Raindrop Masterpiece

by ether   Jul 24, 2016


Those many hours
spent staring out the window
at the velocity of raindrops,
oblivious to their fate.

rhythm, flow and conjunction:
the universal elements,
a poetic periodic table.
a construct of the internal masterpiece;
mimicked by the raindrop splatter
that creates its own display
of (con)temporary art;
transitioning, accepting
without question.

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  • 7 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    The imagery within this piece is absolutely stunning and the style here is so interesting - even for freestyle which is usually interesting in its own ways with the personalized flow and message alongside images and scenes that come alive in such new ways even when they are tired or overdone. Now, I'm not saying that this piece is tired, because its really not; but what I am saying is that I love how this author took freeform and creativity somewhere newer than new. Somewhere that the words could come alive in more dimensions than before. I enjoyed the way this was simple and yet intensely beautiful. Great write.

  • 7 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Ether, this is a fantastic poem! you had me at "velocity of raindrops" it make me think of how a raindrop changes shape as its moving and at the point of impact returns to its normal shape just before the splatter....I've known people a bit like that lol I really like your word choice and the tempo of the piece. great job.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Pure genius. Xx

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This poem reminds me of a series by professor Brian Cox that I'm watching on tv at the moment. It deals with the physics of things and explains the reason why shapes are what they are eg, the earth is round for a reason etc. My point in all this is that we too often look at things without really looking.
    What I found particularly excellent about this was the '(con)temporary' part - very clever. Great write.

    SL

    • 7 years ago

      by ether

      Thank you, and I especially like the Cox story. I'm a scientist myself which is becoming increasingly evident in my writing.