Dayenu

by awww   Feb 18, 2008


Dearest Reader,

It would have been enough if I was given sight
but I received something more, beauty to appreciate

It would have been enough if I was given sound
but I received something more, voices of my loved ones

It would have been enough if I was given photographs
but I received something more, memories to reminisce

It would have been enough if I was given words
but I received something more, people to share them with

It would have been enough if I was given life
but I received something more, a reason to live

It would have been enough if you gave me friendship
but I received something more, love

It would have been enough if you gave me love
but I received something more, you

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  • 11 years ago

    by awww

    Thanks for your suggestions, I've omitted the P.S and hopefully this flows much smoother.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Huh.... Good work :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Really sweet and the form of a letter to a reader is a nice idea, makes the poem very personal
    nice use of repetitions, it really does work here
    and the idea about precious things like love, friendship etc
    and btw gradation (beauty-voices of my loved ones-memories-people-a reason to live) here works perfectly, it keeped me interested to read the end of the poem
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Pesamenteiro

    I love the basic idea, and how it was written...in my opinion very original!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    I really love this poem although the PS kind of broke up the flow a little. It's really nice and different to what I normally get to read. My favourite lines:

    "It would have been enough if I was given life
    but I received something more, a reason to live"

    Magic.

    Em xXx