Simple short and to the point....it was very different than anything I've ever read. It was good and and an okay flow....you got to your point very quickly and easily! Good job

I liked the shortness of it, it was short enough to keep someone interested but long enough to hold meaning and purpose. I also quite liked the use of the elipses (...) but I think you should work on more of a pattern for such a short poem, like in the first stanza you repeated the first two words, but failed to do that in the three others.
Overall, a nice, quick, short, read.

This poem is a little confusing. The concept is nice, but you must remember that not any topic can make a decent poem. The rhymes here aren't shown and the stanza's are confusing. Just because of the unique subject 4/5

It's a good poem, but I think it needs to be bit longer. In the second stanza, I think there's a word missing there, but I'm not sure. It's good though. Good job, but I think it could've been better. 4/5

.:CiNdY:.

Hmmmm
nice idea for a poem... i think u can make something outstanding out of it.
now it seems to be just a draft..
u can probably describe your feelings, add some poetic descriptive words and images, you know...
what i didn't like about it was how it the first 6 lines you talk to your mind and in the last 2 lines u suddenly talk to God. Maybe here u could put some lines where u don't approach to anyony just describe your emotions, just to separate these 2 "monologues"

ok well i won't rate it now, like i wouldn't taste dough for a cake. "cook" your poem, make it brilliant, and then i will))) coz i know there is potential in it

good luck))

Well short definately but the words were strong and radiant, I have to say, that it was a very intriguing style and it was quite enjoyable although rather dark

I like the way this poem asks questions the whole way though but you could have expanded it more and added more emotion
but still i give it a 4/5

Very nice poem. I sense much feeling behind it. I do feel that you could have used different words & more description and emotion, but I give it 4/5.

I really liked this... You wrote it so beautifully for how short it was! It had great detail to it... Maybe 1 more stanza would've been good too, but its a great poem either way! 5/5

Very simplistic. good. I think that you could have put a little more thought and effort into it. 4/5

Okay, so you've got a good topic, but I think you need to go into more detail. There's some poems that can work with the short lines and few stanza's, but this is definitely not one of them. A vampire's mind is a complicated thing. Go into more detail about how a vampire blood lust over powers his senses. How it feels and tastes when draining a person dry, be more descriptive.

why you are vampiric?
why you are evil...?
^^ It should be "Why are you vampiric?" and "Whu are you evil...?"

I hope this helps you out a bit.

Keep writing!
Cayce

It's all right. Not bad but not exactly my type of poems. It's just my taste in poetry though. I'll give it a three.

Mind, mind
oh my vampiric mind
^^interesting start!

Why you forced me
to suck human's blood...?
^^who forced you?

why are you vampiric?
why are you evil...?
^^wait who?!

Oh god please tell me,
how I make him civil...?
^^ Good ending!!

You keep the reader asking questions it is a very good way to keep us intruiged! 5/5

I don't like "civil". Maybe another word?

This was an interesting poem. The flow if it was good and the rhyme somewhat good. The poem kept asking questions which I thought was good as well. Good Job.

It was short indeed but it was straight and into the point. and i love poems with questions which makes this piece even better. nicely done once again

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

Once again its very repetative and simple and not that I don't like that style its just your poem is to short. You would be a much better writer if you took more time on your poems, made them longer with more detail. I gave this a 4/5. nice job

Though short and dark it seemed to satify my parasitic mind

I wasn't a big fan of this one. I think you could do so much better with the concept. It's not the length that bothered me but the fact that you repeated yourself so much and used very simple words. There was nothing that made this stand out to me. Keep working on it hun. Nik

Another short write. But this one was much better than the others. Sometimes it's nice to keep it simple. Good job. 4/5