His Way Of...

This poem conveys such a lot with a great economy of words. This dangerous passion the man is afraid of is tangible in your writing. Some pious men will always blame a woman for their own desire as though her existence itself is wrong.

"a man who will
kiss fire,
then accuse me
of burning him "

Damn girl.. damn.

You have an appreciation and mastery of the English language that few can emulate, which is maybe why some struggle to critique your work maybe at the risk of sounding bland and off key, me included. Anyway enough blithering....I read this the other day and found myself coming back to it.

I like the way you put a line break between Yesterday and the next line, further emphasising the time gap. One thing I admire about your poetry is the way you tie your metaphors together "seductive flame" and "torrid tongue" work so well together and give more strength to the emotions conveyed. The image of your partner being drawn to you, though he wishes he wasn't, as some forbidden fruit which he isn't strong enough to deny, made even more powerful in the second stanza by turning his reticence into the affect it has upon you, making this a powerful and enjoyable read. You make an art of condensing so much meaning within a few words, opening a novel to the reader.

Somebody has made comment that you should put your poems into book form....you should.

I really like this poem! It flows so nicely and tells a sordid tale...in a way. Very sensual...way to get the reader involved! thanks!

"so why do I feel dirty
for beckoning a man who will
kiss fire,
then accuse me
of burning him "

Excellently written!