So beautiful, warm-hearted and flows well
and the name is intriguing, i mean when i read first stanzas i wondered where's the lie
but there's one thing if i were you i'd change:
try to make last lina more positive
i mean it sounds kinda dramatic
but you don't have to of course, anyways the poem is so cute!

I so totally like it, it's extremely cute, but not to corny like the old-fashioned love poems.

Thanks for the comments =]
And this is very very good i love it.. This just made my day great job!!

Thanks for the comments =]
And this is very very good i love it.. This just made my day great job!!

I don't need no sky
I have mine in his eyes
There's nothing I want to see
But his kind and warm smiles

Great poem just one part that I didn't seem to get so I'm just asking. Was this section suspose to rhyme?

I loved the poem and gave it a 5/5.

Well yeah somehow.. i didn't think about anything better.. i guess i'm gonna change it cuz my friend said taht also. thanks for the comments :)

Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate them, as it's been a while since I wrote anything. Now I have a inspiration for poetry again :) I've read almost all of your poems and really they are beautiful. As I've read them, my feeling towards the person I care about have gotten deeper. Well, I am a hopeless romantic. Keep up the good work girl!

This was great!

Nice work....I liked how you portrayed lies as something that we need to get by because even though the truth is good to hear, sometimes we don't need to hear it....

cheers, josh

I like this one. But I was thrown off when the first line to every stanze began with the sun and the sky and then went to the truth. Threw me off. But still a good poem.