Comments : How This Love Binds [ Italian Sonnet ]

  • 7 years ago

    by Jack Nightengale

    Well written and beautifully expressed. The feeling of love that feels like it's can't be put into words or thoughts. Amazing work

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Very good, Lucero. I do have a couple of pointers, in terms of the meter, though.

    "unawarely" - UN a WARE ly

    ^^

    This means the iambic meter is off in this line as the first syllable is stressed.

    Also, "spellbound" - SPELL bound

    ^

    This means that line ends with an unstressed syllable.

    As to the content, I have always believed that love is what's left after passion's fire is spent; we cannot base love on the initial ecstasy - that is a simple charade. The 'calming' feeling seems to me a far more reliable symptom.

    Well done, these aren't easy. I've just written one myself with the alternate cdecde
    rhyme scheme at the end. (Not posted yet)

    All the best,

    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Ben, I did not noticed that one. "Unawarely"

      I have fixed it. Lol i think. The other one "spellbound" I took the liberty of sticking with that one.

      I look forward to your Sonnet.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    No problem, Lucero.

    As to my sonnet, I have to admit to finding the flow in Italian sonnets a little harder to achieve, especially with the cdecde finish...so don't expect too much, lol

    Take care

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Beautiful

  • 7 years ago

    by Mary

    Very beautiful