Comments : Frankesteinism (Pensee)

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    This is really cool too-love the format, love the poem!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Samia

    "...the aftermath of crippled society"

    ^^

    Love that line and the imagery it conjures.
    Great piece,

    Ben

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Samia,

    This is a new form to me - I like the way you deliver this most famous of creations. Arguably he was the epitome of 'a crippled society'

    Well done - I will attempt one now.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Samia, thanks for showing me this form and widening my knowledge in the poetry world :)

    A beautiful written piece and very powerful.

    Great write, Em

  • 7 years ago

    by hiraeth

    I'm not sure if I'm correct, but I'm picking up a political tone in this piece. The title hints at their being a theme of human creation gone awry, I think perhaps ethnocentrism devolving into racism? The concluding lines 'in the minds of ignorants'

    - which reminds me, ignorants isn't a word since the root word is an adjective, being a bit pedantic but thought I'd mention it. I know what you were going for, and fully support the reason why you chose 'ignorants' over 'ignoramuses.

    err, like i was saying before, the concluding lines make me think of racism (or bigotry?) since it conjures up the classical image of an entity sitting on someone's shoulder, trying to guide them.

    You always find absolutely beautiful forms, and execute them well. Really enjoyed this!

    • 7 years ago

      by GB

      Yes, a political tone is heard aloud in this poem and yes I intended to use "ignorants" not "ignoramuses"... I believe that we can slightly "ignore" the grammars when there is a need for that :)

      Thank you for sharing your thoughts, always appreciated.

  • 7 years ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    In a world where money is power, knowledge is everything. Your words are a true ripple through time,the title for this is absolutely fitting!