Crucify your mind

by Dancing Rivers   Oct 13, 2014


Erratic thoughts, flow
tranquil as the Thames-
gushing streams of sentience-
Through subconscious canals.

What will it take for you, Adam,
to let go of your mind's prejudices?
Did you know, when Eve fed you,
that decadent morsel,
that you would crucify your mind?

Were you aware, Adam,
that she buried a crown of thorns,
deep within your skull-
when she fed you the serpent's lies?

Tell me, Adam,
did you know, when
you danced beneath the heavens in Eden
(locked in a passionate embrace)
that Eve would nail holes in your palms?

When the temptress gave you,
your delusional gift (a son)
and washed your feet with your blood,
pray tell me Adam,
did you know she would
crucify your mind?

Crucify your mind, let hallowed men,
Reign
Under the heavens to which
Christ ascended,
Infinitely holy,
Fed by the spirit.crucify, oh Adam, crucify,
Your mind...

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  • 9 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is very deep

  • 9 years ago

    by Lune de ma vie

    Erratic thoughts, flow
    tranquil as the Thames-
    gushing streams of sentience-
    Through subconscious canals.
    ^
    Descriptive opening stanza, I like the expression of your thoughts flowing, the vivid imagery of the subconscious is truly eye opening. Like the thoughts of yours are flowing through these subconscious canals freely coming to life.

    What will it take for you, Adam,
    to let go of your mind's prejudices?
    Did you know, when Eve fed you,
    that decadent morsel,
    that you would crucify your mind?
    ^
    Awesome rhyming here, awesome question here. What a powerful question and statement here. To wonder what exactly Adam was thinking when he was tasting that forbidden fruit. Love the thought and wording of how this fruit crucified his mind.

    Were you aware, Adam,
    that she buried a crown of thorns,
    deep within your skull-
    when she fed you the serpent's lies?
    ^
    Wow. What a way to explain the eating of this fruit. Like the sin is sinking into his mind, body, and soul. Vivid and so much imagery.

    Tell me, Adam,
    did you know, when
    you danced beneath the heavens in Eden
    (locked in a passionate embrace)
    that Eve would nail holes in your palms?
    ^
    It is a emotional stanza here. The curse of that fruit and the awakening which happened was so detrimental I don't think Adam nor Eve realized what was happening.

    When the temptress gave you,
    your delusional gift (a son)
    and washed your feet with your blood,
    pray tell me Adam,
    did you know she would
    crucify your mind?
    ^
    I like the constant question here. It plays deep into the message you are trying to get across. And the deep sin and torment which was brought to Adam when he ate the forbidden fruit.

    Crucify your mind, let hallowed men,
    Reign
    Under the heavens to which
    Christ ascended,
    Infinitely holy,
    Fed by the spirit.crucify, oh Adam, crucify,
    Your mind...
    ^
    Great way to end it. Like almost asking Adam to cleanse his soul by crucifying his mind from sin.

    • 9 years ago

      by Dancing Rivers

      Thanks Justin, that's an awesome review,I love it!!! :-)