Awww.. that was really sad i mean it. and honestly you brought up the vivid emotions and that was great with such simple poem.. and hey i'm not good in suggesting titles but i think may i suggest to entitle it as "Broken Dreams" =) oh by the way it's flawless

A happy start yet sutch a sad ending... I kind of got a bit shocked... I love when poems do that XD...
The poem itself is well constructed and flowed pretty ok... 4th stanza you should change it to years instead of year..
Once more it was shocking and that is a great effect so its great XD....

Overall good job and keep shocking me XD

I'm glad it's not all true...but even partially true is still very sad. How anyone can just walk away from their family is beyond comprehension to me!

A few minor errors I found...

"But to blind to see" should be "But too blind to see"

"Six word that crushed our fate" should be "Six words that crushed our fate"

"you're to busy with your work and your new family" should be "you're too busy with your work and your new family"

"Aren't we imported anymore?" should be "Aren't we important anymore?

Gee am I a nitpicker for grammar or what? :)

Keep writing...I look forward to reading more from you!

Great poem it sad that its true the world is mess up some times.

This poem is rather sad, I would put it in the sad poems section. This poem is a bit off because of a broken flow. The lack of rhymes breakes the flow a bit and that's what disturbed me the most. Although that, the choosing of words expressed such a raw expression of emotions. Nice writing 4/5

Such a lovely poem about family and life.
i love this one because as i read it i can picture what you're try to tell us through your poem.
you did an excellent job with word choice. i will give you a 5/5 with an excellent well done on your poem. keep it up

We once were a family,
together and so happy
But too blind to see,
that it just wasn't meant to be.
`I felt like it was a weak beginning for such a strong titled poem -- the rhymes are quite clumsy and just seemed forced. The flow starts out rocky.

I remember it like it was yesterday,
Six words that crushed our fate
'we have something to tell you'
thats when I knew.
`I feel like it would sound better as "I remember it like yesterday." It's just a suggestion though, and it's all up to you whether you think it sounds better or not. Again though, it was rocky. The last line was too short and broke it.

Now almost 3 years later,
`Please spell out numbers -- it just doesn't look right.

One would almost think you forgot about us
Aren't we important anymore?
It hurts to know that we aren't number one,
and never will be.
`A cliche ending -- the word "almost" doesn't sound like the best choice to use here.

Overall, it was okay. I feel like the biggest thing is that you need to work on your syllabication -- b ecause that's what's really scrweing with your flow. The piece was raw; emotions were there, but I felt like you were at a lost for words while trying to describe how you felt; the vocabulary, not too great at times, but it did keep my attention, which is good. Just read it over, do a little editing here and there, and it'll be a GREAT poem instead of just ordinary. Try showing some, instead of telling all -- that ALWAYS does the trick. I do look forward to reading more from you though.

--..MiNDYY

You start off rhyming, but it trails off. I think it would have been better to force the rhymes than to just stop them completely. I don't know if you were rhyming on purpose or not in the first place, but it really threw me off.

I lov this poem! i can see were your coming from! my dad thought that partying and getting messed was more important than being with his family! so he just left and i couldn't be happier at this point!

I think your poem is good, well writen and i can relate to parts aswell, you have a talent well done hun keep it up Cx 5/5