Great job! i love that so much! i really like that way it flows, very unique!!

Wow... That was just amazing. I loved every line you wrote. I couldn't pick a favorite if I had to! It made me think a little, and I love poems like that. I liked your use of words and also the way you worded it. It was somehow.. different. You have a lot of talent! Great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce

That was really good. You used really strong words, and they created good imagery. My only problem is it's length. I would have liked it to be a bit longer. But i like what you have. 5/5

Yes, I agree, it has a very nice flow and a beautiful swing of emotion. Very nice all together.