Comments : Thru Shut Eyes

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    Great poem. you write very well.
    I liked this part the best:
    Those fluffy, pure clouds
    Floating aimlessly overhead
    Once looked weightless and free
    Now they're crushing me instead

    Destiny has called my name
    Its voice dark and bold
    People gather, surrounding me
    Even still, I feel so cold

    wow, I really loved these stanzas.
    keep it up.
    much love,
    marjan

  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    I love it. wonderful imagry there. it is quit unlike any other poem i have read as far as content. great work indeed.

    ruby

  • 18 years ago

    by aaron c s

    That was beautiful imagery and sensory writing. a great poem. well done.

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Wow girl!! this is some very deep stuff.. gr8 job!! i mean, i lyk ur rhythm, very well-chosen words... i reli lyk the way u compared wat the world looked lyk b4, and wat it looks lyk now.. pessimistic and sad, but nonetheless amazing!!!
    keep up the gud work
    thnx 4 ur comment, it meant a lot
    take care
    Nannoush

  • 18 years ago

    by Falling Up

    Wow.. this is so metaphorical... it has so much meaning... before i read the ending, i was under the impression u were reffering to life and love and how u feel about it now, and the before, but really its an over all representation of life itself.. it totally consumed my thoughts and really got me thinking.. its a shame you only have 3 poems, which i said i would only rate 3, but i wish u had more, so i could read more of them.... you are a great writer and i love how u can express somthing by saying somthing else... great use of language in this!

  • 18 years ago

    by Heather

    Great poem I liked it alot

  • 17 years ago

    by Deana

    Its hard to imagine what your feelings would be if you really had to face death. you did a great job with this.