I loved it! I very, very, very rarely give out 5/5s, but this was brilliant, and so I had to. I loved the spin of a well known story, and it was done is such a playful, relaxed and yet overdramatic way. You had great rhythm, great ryhmes, a great story and great words...this piece was/is fantastic!
P.S. I'll be honest with you, I was expecting to dislike your piece because you're a very decorated member, which in my experience, doesn't always mean you're a good writer, and usually means you just ass kiss everyone so everyone votes you highly, but I can see you've clearly got talent and I sincerely apologise. Though I still haven't ruled out that you're a ass kisser, lol.
P.P.S. Sorry your personal life itsn't going great, believe me, I know how that feels, I've been going through the same thing, since I was 12. Good luck though. I hope you're life goes better than mine...it can't get much worse, lol.
AHAHAH I JUST HAVE TO COMMENT Again babe! this poem was so cool tome cause it just iz. ya digg!?
lol. I WANT TO READ THIS TO MY LITTLE K- PRE STUDENTS THEY WILL LOVE IT GEM YOU GOT DANGEROUS TALENT NO LIE, I THINK YOU SHOULD WRITE A POEM FOR YOUR VOWEL ON YOUR WEDDING DAY.... YOUR BOYFRIEND SOON TO BE HUSBAND WILL LOVE IT. =]