Comments : Lifeline

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Deb
    You did such a fantastic job on this challenge. Your imagery and word choices are amazing.

    Shooting stars embroider dreams
    Cloud collage not what it seems
    Ocean waves wash printed sand
    Lifeline breaks on wrinkled hand

    I love this stanza. The feelings that go through the mind while reading your words take me away to a different place.
    ~Bravo~
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    That was so pretty and full of captivating words! I enjoyed the flow and rhyme.
    Charisma*

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Debbie,

    You never cease to amaze me!
    What a beautiful job you have done on this challenge..

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by Lu

    I simply can not choose a favorite stanza because well .... they are all brilliant

    It's as though you dipped a magical pen in ink and painted a picture because the imagery is amazing!

    Lifeline breaks on wrinkled hand
    ^^^
    I love how this line ends the beginning and last stanza ....
    Such a unique write Debbie, the title fits so perfectly.

  • 9 years ago

    by Elapsed

    What a brilliant read!! Really enjoyed this heart moving poem, awesome word usage and imagery through out!!.. Fantastic!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Although this was a rather well written poem, I didn't really like it. The words were great, as was the rhythm, but I just wasn't particularly interested by it. I found it dull. Sorry.

    Brad

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Well as you can see Brad...this is a wonderful poem....Congrats Debbie :)

  • 9 years ago

    by desiring love

    Nice

  • 9 years ago

    by ilu

    What an amazing poem!!!.....Excellent choice of words!!!!Keep it up..You go girl..!!!5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by StandStill

    This is amazing!

  • 9 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    What a beautiful poem!!.. each stanza and every line was so beautifully written.. amazing job! but u already know that =) ... great poem keep it up!

  • 9 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Great job i like this one , although i feel not much follow you in the entire peome ambience but i like it

  • 9 years ago

    by Gooberz

    Hmm i never heard a poem quite like it, its quite good 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Kelsie

    I really dig this poem, i like your use of repitition, this poem is very well written. 5/5

    great job.

  • 9 years ago

    by Sora Lynn

    I hope i can write this good one day! ur great at what you do.

  • 9 years ago

    by blind soul

    That was really good!

  • 9 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Like a medieval incantation....

  • 9 years ago

    by Sarah

    Great poem
    keep it up
    xo!

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Wow!!! that's a very good poem here... you show strong emotions and nice words... gud luck

  • 9 years ago

    by XxBR0K3NxX

    WOW. THiiS POEM WAS EXCELLENT!
    YOUR CHOiiCE OF WORDS AND HOW
    THEY FLOWED TOGETHER NiiCELY WAS
    EXTRAORDiiNARY. GREAT WORK!