Give Me Tonight

Aww that was rly sweet. i liked it alot. grt job

Aww that was rly sweet. i liked it alot. grt job

Aw. This is very sweet. I love how you used "Give me.." as the first line in each stanza, but made the third word different. I thought this piece was beautiful. It was completely heartfelt, and I was smiling the whole time I was reading it.

Great job. 5/5

-Briana
[& thanks for your comment!]

I usually avoid love poems, but I couldn't resist the title. Right off, a great choice.

"Give me tonight,
To show you the stars"
Absolutely lovely, amazing flow. Romantic and full of devotion.

Every following stanza is a new turn in the path you've created, the continuous "Give me"s were very nice and you've structured this poem beautifully.

The last stanza totally blew me away. I should have saw it coming with "above", since it all rhymes quite nicely, but I was just so caught up in it all that, upon reaching the last line, I could have died.

Amazing work! 5/5

Once again, you've done an amazing job. it's not one of my favorites by you, but I'm sure that's because it's a love poem, eh. I rarely find a love poem that just blows me away, you know? BUt, this one was awfully close.

You have great rhyme, word choice, flow, and everything a poem needs. Maybe a bit of emotion is gone? I'm not quite sure but there was something missing. . .

"find" and "sign" do not rhyme, BUT they did sound good together and fit perfectly with this poem. (:

Keep it up.