhyme scheme; which you have penned effortlessly! It reads beautiful and it sounds beautiful too...nice work :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A beautiful well written Sonnet! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    A wonderful write and well deserved to be on the front page, your writing is so so absorbing.

    Great write fella!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    What a well deserved win!!

    Congrats, Michael:)

    ((hugs)) Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    I've always found sonnets one of the more difficult forms to pull off without it seeming forced but Michael does a wonderful job here.

    The imagery painted throughout is vivid enough that it allows the reader to visualize it in their mind while the poem itself is beautifully detailed and elegantly written, whilst the rhyming flows perfectly and the emotion is present from start to finish.

    "But, if the world delivered only doom, My love would shine a light on ev'ry step'-" I adore this, the positivity that love will overcome anything, even the entire world if needed. The closing two lines I found to be seductive and excellently wraps up the poem.

    Truly beautiful work here.