Letting go (syntuit string)

by Mr. Darcy   May 22, 2016


For years your dark hands
and warped mind haunted my days:
nightmares within me

At last I can see
and have no need for crutches;
the past is my strength

Like a hornets sting -
I cast away burdened pain
by forgiving you

michael
2016

2


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Michael,

    A great syntuit string that puts my own to shame. I'm not sure if I know precisely what this is about, but I may have some idea.
    The wrongs that people do us in the past and the ills that we suffer can only ever make us stronger if we survive them. Put it this way: the strongest people are often those who have been dealt the hardest experiences.
    The last syntuit here is victorious in two ways: firstly, you have overcome the pain that was given and secondly (more importantly I think) you have done it by forgiving them. What greater personal victory than that?

    Fantastic.

    Ben

  • 7 years ago

    by The Po whet

    I like this opening stanza
    "for years your dark hands
    and warped mind haunted my days:
    nightmares within me "

    I liken that stanza as though
    you felt like you were being held
    a prisoner by this evil person
    and you couldn't escape from them.
    Because they had sinister power over you.

    "at last I can see
    and I have no need for crutches ;
    the past is my strength "

    This stanza I interpret is that
    you finally found freedom from
    the spell this person had put you in.
    And now you're using that experience
    to avoid a recurrence of that in your life.

    "like a hornets sting
    I cast away burdened pain
    by forgiving you "

    here you liken the pain they caused you
    to a hornets sting,nice imagery.
    And how forgiving this person has given you relief.

    Amazing write.

  • 7 years ago

    by The Po whet

    I like this opening stanza
    "for years your dark hands
    and warped mind haunted my days:
    nightmares within me "

    I liken that stanza as though
    you felt like you were being held
    a prisoner by this evil person
    and you couldn't escape from them.
    Because they had sinister power over you.

    "at last I can see
    and I have no need for crutches ;
    the past is my strength "

    This stanza I interpret is that
    you finally found freedom from
    the spell this person had put you in.
    And now you're using that experience
    to avoid a recurrence of that in your life.

    "like a hornets sting
    I cast away burdened pain
    by forgiving you "

    here you liken the pain they caused you
    to a hornets sting,nice imagery.
    And how forgiving this person has given you relief.

    Amazing write.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Michael, you have excelled yourself again. I love all these forms you try your head at because you do them so well.

    For years your dark hands
    and warped mind haunted my days:
    nightmares within me
    ^^
    Great opening with fan imagery. I can imagine this dark hand gripping you and making it hard to distinguish between reality and nightmares. To often this happens, a person takes over us and leaves a bad smell sort of thing.

    At last I can see
    and have no need for crutches;
    the past is my strength
    ^^
    I really like this part because in the past you've been a little unstable like all of us no doubt so needed crutches to aid in your stability.. My take anyway. The past is the past and should stay there but often it doesn't because it does shape our future.

    Like a hornets sting -
    I cast away burdened pain
    by forgiving you
    ^^
    Beautiful metaphor here and fantastic imagery as always that you cast away burdened pain like an hornets sting because you forgave.

    All in all fab, Em