Comments : My Own Valentine's Day

  • 9 years ago

    by lostlllsoul

    Ahmad u never fail to impress me.. ALWAYS!!
    this is very heart felt and deep.. u know that everything's only gonna get better from here now.. as for the poem i loved the flow, ur almost effortless rhyming.. thought provoking also like this " And calling you through silence till my throat bleeds""
    ALSO ur last para was a killer ending!!
    GREAT JOB!!

  • "Now all that's left for me
    Are pictures to view, Are notes to read
    Are sleepless nights and blind dreams
    And calling you through silence till my throat bleeds"

    ^That was absolutly my favorite stanza-love it-love it-love it

    Thus poem was really deep and feeled with so much heartache.I could really tell you put your own emotions into this.Great job.The only thing I saw that bothered me was the 1st line on the last staza.It threw me off a little but other then that-awesome job.5/5

    <3Amber

  • 9 years ago

    by Lemma

    Ful of heartache, sadness and sincerity. The only thing I dislike about this poem is that you have to feel this way. Some really nice rhyme and great flow. 5/5

    Em xXx

  • 9 years ago

    by LiNa

    I loved this poem , it's sad to read because i can relate to it alot actually and that scares me a little but i liked it.

  • 9 years ago

    by Cayce

    Aww!! :[ Great poem, even though it was sad. I loved your use of words. The flow was a little off but eh I think it's fine just the way it is. I liked it :]]

    Cayce xx

  • 9 years ago

    by Kaila

    Aww wow...this poem really made me feel not so lonely you know. I mean we share the same emotion on this day and it's cool knowing someone out there feels the same. This is a lovely poem portrayed with true emotion. I am adding it to my fave poems. Thanks for the inspiration
    5/5
    kaila

  • 9 years ago

    by Chrissy0590

    Awsome now thats feeling...... sadness sweeps over me when i read it great i give it 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Miyourii

    Awesome poem! :D

  • 9 years ago

    by Miyourii

    Awesome poem! :D

  • 9 years ago

    by fatima

    I really enjoyed reading your poem it's very good i could feel the words as i was reading it............ x x x tc
    please do read and comment on some of my poems

  • 9 years ago

    by Hollywood

    I loved everything about this poem it made so much sence to me..wow you have a really good tallent for writting and it could take you some where some day.
    -kortney-