Comments : Perfect Harmony

  • 16 years ago

    by c 0 n f u s e d

    I like it and also the notebook :) best romantic movie ever .

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    Absolutely stunning.
    The second stanza seemed a little choppy when the second line and fourth line ended the same way...but maybe that's just me.
    It was a gorgeous poem though.
    I loved the Notebook, and wanted to do something like what you did here, and felt I would never do it justice...
    Well, you definitely did.
    5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    Very nice. It brought a little tear to my eye, mainly because it reminded me a little of my boyfriend. The Notebook was a good movie, though I've only seen half of it.

  • 16 years ago

    by CWG

    This was a beautiful poem, very well written. It brought tears to my eyes. It's very nice to know that men like you exist outside of the movies!:)

  • 16 years ago

    by SpEcIaLmE

    Wow this was well written i love the emotion it is so strong :)
    the flow was pretty good but it could have been a bit better
    overall it was a great job
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Perfectly and Beautfully written.
    The emotion in this poem was very overwhelming and I couldnt help but to re-read these two lines:
    "We held tight as I said, "When I'm with you I feel heaven."
    and then our body and soul became one...."
    ^^absolutely stunning =}
    The language, voice, and vocabulary were perfect throughout the whole piece. Very good job =}
    5/5

    xxPaSsIoNaTe kIsSeSxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Omg that truly made me cry)))))) the story is so touching and moving
    how you make a reader intrigued is brilliant

    but i just feel you need to work a bit on a ryhm because when you read this poem out, it sounds like a story not poem.
    if i have more concrete suggestions on this, i'll write you.

    this poem is so beautiful and moving, and a deep meaning hides behind the plot, i guess i understood the message of the poem that for deep sincere love nothing is impossible. and if u improve ryhming the poem will become just perfect. but it's still brilliant the way it is now

    5/5 and i add it to my favs

  • 16 years ago

    by xxxlOvElY sWeEtHeArTxxx

    Unforgetable moments, OMG i have a few of my own..this poem sings to my heart..i felt every word.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxxlOvElY sWeEtHeArTxxx

    Unforgetable moments, OMG i have a few of my own..this poem sings to my heart..i felt every word.

  • 16 years ago

    by Men

    Ok so yes I am going to agree with everyone and say that your poem was sweet and beautiful.

    However, I am not sure that this was your intention, but I think you should be consistent with your rhyme scheme.

    You start from abcc then abcb then abac, and then to internal rhythm.

    Other than that the story that you weave in your poem was beautiful, and that your flow was quite flawless.

    Great Work

    Men

  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    YOUR A WONDERFUL DEEP EMOTIONAL GREAT WRITER YOUR WORDS TOUCHED ME TRULY I ALMOST CRIED, I GOT VERY TEARY EYED I LOVE GOOD LOVE POEMS AND I LOVE GOOD LONG POEMS AND YOU ARE OUTSTANDING KEEP WRITING !!..=]

    YOUNGFLO*

  • 16 years ago

    by AJ

    All i can say is great job, it was marvelous (sp?) lol 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Huh... Good poem... I like it...
    Keep up this good work :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    This poem was beautiful, and beautifully written! The flow was great, the word choice was beautiful, and the concept was amazing! "Beautiful" describes this poem the best! Great write, 5/5

  • WOW man, I loved it so much I voted for it in the weekly poetry contest... that almost brought a tear to my eye, like for real! :) Great job man, 5/5 and a vote for weekly poem :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Birgit

    I haven't seen the Notebook, but this poem is very beautiful.. =] So I guess I should see the movie some time soon.
    Anyway, again Marc, nice work. I like how you take the lines you've said and put it in this poem. It's original and puts even more emotion in it than just normal poems =]
    Also, the first stanza, is really catchy, is so adorable that it makes you want to keep on reading ^^
    Good job!
    5/5
    x

  • 15 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    Lovely inspiration Marc... Nicely written ...

    keep writing

    Best wishz..

    ...Karan

  • 15 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Wonderful words, beautiful thoughts, gentle emotions. I liked this poem and its fingers that worked them selves into me when putting myself in the writers mind while reading this. Nice and cool runnings.

  • 15 years ago

    by jane

    Omg one of the best ive read in awile ur an amazing writer.....brilliant

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    As all the other reviews have said lol this poem is excellent.
    It's one of the best poems iv'e seen on here in awhile and i enjoyed reding it, the flow was excellent as was the choice of wording
    =]