Submission date : 2005-10-09
ﻻJustAriﻻ ( F P C D )
This poem is so KICK ASS!!!! The flow is kind of off, but i feel that every word in every line is needed to capture what this piece is about. :O)
These were my favorite stanzas:
""That girl is so weird." "where?" "right there in the back."
Shoot another stare and I -will- turn into a sociopath
I swear, the constant murmurs, they aren't hard to understand
I know just what your lips whisper behind your hands.
Your pathetic jokes don't deserve a sympathetic smile.
I'm not willing to be fake just to make your life worthwhile.
Renee, a sociopath?....maybe
small towns full of bit.ches would make anybody crazy."
Aha, you remind me of myself, looking for a bad look just to have a reason to go full throttle attitude on them and teach them a lesson. It's difficult not to pay attention to what they say, but it's not hard to dismiss it...sometimes anyway.
This kicked my poems' asses all at once. Awesome work, Renee. :D
♣Hunky♣ ( F P C D )
Gangsta Poem Renee May Day. keep it upperz
Natalie84 ( F P C D )
Wow Renee...that is awesome! I love it! I love how you really don't make it like a pity me for what they do. It's optimistic (TO ME) because you suggest it's not you but them that's what they whisper about so much. I like that....you never cease to amaze me...