Comments : Three Months Clean and Sober (Senryu)

  • 7 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Powerful yet tender. Andrea, I know you are proud of your daughter, but in no way has that stinted your ability to phrase your feelings without getting maudlin.
    Strong soft wings: juxtaposing strong with soft gets the point across that her frail form carries great inner strength.
    Flying into hell highlights the problem that her strength of opinion caused her to use her talents for self-destruction. Yet, she is still flying - unlike Icarus whose wings were burned ascending, Robyn's strength withstood the hell-fires and is pulling her back to earth.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Andrea, such a sad yet fantastic written piece.

    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Love, love, love. Through every stumble and fall, those wings will life her up. She will make it through <3

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Andrea, what a beautiful Senryu! You must be so proud of your girl! I'm happy for you too, it's not easy having a loved one with addictions, I know you've been on a long journey with her. Hugs!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a wonderful senryu about a mother's obvious pride for a daughter with demons but has come out fighting anyway.

    This genuinely moved me.

    SL

  • 7 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    Despite the lack of detail here, this piece is incredible in a way that few other than Maple can achieve. The imagery is relateable in a wide manner of situations and so many people feel this way towards people they love. This is a write that is sweetly dedicated to a well deserving daughter, but still manages to describe every member of the human race at some point or another. Absolutely one for the win, and if not more than worthy of the hm because everyone needs to hear this at some point in their lives, and somebody is always on the sidelines just searching for the right way to show that they're near by when things get better or worse.