Lifeline

by debbylyn   Mar 1, 2008


Shooting stars embroider dreams
Cloud collage not what it seems
Ocean waves wash printed sand
Lifeline breaks on wrinkled hand

Snake river carves diverging path
Staid rocks transform in windy wrath
Fallen leaves feed promised Spring
Fresh bouquet a new love brings

Nestled warmth 'neath sunset's nod
Forging steps where none have trod
Eyes transformed in mirrored light
Open wide, force-feed the night

Buds on thorns, all caution shed
Storms of visions cast in red
Future bursts with brilliant hues
Wealth of treasure then ensues

Oasis beckons parchment tongue
Awakened senses drowning young
Fortress built to time withstand
Lifeline breaks on wrinkled hand

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  • 16 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    Good write, i really enjoyed the rhyming. it was a well thought poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I didn't really like what was being said, but the words and rhymes themselves were great. I espcially liked the part about force-feeding the night.

    Brad

  • 16 years ago

    by Barry

    Well! I think you're wonderful
    I don't think your poem is dull either!!!
    Some just would not know perfection if it smacked them in the face....still you have to be kind to the blind as my Pa always said

    You are.....
    Poem was just wonderful!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexa Eudis

    Very nice, very nice indeed

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    Wow...

    This is simply amazing from the first to the last line. I am truly speechless.

    Your choice of words is superb and the atmosphere that you created is breathtaking. You did great job with rhymes, too and created flawless flow in each stanza.
    I can't express how deeply this poem touched me. It holds simple yet endlessly captivating beauty in every priceless line.
    Amazingly done.
    I can't chose my favorite part, every stanza is fantastic.
    Keep writing!

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