Comments : Why Not Be Yourself?

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    THANK YOU for also thinking that and now you put to words what so many people are screaming in their heads every day. A chance to be different. to say things that others don't understand. to laugh when nothing is funny, on your own two feet you stand. Thank you for that poem I feel better about myself already. PS> sometimes simple rhyme schemes speak the loudest. thanks for the read.
    (o)-(o)

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    The funny thing about being "yourself" is, you develop with the traits of other people. That mixture of different people, gives you that 'uniqueness'. No one can really be original, no matter how hard they try. However, there are some people that follow one person, or follow the media, and in that, have no sense of originality, but still unique in their small ways. It's confusing, but yeah. I like your poems. They are really, interesting!

  • 16 years ago

    by David Ensor

    WOW

  • 16 years ago

    by Lesego

    I love your poem, I can relate to it. It says so much about people and the daily masks they wear. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by RavishingEruption

    Holy SPRINKLES!! that is the best poem i have ever read! im not even joking...i can't critique it cuz there is nothin wrong w/ it. REALLY REALLY good! like if it wuz possible 100/5! lol but since im so confined to 5...5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Awesome job it kind of boosted my self confidence which needs some serious boosting right about now so that was good and i liked the word choice it all went together nicely great job

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I liked:

    "Why not live at random and do the unexpected?
    Make mistakes without the hate to say "I stand corrected.""

    And

    "Why not dance off-beat while singing out of tune?"

    The best.

    They really stuck out to me.

    Otherwise, I liked this, but it lacked something. However, I did like the point behind it. It's so true. But I guess I feel you could have put more into it.

    Nonetheless, I really did like it. It's better than what I <have> been reading.

    Keep it up. =].

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Whitney

    Excelent poem. very inspirational!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • WoW!!! I love this poem and again such wonderfully written! I love how you write things on true facts! How all your work is not based on fiction but based on real life which everybody can relate to or knows about!

    This poem is amazing, and i am not jst sayin tthat, I mean it! This poem is real, it based on true feelings and on real life, It capures some of the best emotions possible!

    "Why not have the courage to stand and speak your mind?
    Be the first to take that step ahead for all mankind."
    ^^ Great way to get the reader involved into the poem, make them thin "Why not??" Make them think "Why havn't I been doing this? Why have I been following everyone else?" I love this stanza! great choice of words and the flow is flawless!

    "Why not take a left, when everyone goes right?
    Make a choice and choose the black when they all choose the white."

    ^^ Again your getting the reader involved, throughout the whole poem you ask questions, questions that need to be asked "why are we all going the same direction?" I love in this stanza the word choice again and the question you asked.

    "Why not try to shine, instead of fading gray?
    Be yourself and just be you, forgetting Them and They."
    ^^^^^^
    Great way to end the poem!great word choice and a really good question to ask when finishing it off. It leaves the reader sat here thinking "Maybe she's right....Why dont I do this? Why havn't I been doing this? Why am I following "The Trend, Normality"

    You did A very good job on this poem and you desurve alot higher than 5! great job her hun =)

    ~ This Mask I Hold Is Not Held Tight ~

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    This poem is very very true.

    Why not scream out loud and let yourself feel free?
    And take a chance without the promise of a guarantee.

    i loved these lines the best.
    your a wonderfu writer, keep up the nice work.

  • 13 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Simple, and a great message. I loved the examples you were giving too. The thing I like about you, is that you seem to use words to the full, as poems should. You play with them, you mix 'n' match.

    My favorite stanza has to be the seventh one:

    'Why not take a left, when everyone goes right?
    Make a choice and choose the black when they all choose the white.'

    But my favorite line has to be:

    'Why not dance off-beat while singing out of tune?'

    It's just such a fun, happy line that encompasses being free and doing your own thing. Loved it.

    Brad

    P.S. Please vote and comment honestly on all the poems you read.

  • 8 years ago

    by Dominique

    I love this poem. my favorite line would have to be the first stanza.
    "why follow the crowd, when you can be unique?
    Be yourself and disregard everyone's critique"
    Very inspirational

  • 8 years ago

    by Dominique

    I love this poem. my favorite line would have to be the first stanza.
    "why follow the crowd, when you can be unique?
    Be yourself and disregard everyone's critique"
    Very inspirational