Broken Promises and Ugly Lies

by Jayden   Mar 6, 2008


You said you'd never do that to me again
You promised you wouldn't break my heart again
You told me you didn't want to hurt me again
You said it was just because of her and how crazy your life had gotten
You said you'd always be there, no matter what

And i believed every word you spoke

But you lied

You've broken my heart again
And it wasn't because of her, or your life
You're not there anymore
And yes you've hurt me, AGAIN

I forgave you, then you turned around and threw it in my face
I gave you whatever you wanted,
even though you didn't deserve it

So here's to you and your lies and broken promises
I gave you your second chance and you blew it

I wanted us to work
I wanted us to be friends
I wanted us to back how we used to be

But that didn't happen
and you wasted your second chance
I'm through with you
You don't deserve anything you've ever gotten
and you don't deserve
Me!

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  • 16 years ago

    by noha

    Waw , strong, nice flow, and i love when you say you dont deserve me, good work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sara Ann

    First off YOU GO GIRL, YOU TELL HIM. Also this is an amazing poem that really makes you feel hate, betral that you must have been feeling when you wrote it. Also you have a really neat style of writing. I generaly go with 4 lines per stanza and it is great to see someone use a different tecniqe so effectively, good job, and great work. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Well I could definately feel the anger and disappointment throught the poem (towards the other person)
    Although i have some suggestions to make the poem better:

    For this stanza

    "You've broken my heart again
    And it wasn't because of her or your life
    Your not there anymore
    And yes you've hurt me again"

    it should be "You're" in the third line.
    And I think you should add a comma after
    "And it wasn't because of her,"
    for pause effect.
    Also, maybe put the last "again" into caps.
    For more of a dramatic effect.

    Then for this line:
    "So hears to you and your lies and broken promises"
    it should be
    "So here's to you and your lies and broken promises"

    And then for this:
    "I wanted us to back like how we used to be"
    it should be
    "I wanted us to go back to how we used to be"

    AND:

    "I'm threw with you"
    it should be
    "I'm through with you"

    And I think the last word in the poem "Me"
    you need to capitolize the "e"
    so it would be
    "ME"

    That's all I've got for you, I hope that I helped.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by FallingAngel

    Tell him, love the poem,great work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jahieda

    TELL HIM GIRL.
    i like this

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