Comments : Natural hunters

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    A neat little poem :)

    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    ..then the man, he sees her,
    prime prey, ready for the taking.

    Just like the panther,
    he comes from behind,
    weaving around worthless aged meat
    on the cluttered dance-floor,
    then...

    he pounces and delivers a fatal blow:

    "what's a nice girl like you doing in a jungle like this?"

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Hahaha would you believe I actually had something similar but cut it out. It ruined it lol.

  • 7 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I actually like this one very much. The last line of the second stanza made me chuckle even though it isn't a comical piece. Milly xx

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Glad you enjoyed milly! It can be taken however the reader wants. If it brings laughter to your lips, so be it :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Nice Work!!