Comments

Meena Krish ( F P C D ) at 2009-09-23

Such a clear image you have drawn with
words. I can feel the peace and silence within
this write...take care.

Lonely Rider ( F P C D ) at 2009-09-24

Teasing small leaves from a bush nearby
raven hair becomes wind ballerina's
kissing a numb, bottom lip with paper
eyes gaze, lonesome star becomes a friend
silence, so very peaceful, comforting
^^
lovely write... the imagery is so beautiful... its serenity could be felt through the words... the enchanting silence of night... and the cool breeze... not minding the solitude for a star is always there to accompany... just like a friend...

beautiful write...

Directly Implied ( F C D ) at 2009-09-24

This was peace and poetry. Nicely written with vivid images that give one rest. I'm glad I came across this wonderful write.

Spirit of the Forest ( F P C D ) at 2009-09-28

"Smoke rings dance at three in the morning"

I liked how you said "smoke rings" instead of just "smoke", and "smoke rings dancing" is such a mysterious and breathtaking concept. I also liked here how you displayed the time and answered the question "when?", that was really descriptive.

"restlessly sitting upon cold, marbled stone"

Great use of adjectives here, very alive and fresh to the reader.

"sock covered toes explore under stars"

A unique line, I love how you make this nature write different from others, more, how should I say this, complete.

"teasing small leaves from a bush nearby
raven hair becomes wind ballerina's
kissing a numb, bottom lip with paper
eyes gaze, lonesome star becomes a friend
silence, so very peaceful, comforting
this is the hour when I breathe...."

This was all so stunning I could not pick out one line from the rest, the whole write itself was entrancing and almost like a dream. Very enchanting and a wonderful and impressive display of your knowledge of poetry and words flowing straight out of your heart.

5/5 from me, congrats on the win, you very much so deserved this and I am glad I came upon this write!

God bless you!

~MaryAnne