My Lord (Rictameter)

by Maple Tree   Sep 29, 2015


"My Lord"
hath taken thee
far away from Scotland,
I have become royalties Ms
a Lady who stands beside thee, in love
vow bestowed twix noble, peasant-
I whisper gracefully
loving thou more
"My Lord"

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  • 8 years ago

    by Chelsey

    You are ridiculously epic.
    For as much as you write, I just don't know how you haven't ran out of a title, topic, or style....You slay.

    I adore this, and actually, its making me want to watch Ever After with Drew Barrymore, because thats all that popped up lol I'm a dork.

    This is seriously very beautiful. I want to add too, this reminds me of a Biblical statement, which is for wives to submit to husbands. It just read that way to me, like you were completely submissive to this man. Devoted. Loyal. In love. Respectful. Nothing can come between.

    Thats the statement you made here to me.
    Get out of here. I'm tired of your excellence LOL

    • 8 years ago

      by Maple Tree

      I love it when you comment giggles..... Love you

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    ^ I understand his excitement now haha

    This is SO you! I can imagine you and him walking out of a quaint village, into the forest, laughing sunshine with fairy dust trailing behind...

    This poem for sure made me smile, awesome with the form too :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Fair maiden thou prose t'is an emblem of thou dear heart, scribed with beauty and truth!

    .....in english....HOLY CRAP!

    LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS!!!

    It is no secret how much i love your poetry Syrup, you always write with such conviction whether it be a sad, love, nature or dark write...your dark pieces always have so much atmosphere...your nature pieces are always full of love and life and a spark that just floods the imagination....and your love pieces...sigh...generally floor me into a puddle.

    This write, in my opinion is amazing, not only do you write in a form which is not the easiest form ... not only that but you go and write in old english which is not an easy thing todo without it sounding forced, but this is wonderfully effortless....and you smack it out the park.....and then i read it again....and say to myself hang on a second.... this reads backwards too....what the ffffffffhell...to use a Chelsism ...DANG woman you are awesome!

    if i had one crtique, i would think about changing the word tween to 'twix' but thats only me...your choice doesnt detract from the piece atall.

    Wonderful, Nominated, saved to favs, love ya loads x